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IELTS Band 9 sample essay

Band 9 Sample answers are useful as study guides for IELTS preparation for the IELTS Writing Task 2 essay – especially for a band 9 IELTS essay. Having access to previously completed work that you can have confidence in will show you what you are missing!

Take a look at these sample task 2 essay questions to help you prepare for your exam.

Use the following IELTS sample essay and its explanations to see how close you are to a band 9 in your IELTS writing essay!

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Examples of Band 9 Essays

IELTS Writing Task 2 Essay Sample Question and Answer(1)

Why is this IELTS Essay a Band 9?

5 Tips for a Band 9 IELTS Essay

Sample IELTS Writing Task 2 Question and Answer(2)

Sample IELTS Writing Task 2 Question and Answer (3)

Useful Definitions of Advanced Vocabulary Used

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IELTS essay task 2: evaluation criteria

IELTS writing tests are evaluated across 4 areas when your band score is calculated:

  • Task achievement  – To what extent does the examinee address all parts of the task with a fully developed position, inclusive of fully extended and well supported ideas?
  • Coherence and cohesion  – Does the candidate logically organise the information and ideas? Is the entire essay cohesive with a logical progression of ideas?
  • Lexical resource  – To what extent does the examinee use a wide range of vocabulary with accuracy? Do they demonstrate sophistication regarding the use of lexical items?
  • Grammatical range and accuracy  – Does the examinee use a range of grammatical structures accurately? Examples of these can be the use of complex sentences with sophisticated clauses instead of simple sentences with a repetitive structure:

Example : Students cannot use phones. They affect development > students are not allowed to use mobile phones in class due to possible distractions.

The British Council (the administrator of the IELTS) outlines 9 different bands of performance for each of the above dimensions here. Your scores in each of these dimensions are averaged to determine your overall band for your essay.

Let's take a look at an example essay that scored as band 9 and then we'll dig into each of these four areas to see why it received that score. It's very important to understand what the IELTS examiner is looking for.

These four criteria are used in our new online essay checker that gives you an estimated band score (free).

IELTS essay sample question (1)

Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

IELTS sample essay answer (1)

Parents throughout the world place spend time reading with their offspring to prepare them for school where their literacy skills are further developed; however, recent research suggests that focusing on reading at an early age can be detrimental, and participating in fun activities would be far more beneficial. I am a strong advocate of this approach, and the benefits of it will be covered in this essay.

A fundamental reason for this is that there is no biological age for reading, and pushing infants to acquire this skill before they are ready could have repercussions. For example, in the UK, many boys are reluctant readers, possibly because of being forced to read, and this turned them off reading. By focusing on other activities and developing other skills such as creativity and imagination, when they are ready to read, they usually acquire this skill rapidly.

In addition, the importance of encouraging creativity and developing a child's imagination must be acknowledged. Through play, youngsters develop social and cognitive skills, for example, they are more likely to learn vocabulary through context rather than learning it from a book.

Furthermore, play allows youngsters to mature emotionally, and gain self-confidence. There is no scientific research which suggests reading at a young age is essential for a child's development, moreover, evidence suggests the reverse is true. In Finland, early years' education focuses on playing.

Reading is only encouraged if a child shows an interest in developing this skill. This self-directed approach certainly does not result in Finnish school leavers falling behind their foreign counterparts. In fact, Finland was ranked the sixth-best in the world in terms of reading.

Despite being a supporter of this non-reading approach, I strongly recommend incorporating bedtime stories into a child's daily routine. However, reading as a regular daytime activity should be swapped for something which allows the child to develop other skills.

Why is this essay a band 9?

Task achievement.

According to the IELTS Writing Band Descriptors, an essay is Band 9 for Task Achievement if it:

  • Fully addresses  all parts of the task
  • Presents a  fully developed  position in answer to the question with relevant, fully extended and well supported ideas.

In order to score well on Task Achievement, the most important thing is  to make sure you respond to what is being asked of you . Is the prompt asking for an opinion, a discussion of a problem, a solution to a problem, or some combination of these? If you provide an opinion and not a solution when you're being asked for a solution, you're not going to score well in this area. Read the question carefully!

The prompt for this essay asks:  “To what extent do you agree [with the previous statement]? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.”  It wants an opinion – with support!

This essay addresses all parts of this task. The opinion is included in the introduction to make the writer's position clear, and then the following paragraphs support the writer's position with examples and justifications. Overall, the response is full and relevant and each of the points is detailed and connected to the thesis.

Coherence and cohesion

Think of this as “How well does the essay flow? Is it easy to follow and does it all tie together?” The exact characteristics for a Band 9 C&C score are that an essay:

  • Uses cohesion in such a way that it attracts no attention
  • Skilfully manages paragraphing

Note the specific wording “it attracts no attention.” The goal here is for things to sound natural and not forced. How do you connect your ideas (ensure cohesion) without it sounding forced? I think there are 2 possible ways:

  • Explain your ideas in a logical order so that you don't need many linking words . This is probably what you do when writing in your own language.
  • Use easy linking words like and, but, also, firstly, secondly, finally, for example. These are so common that they attract almost no attention.

This IELTS Sample essay does a good job of this – you'll notice that each paragraph naturally (logically) follows the one prior, providing additional support for the original opinion, and some simple linking words –  in addition, furthermore  (both paragraph 2) and  moreover  (paragraph 3) – are used throughout. These are all good discourse markers that show what is coming next adds to the argument and are slightly more sophisticated than firstly, secondly, and thirdly but don't come across as being forced.

The other aspect to scoring high in C&C is ensuring an essay is well-structured. What do I mean by that? A well-structured essay has a good introduction, body paragraphs that are easy to follow and connect with one another, and a good conclusion. Each body paragraph should also have its own topic sentence and support and then smoothly transition to the next paragraph.

Our sample IELTS essay has a “simple but good” introduction in which it shows that the examinee has knowledge of the topic and clearly states the writer's position to set up the rest of the essay. The paragraphs all have topic sentences, which are then supported by examples, and are easy to follow. The main body and conclusion relate back to the thesis in the introduction.

A note on conclusions…  there are two schools of thought when it comes to how to conclude an IELTS essay. One is to conclude with one simple sentence so that you spend more time perfecting your main body paragraphs. The other is to wrap up with two sentences, once which includes a small prediction (ie, how you think things might turn out) as a way to show the examiner that you know how to correctly use another tense (which will help boost your GR&A score – more on that in a minute). Either is fine, just don't forget your conclusion!

Taking time to plan out and organise your response  before  you start writing is an extremely important step in scoring well in Coherence and Cohesion for your IELTS essay – make sure you do so to ensure your essay is well structured and reads cohesively when you're done!

Lexical resource

Scoring well in the  Lexical Resource  dimension is all about (correctly) showing off your vocabulary. The description for a Band 9 here is:

  • Uses a wide range of vocabulary with very natural and sophisticated control of lexical features, rare minor errors occur only as ‘slips'

Collocations,  topic-specific  vocabulary  and  phrasal  verbs  are the name of the game here. To score well, an examinee needs to show that they have a wide-ranging vocabulary and they know how to use it.

Our sample essay does a solid job of showing off a  range of vocabulary  – you'll notice that while the essay frequently refers to children, the writer employs different vocabulary ( infants, youngsters, offspring, counterparts ) to do so.

Note : it is highly likely that you will need to refer to people/children in your IELTS Writing task 2 , so make sure that you have lots of different words to use to refer to them.

IELTS examiners do not like to see the words  “people,” “children”  over and over again! The same goes for the word “ important ” – make sure you have plenty of alternative phrases ( essential  and  vital  are both used in our sample essay).

Other examples of a  wide-ranging vocabulary  in our essay include using  rapidly  in place of  quickly ,  mature  instead of develop,  repercussions  to indicate a negative result, and  acquire  in place of learn.

Our sample essay also does a good job of using  collocations  – some examples include  “fundamental reason,” “reluctant readers” “social and cognitive skills,” “learn vocabulary through context,”  and  “strongly recommend.”

The correct use of  phrasal  verbs  also demonstrates one's grasp of English – because of the semantics involved, they are sometimes one of the most difficult things for English language learners to master. Our essay writer correctly uses a few of these including “ turned them off”  and  “falling behind .”

One note here: students preparing for the IELTS  often ask if they should use  idioms  (like “you're barking up the wrong tree”) in their essays to further demonstrate their grasp of the language. In my opinion, no, you shouldn't. Idioms are informal by nature and not appropriate for a written essay of this type. Stick with demonstrating your range of vocabulary and your ability to use phrasal  verbs  correctly!

Grammatical range and accuracy

The final scoring dimension is related to grammar and grammatical structures – do you know them and can you correctly use them?

The Band 9 description for grammatical range and accuracy :

  • Uses a wide range of structures with full flexibility and accuracy; rare minor errors occur only as slips

Note that there is nothing in the scoring criteria about including specific tenses or sentence constructions. Your main objective should be to reduce the number of mistakes that you make. An essay that contains no mistakes is likely to get a 9 for grammar, regardless of the types of sentence that it may or may not contain.

If there is a nice mix of long and short sentences in your IELTS essays, you'll meet the grammar requirements. Remember, as soon as you write a “long” sentence you are naturally going to use connectives (linking words), which will make the sentence ‘compound' or ‘complex'. So, don't think too much about the grammar – just aim to reduce the number of mistakes that you make, and try to include a few longer sentences.

Some examples from the sample essay that illustrate the writer's grammatical range and help it easily score as a band 9 include:

  • appropriate uses of modal verbs in the passive voice:  “are further developed,” “will be covered,” “must be acknowledged,” “should be swapped.”
  • “ to focus on ” is correctly followed by an -ing form
  • However  is used correctly with a semicolon before it and a comma after
  • “ because of ,” “rather than,” and are correctly followed by -ing verbs

5 Tips for an IELTS writing task 2 band 9 essay

1. answer what is being asked.

Make sure you read the prompt carefully and answer the essay questions you’re being asked. I can’t emphasise this enough. In order to score well on Task Achievement, you need to appropriately and fully address the task.

2. Plan your work, work your plan.

Plan out your essay before you start writing. What are your main points? What order are you going to make them in? How do they link together? Having a well organised essay is key scoring high marks for Coherence and Cohesion. Many IELTS test-takers will spend up to 10 minutes planning out their essay before they start writing. A few points to keep in mind:

  • Your essay should have 4-5 paragraphs in total and at least 250 words
  • Plan your supporting points so that they don’t go off-topic

3. Write, review, re-write

Write your essay, review it and then “rewrite” it. Don’t focus on getting things perfect upfront – you don’t want to waste 15 minutes trying to come up with the perfect synonym for something and then not have enough time to finish your full essay! Write your essay first (an unwritten essay won’t score well at all!) and then go back through it to see how you can improve it. Some essay questions to ask yourself at this stage:

  • Are there places where you can swap out stronger words for weaker ones in order to improve your Lexical Resource score?
  • Are there places where you can phrase things differently in order to illustrate your Grammatical Range?

4. Where are you falling?

To pass with a Band 9 the reality is you need two sets of skills:

  • Exam skills
  • Language skills

What are exam skills?

Can you plan an effective essay? Quickly? Ideally between 3-5 minutes.

Can you think of enough ideas and examples to put in the essay plan?

Firstly you need to discover which of these skills you need. To do this you get feedback, either from an online IELTS essay checker or for more detailed feedback you can use our IELTS essay correction service .

The main goal is to find out which part of the essay writing process is costing you the most amount of time, points or stress.

Personally, the easiest and fastest way to get these skills is to do an online course specialised in training students with these skills. Here is a good course for that.

5. Better language skills?

A lot of students fail the  IELTS exam or end up with a band in their IELTS writing test that does not meet their requirements. Also, a significant number of students look to Google to search for “IELTS Writing tips” or “Task two tips”. These tips might be helpful but sometimes the real problem might just be in their general language or writing skills.

Writing error-free perfect sentences is probably much more challenging than students think, especially under exam conditions i.e in 40 minutes with immense pressure to pass. These can result in often mixed outcomes with both positive or negative development occurring at one and the same time.

One of the most important ways to improve language skills is to receive feedback. This can be by asking someone to review written work and will expose the positive or negative development mentioned earlier. This is very common and not something that is a negative issue overall.

Have a look at our essay correction service that will review your essays for you and help you improve and pass the IELTS test.

Here is a checklist of what is needed for reaching Band 9, it includes what the examiner wants to see, and what to do to write at a Band 9 level.

Sample IELTS writing task 2 question (2)

Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions.

IELTS writing task 2: essay sample answer (2)

The global phenomenon of urbanisation from the beginning of industrialisation to the present day has brought opportunity and prosperity, albeit at a cost in the quality of life. With an increasing city population, the complexity of the challenges also increases for the globe as well as the local community. Therefore, the causes and effects of these on the current generation, as well as possible solutions are outlined below.

The causes for the decrease in the quality of life are paradoxically the prosperity endowed on such metropolitan centres. Their growth is largely due to the increase of opportunities on offer, which in turn increases their attractiveness, essentially they are trapped in a positive self-reinforcing cycle. While such developments have a positive impact on immediate economic objectives, it perpetuates behaviours that can have a negative impact in the long term.

However, this eventually leads to a decrease in the quality of life as the city can experience overcrowding, exorbitant property prices, and increased vulnerability to terrorist attacks. For example, the density of London makes it a more efficient place to attack, when compared to a smaller city such as Bradford.

Therefore, due to continuous growth and prosperity, urban citizens, especially the less well off, often experience a lower standard of living. Even greater than this, are the relevant examples of natural disasters such as recent fires in Australia, which brought about unprecedented weather patterns resulting in the destruction of wild and rare animals. These effects are far from uniform, as they affect different countries in ways unseen by previous generations.

Considering the solutions, greater investment in public transport would ease traffic congestion, as would bike lanes. In theory, this would reduce air pollution, and possibly improve the well-being of the population if they did adopt a more active lifestyle and cycle to work. While these solutions are local, if adopted globally, would affect individuals and many countries alike. A collective effort is needed to use social networks and other media to highlight the negative effect of urbanisation as well as the negative sides of the wider ramifications on the population.

To conclude, while it could be argued that urbanisation advantages outweigh the disadvantages, a wealthy city attracts a large population inflow, which then causes pressure on existing infrastructure and security. Various solutions exist to mitigate such drawbacks, such as social networks being used to raise awareness of such negative impacts on many countries, nevertheless an indefinite solution has yet to be found.

Sample IELTS writing task 2 question (3)

Social media marketing can influence what consumers buy. Do you agree or disagree? To what extent do you agree?

IELTS writing task 2: essay sample answer (3)

Since the introduction of social media applications in the early 2000's the world has become a much smaller place. Social media applications such as Facebook, Instagram and Twitter have become information sources for a majority of the global market.

As such, it could be argued that marketing, which happens to be a source of information accessible on these platforms can influence the consumers who use them. This notion is further aided by the rise in online retail stores that conduct the bulk of their transactions online. This makes it easier for the consumer to purchase from anywhere in the world.

As a consumer on social media, you are constantly bombarded with advertisements of various products that are specifically designed to catch your attention. This means that most of the adverts on your news feeds aren't random and will almost always feature something you have previously searched online or something currently popular or trending. Given the fact that most social media users are young consumers who are influenced by current trends and happenings, these adverts will almost always catch their eye.

The habit of sharing, retweeting and liking also ensure that these adverts get around, quite fast. As such, when an advert does reach your news feed you have already probably seen it on your friend's news feed. The truth is, adverts are a form of information and with the age of the internet, information spreads faster than a wildfire.

Therefore, it only makes sense that in the era and age of technology, globalization and the need to be trendy, social media marketing can influence what consumers buy.

Useful definitions of advanced vocabulary used

IELTS Writing Task 2: Useful definition

Paradoxically

Equivalent sentences

“For example, it is said, the CCTV in London has foiled many potential attacks, and therefore greatly increased the security of its citizens.” Could also be said as:

“Statistics show that CCTV used in London has scuppered many a terrorist plot, massively contributing to the security of its citizens.”

More Equivalent sentences Various solutions exist to mitigate such drawbacks, nevertheless an indefinite solution has yet to be found.

Could also be said as:

A myriad of partial fixes exist for these issues, yet a permanent solution is still out of reach.

There are many methods employed to quell this flow of people, but still a reliable solution has not been discovered.

IELTS writing task 2: vocabulary booster

The highlighted sections in the following paragraph represent key phrases or words relating to this topic. Study this paragraph to expand your vocabulary knowledge on this topic:

The modern urban environment varies considerably depending on both the city that produces it and the individual who perceives it; Each experiencing a unique blend of at least some economic success, varying degrees of localised or wider deprivation and periods of growth and decline. Environmental factors permitting, a city will provide well for its citizens as long as it can properly manage the execution of social policy.

Globalisation presents many challenges for those responsible for the policy as large inflows of people are to be expected in a place of success and therefore opportunity; The ensuing mixing of cultures has far-reaching social consequences that can affect how the city is both presented and perceived.

Considerably Con·sid·er·a·ble (kən-sĭd′ər-ə-bəl) adj. 1. Large in amount, extent, or degree: a writer of considerable influence. 2. Worthy of consideration; significant: The economy was a considerable issue in the campaign.

Perceive Per·ceive (pər-sēv′) tr.v. per·ceived, per·ceiv·ing, per·ceives 1a. To become aware of (something) directly through any of the senses, especially sight or hearing: We could perceive three figures in the fog. 1b. To cause or allow the mind to become aware of (a stimulus): The ear perceives sounds. 2. To achieve understanding of; apprehend: Einstein perceived that energy and matter are equivalent . 3. To regard or consider; deem: an old technology that is still perceived as useful; a politician who is perceived to be untrustworthy.

Deprivation Dep·ri·va·tion (dĕp′rə-vā′shən) n. 1. The/an act or an instance of depriving; Loss . 2. The state of being deprived: social deprivation; a cycle of deprivation and violence.

“The town’s generally miserable appearance led her to perceive it as a place of considerable deprivation.”

IELTS writing task 2: further reading

There are many more writing samples for you to explore.

The BBC has great pages on discursive writing and general writing , also, this video is good for learning how to give examples.

You can even read a sample Harvard essay aimed at preparing students for academic writing.

Remember! Select a text that is appropriate for your level. Choosing the wrong text can result in a loss of confidence and feeling bad never helped anyone to learn anything quickly!

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Introduction to ielts band 9 essay, ielts band 9 essay samples:, how to write a 9 band writing task 2 essay.

  • IELTS Band 9 Essay Sample Question:
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Most Common Types of 9 Band Writing Task 2 Essay Questions:

Approaching different types of ielts writing task 2 questions:, a step-by-step guide to writing a 9 band writing task 2 essay.

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IELTS Band 9 Essay: Marking Criteria/Scheme

Band 9 writing essay samples, wrapping it up.

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The IELTS Writing Test consists of 2 tasks, each worth 25% of the total score. IELTS Writing Task 1 is an essay of at least 150 words, and IELTS Writing Task 2 is an essay of at least 250 words. To write an IELTS Band 9 Essay, you should aim to fulfill all 4 marking criteria: Task Response, Vocabulary, Grammatical Accuracy, and Coherence and Cohesion.

Achieving an IELTS Band 9 in IELTS Writing Task 2

To score a band 9 in your IELTS Writing essay, you must fully address all parts of the task with well-supported ideas, demonstrate cohesion, skillful paragraphing, and showcase a wide range of vocabulary and grammar with minimal errors.

Task Response

Coherence & Cohesion

Lexical Resources

Grammatical Range & Accuracy structures with full flexibility and accuracy; rare minor errors occur only as 'slips.'

Scoring a Band 9 in IELTS Writing Task 2 is challenging, but with the right help, it's achievable. In this article, you'll find IELTS Band 9 essay samples that show you exactly what top-level band 9 essays look like. These IELTS band 9 samples will help you understand the structure, Vocabulary , and techniques needed to write high-scoring IELTS writing task 2 essays. Whether you want to improve your grammar, coherence , or argument, these IELTS Band 9 essays are a great resource for IELTS learners aiming for the IELTS Band Score .

Looking to score a Band 9 in IELTS Writing Task 2? Check out these IELTS Band 9 essay samples that showcase the structure, vocabulary, and techniques needed to achieve the highest score.

Nowadays, people are free to have a lot of options related to food. Some of them argue that eating meat or fish have a fundamentally beneficial influence on our planet and our own life, while many others contend that it has a detrimental effect as well. To my way of thinking, meat and fish are one of the most important foods for our normal health, so it is harmful to refuse it absolutely.

Firstly, meat and fish provide a lot of cardinal vitamins. It is extremely necessary for our vital processes such as growth and physiological essence. Many food scientists have found out that there are several types of vitamins and proteins that could only be obtained from meat and fish. For example, Salmon fish generate certain types of oils that are beneficial for our blood circulation process. And then, red meat is needed as the source of nutrition for the human’s brain.

Moreover, it has been evidently proved that animal products are a rich source of Zinc and other micronutrients as well as the macronutrients that are quintessential to survive in an optimum way. Not incorporating it into the regular dietary patterns may imperil one’s risk to get emaciated and debilitated. It is found through the research that the proportion of people who intake meat products are found to be at a lower risk of falling sick to multiple disorders such as, Anaemia, Muscular Dystrophy, Cataract, etc. Moreover, the people undergoing vigorous lifestyle routines can’t efficiently make it to the mark just by accentuating the vegetarian diet as it lacks the adequacy of proteins as compared to the sources such as chicken, fish, etc.

Some people owing to various reasons such as ethical foregrounds, extinction of animals, etc. However, if pondered upon pragmatically, having nutrition-rich nonvegetarian products are ineluctable for healthier anatomy and morphology.

Conclusively, it could thus be stated that one must plan to incorporate the quality meal on their platter encompassing all the food sources, veggies or meat and should have an intent of a sound body enveloping exercises and a healthy diet.

In several nations, there has been a notable uptick in crimes committed by teenagers. This surge can be attributed to various factors that require close examination, along with the urgent need for effective solutions.

One key driver behind the rise in juvenile crime rates is the dearth of positive engagement and recreational opportunities available to young individuals. Idle time, combined with limited outlets for creativity and skill development, can steer impressionable minds toward delinquency. Additionally, socioeconomic disparities prevalent in some communities can foster frustration and desperation, pushing adolescents toward criminal activities for survival or escape.

The pervasive influence of modern technology also plays a role. The advent of social media exposes vulnerable teenagers to harmful content, glamourising criminal behavior and normalizing its consequences. Peer pressure and the quest for social validation can entice adolescents into mimicking these actions, perpetuating the cycle of juvenile delinquency.

To tackle this issue, a multifaceted approach is crucial. Governments should invest in comprehensive after-school programs and community centers that offer engaging activities. This not only deters criminal involvement but also promotes skill acquisition and character development.

Education also plays a pivotal role. Schools should incorporate life skills and ethical education into their curriculum, promoting values such as empathy and responsible decision-making. Parental involvement and awareness campaigns are vital for guiding adolescents away from criminal activities.

Collaboration between law enforcement, schools, social services, and NGOs is essential. By emphasizing prevention over punishment, authorities can provide troubled teenagers with rehabilitation opportunities.

In conclusion, the rise in teenage crimes in some countries results from factors like lack of engagement, socioeconomic disparities, and technology. Mitigation requires a holistic approach, including educational reforms, community engagement, parental guidance, and collaboration among stakeholders. Only through such efforts can we hope to reverse this trend and create a safer future for our youth.

The proliferation of English as a “global language” has become a significant contemporary issue, raising debates about whether its advantages outweigh its disadvantages. In this essay, I will argue that the benefits of English as a global language far surpass the drawbacks.

One of the paramount advantages of English as a global language is enhanced communication on an international scale. In an increasingly interconnected world, English serves as a lingua franca, bridging cultural and linguistic gaps. This facilitates seamless interactions in various fields, from commerce and diplomacy to academia and technology. Consequently, people from diverse backgrounds can exchange ideas and collaborate more effectively, propelling progress and innovation.

Moreover, English’s global status opens doors to educational and economic opportunities. Proficiency in English grants individuals access to a wealth of information, academic resources, and job prospects, transcending geographical boundaries. Many of the world’s leading universities offer programs in English, enabling students to pursue their academic aspirations without linguistic barriers. Additionally, English proficiency is often a prerequisite in the global job market, increasing employability and international mobility.

However, critics argue that the dominance of English can undermine linguistic diversity and cultural heritage. While this concern is valid, it’s important to note that the coexistence of English with other languages is possible. Efforts to preserve and promote native languages can be pursued alongside English language education, ensuring the enrichment of cultural identities.

In conclusion, the advantages of English as a global language clearly outweigh the disadvantages. Its role in fostering effective communication, driving educational and economic opportunities, and promoting cross-cultural understanding cannot be underestimated. By embracing English as a means of global communication while preserving linguistic diversity, societies can reap the benefits of a more connected and collaborative world.

The 21st century has ignited widespread optimism, seen as a pivotal era for global positive transformation. I largely share in this optimism, acknowledging that realizing change demands collective commitment and proactive efforts from all levels of society.

Advancements in technology, global interconnectedness, and heightened awareness of critical issues present unprecedented opportunities for progress. Collaborative endeavors can magnify the impact of initiatives aimed at addressing challenges like climate change, poverty, and inequality.

However, optimism must be balanced with a realistic understanding of persistent challenges such as political conflicts and environmental degradation. Achieving change necessitates the collaboration of governments, businesses, civil society, and individuals.

In this century, I envision a world prioritizing sustainability. Responsible resource management and a swift shift to renewable energy sources are essential. Universal access to education, healthcare, and economic opportunities must be pursued to eliminate inequalities.

Furthermore, this era offers a chance to champion social justice and embrace diversity. Promoting empathy and understanding among cultures can foster a harmonious global community.

In conclusion, the 21st century’s potential for positive change is substantial, but it requires pragmatic efforts. By fostering collaboration, prioritizing sustainability, and championing social justice, we can shape an era of progress and shared prosperity. Our collective actions will determine the trajectory of the 21st century, steering it towards a world aligned with our hopeful aspirations.

The swift expansion of major cities worldwide has ushered in a range of issues, particularly impacting the youth residing within these urban hubs. This essay examines the challenges faced by young urbanites and proposes solutions to alleviate these concerns.

A key predicament young individuals encounter in cities is the escalating cost of living. High rents and living expenses can lead to financial strain, limiting their ability to save or invest in education.

Moreover, insufficient infrastructure and public services are common urban issues. Overcrowded transportation systems, inadequate healthcare, and subpar education facilities affect the overall quality of life for young residents.

To address these concerns, governments and planners should prioritize affordable housing programs and improved public services. Enabling better access to housing can ease financial burdens, while enhancing transportation, healthcare, and education infrastructure can significantly elevate the urban experience for young people.

Additionally, promoting sustainable practices such as creating pedestrian-friendly zones and expanding green spaces can combat environmental challenges while encouraging healthier lifestyles.

Furthermore, fostering a conducive environment for innovation and entrepreneurship can generate job opportunities and empower the youth. Governments can incentivize startups and provide skill-building programs to equip them for success.

In conclusion, the rapid urban growth poses challenges for young city inhabitants, including financial strain and inadequate services. Yet, with targeted efforts like affordable housing initiatives, enhanced infrastructure, sustainable urban planning, and support for entrepreneurship, these issues can be effectively tackled. Through collaborative endeavors, young individuals can thrive in urban settings and actively contribute to the betterment of their cities.

Now that you’ve gone through IELTS band 9 essay samples, let’s look at how to write a band 9 essay for writing task 2 questions .

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Here’s one sample band 9 IELTS Writing task 2 essay for you to look at:

“Violence has been a part of society long before movies and video games were developed. While the first movie was projected in the 1890s and the first video games were developed in the 1950s, there were great wars like the War of Spanish Succession, the American Revolutionary War, the French Revolutionary War and many others in the 16th and early 17th century. So I think that movies and video games have very little influence on people’s behavior. In this following essay, I would like to present my view with proper evidence.”

‘The rates of crime and violence have been on the rise for quite some time now. It will be wrong to condemn movies and video games because every conscious person knows that they are meant only for entertainment. Sometimes, we might like to imitate the actions shown. But we know that it is almost impossible to do it without expert help and imaginary circumstances. So, it is somewhat unnecessary to think that an activity that is not a habit and requires hypothetical circumstances can affect our behavior.

Secondly, in my opinion, crimes and violence depend on a particular state of mind. Even if a person plays video games on a daily basis, he/she will not commit a crime unless he/she has prior psychological issues. For example, an educated person with a positive set of mind who plays games like “Garena Free Fire” or “Pubg” or watches action movies like “Final Destination” or “Rambo” may not become violent or commit crimes. But, people who are already depressed, had a violent past or have psychological issues may be influenced. So, it is not the particular influence of the movies or the video games. They can be triggered by any violent event around them.

Playing video games and continuously watching movies may become addictive to most people. But, it is not evidently proved that any source of brutal entertainment can aggravate crime. Rather, the escapist world created by them can be a source of relaxation for most people.

‘To conclude, history itself proves that violence has always been a part of our civilization, even before the advent of games and movies. Furthermore, the alarming rise of crime and violence is mostly the result of the frustration created by the modern lifestyle and games and movies are a very insignificant part of it.’

The most common types of band 9 Writing task 2 essay questions are:

  • Opinion Essay
  • Discussion Essay
  • Advantages or Disadvantages Essay
  • Agree or Disagree Essay
  • Problem and Solution Essay
  • Two-Part Questions Essay
  • Direct Question Essay

So based on the type of question you get, you have to approach it accordingly:

1. Opinion Essay

  • Paraphrase the question.
  • Clearly state your opinion.
  • Present reasons supporting your opinion with examples.
  • Provide additional reasons or address counter-arguments.
  • Summarize your opinion and main points.

2. Discussion Essay

  • Mention that you will discuss both viewpoints.
  • Discuss the first viewpoint with examples.
  • Discuss the second viewpoint with examples.
  • Summarize the discussion.
  • Provide your opinion if asked.

3. Advantages or Disadvantages Essay

  • Briefly mention that you will discuss the advantages and disadvantages.
  • Discuss the advantages with supporting details and examples.
  • Discuss the disadvantages with supporting details and examples.
  • Summarize key points.
  • State your overall view if required.

4. Agree or Disagree Essay

  • Paraphrase the statement.
  • Clearly state whether you agree or disagree.
  • Present arguments supporting your stance with evidence.
  • Provide additional arguments or address counter-arguments.
  • Summarize your stance and key points.

5. Problem and Solution Essay

  • Outline the problem.
  • Describe the problem and explain its causes.
  • Propose solutions and discuss their implementation.
  • Summarize the problem and solutions.
  • Highlight their importance.

6. Two-Part Questions Essay

  • Paraphrase the two parts of the question.
  • Outline what you will cover.
  • Address the first part with explanations and examples.
  • Address the second part with explanations and examples.
  • Summarize your answers and provide final reflections.

7. Direct Question Essay

  • Outline the specific questions you will answer.
  • Answer the first question directly with explanations and examples.
  • Answer the second question directly with explanations and examples.
  • Summarize your answers and any final thoughts.

Let’s Look at how to write a 9 Band Writing Task 2 essay with our easy-to-follow step-by-step guide.

Question: “Some people believe that the violence shown in movies and video games has a damaging effect on society. While others believe that these don’t have an influence on people’s behavior. What is your opinion?”

1. Understand the Task

  • Analyze the Question: Determine what you are being asked. Identify the different perspectives and understand that this is an opinion essay where you must clearly state your stance.

2. Decide Your Opinion and Supporting Arguments

  • Formulate Your Position: Decide whether you agree or disagree with the statement about media violence. Assess whether you believe it impacts society.
  • Support Your View: Choose reasons and evidence that back up your stance. Ensure you can argue your position effectively.

3. Plan Your Essay Structure

Reword the prompt to demonstrate understanding. : Clearly state your viewpoint. “Violence has been a part of society long before movies and video games were developed. While the first movie was projected in the 1890s and the first video games were developed in the 1950s, there were great wars like the War of Spanish Succession, the American Revolutionary War, the French Revolutionary War and many others in the 16th and early 17th century. So I think that movies and video games have very little influence on people’s behavior. In this following essay, I would like to present my view with proper evidence.”

Provide detailed explanations and examples. : “The rise in crime rates cannot be solely attributed to media violence, as these forms of entertainment are designed for escapism and are not typically associated with real-life violence.”

Explore further reasons or counter-arguments. : “The correlation between media consumption and violent behavior is weak. Psychological factors such as existing mental health issues play a more significant role in influencing behavior.”

Discuss other aspects or implications if relevant. : “While excessive consumption of media can be problematic, there is no substantial evidence linking it directly to increased crime rates.” Recap the key arguments made in your essay. Reinforce your stance with a final reflection. “In summary, media violence is a minor factor compared to the broader historical and psychological influences on societal behavior. The evidence suggests that while media may affect individuals, its overall impact on crime rates is minimal.”

By following this structured approach, you can craft a compelling essay that meets the criteria for a Band 9 in IELTS Writing Task 2.

IELTS Band 9 Writing Task 2 Sample Questions & Answers

Here are some sample Band 9 IELTS essay answers on various topics:

IELTS Band 9 Essay Sample 1: Social Media:

Nowadays, with the rise in violence and crime all around us, some people believe that the violence shown in movies and video games has an influence, while others believe that it doesn’t. I believe that media violence does not have that much of an effect on the rising crime in society.

Firstly, although I agree that the rate of crime and violence around us has increased lately, I don’t think we can blame the media violence for that. I am sure any responsible citizen who watches a movie or plays a video game with violence in it, is aware that it is there only for the sake of entertainment. That being said, in any case, if any individual does cause harm to his society, it would have to be due to his character or his circumstance. So in my opinion, a reasonable and conscious person would not cause harm to others, regardless of what he sees in any form of media.

Moreover, movies and video games actually provide escapism into a virtual world where people can relax and release their anxiety. After a long day at work, when someone comes back home and watches a movie or plays a video game, they automatically forget about all their worries and tensions and recover from the frustration they may have. Personally, I enjoy playing video games as soon as I get back home from work.

Finally, despite some people believing otherwise, I don’t believe that the violence shown in the media plays a role in a person’s character or in the increase of the violence and crime in our society. In fact, the content in the movies and videos can actually help in reducing the frustration and stress factor.

IELTS Band 9 Essay Sample 2: Parenting

It is undoubtedly true that all parents want their children to become good citizens and there’s a wide belief that parents should teach and instill good behavior in their children. On the contrary, some people opine that school is the perfect place to learn good manners. In my perception, I firmly believe that parents are more responsible.

On the one hand, the bond between parents and their children is unique that nurtures holistic growth and development. Parents are the primary teachers and home is the first school for the children where they learn to develop their personality. Children are gullible and under the sole custody of parents, so they imitate their parent’s behavior and imbibe their qualities into them in almost all aspects of their early life. Hence, parents have an undeniable role in teaching concepts of good and evil and moral values to their children.

On the other hand, a group of people vehemently argue that schools should take responsibility for teaching and inculcating good qualities like obedience, honesty, resilience, hard-working, consistency, etc as the Children spend most of their time in school. In addition, teachers have a significant influence on children. They play an equally essential role in molding the character of a child. Besides teaching academic lessons, teachers can instill moral and ethical values in children that would help the children in their future lives.

To sum up, I’d conclude that both entities have their unique impact on children. But schools cannot replace the role and responsibility of parents in making a child become a responsible person as schools deal with a vast number of children and the mindset of every child varies. Also, children are more attached to their parents, so their behavior reflects their parents.

IELTS Band 9 Essay Sample 3: Education

It is a well-known fact that the curriculum followed by a majority of schools around the world consists of a diverse range of subjects. Thus, until a student reaches a particular stage in their education, they are required to study all of these disciplines and become equally proficient in each one of them. It is often a matter of debate whether the efforts invested by students in subjects that they are not interested in is a waste of time. In my opinion, I disagree with the idea that acquiring knowledge on subjects that are outside a person’s preferences is impractical. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on the topic and support my views with relevant instances.

The rationale behind this framework of providing students with knowledge on an array of disciplines from a primary school level is quite simple in nature. Firstly, it is important to understand that one of the prime reasons for training school children in a variety of subjects is to facilitate the development of their minds. When the information received and processed by youngsters is diversified, it helps them to expand their cognitive abilities to a great extent.

Furthermore, having a wide assortment of subjects in the daily curriculum helps students understand these different fields of study more personally. Although this experience might not have immediate advantages, the expertise gained has immense benefits in the future. One of the merits of having an understanding of a wide set of disciplines is the ability to make better and more informed decisions when choosing a particular area of study for higher education. This facility is difficult to possess if the school curriculum is specialized in nature.

Nevertheless, it is important to acknowledge the level of academic prowess that can be developed, if the education system follows a more exclusive approach. That being said, such an approach has various intrinsic limitations and may create complicated hurdles for students.

In conclusion, I would like to end by saying that the methodology followed by the school system is a product of years of revision and refinement. Thus, even if a subject is being taught to students that might not be intellectually pleasing, it can be safely assumed that it has a valid purpose of being a part of the educational programme.

IELTS Band 9 Essay Sample 4: News Media

Specific individuals believe that newspapers and television channels that broadcast current affairs have a terrible influence on society these days. I am going to discuss both the merits and demerits of mass media to reach a conclusion.

News channels have swayed society in many positive ways. First, the usefulness of the media, which provides news almost instantaneously, is undeniable. It gives one a feeling that they belong to a small global village. Secondly, it fills up the gap between the government and the people. Most people would never meet a prime minister or president in our lives, but anyone regularly watching the news or reading newspapers would undoubtedly know about them.

Furthermore, the media plays an essential role in spreading different cultures and lifestyles to the modern world. Today, the popularity of Indian culture and tradition across the globe is the best possible example of the media’s enormous impact. Finally, news channels also help provide justice to the commoner when his rights are denied.

Regardless, there are some drawbacks to mass media. It is a deadly weapon for spreading fake news, directly impacting personal lives. For example, some celebrities suffer from depression due to the rumours spread in their names. Moreover, there are contents like violence, or prostitution, which are unsuitable for the children. They get easily tempted by those, which affects their mental stability. Thus children must have limited access to these. It can also make them addicted to the media.

There are compelling arguments for and against the positive and negative development a news media could bring. Some people believe that the media dominantly brings adverse impacts on society. In my opinion, the media could have a positive effect if used wisely and appropriately.

IELTS Band 9 Essay Sample 5: Work from Home/ Remote Work

The notion of working from home was an obscure practice and has only been a viable choice with the help of technological advancements in the recent past. Amidst the catastrophe of the COVID-19 pandemic in 2020, most organizations entitled their employees to the privilege of being able to work remotely, and this system has been prevalent ever since. Nevertheless, it has been debatable whether this approach is beneficial only to the employees or both the employers and employees. I believe that this approach has advantages for both parties concerned. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my views on the topic and justify them with relevant examples.

Firstly, employers enjoy the salient benefit when workers are operating from their residence is the exemption of expenses like power, work equipment, maintenance, etc. These are mandatory facilities that need to be provided in an office. Since workers utilize their resources when working from home, this leads to tremendous costs-reduction on the management’s part, which can be termed as an indirect source of profit.

Secondly, an individual can come across various interruptions and distractions in an office from colleagues, supervisors, and other elements in a work environment, which can be detrimental to productivity. Furthermore, daily commutes from a person’s residence to their workplace can be exhausting, which can also lead to a decline in the work rate. However, such hindrances are less commonplace when the ‘work from home’ system is followed and a person can work at full efficiency leading to better results.

On the other hand, this practice presents the workforce with a considerable amount of liberty that can be misused easily, and there has been an increase in workload as there are no specific working hours. Nonetheless, with proper communication, the benefits that can be reaped from this work method are immense for the entire firm.

Finally, I would like to conclude that improvements in technology have opened up more convenient avenues for productivity. Therefore, as long as the management and employees are putting efforts to work together, the profits will be enjoyed by both.

To achieve a Band 9 in your IELTS writing essay, you must excel in the following four marking criteria :

  • Address all parts of the question thoroughly.
  • Provide well-supported and relevant ideas.
  • Organize your information logically.
  • Use appropriate linking words to connect ideas smoothly.
  • Demonstrate a wide range of vocabulary with accurate usage.
  • Avoid mistakes and use sophisticated language naturally.
  • Employ a variety of grammatical structures.
  • Ensure accuracy and minimal grammatical errors.

Word Count Guidelines

  • Aim for at least 260 words to achieve a Band 9.
  • Use the sample essay’s length (287 words) as a guide.
  • Ensure your essay adheres to the structure and meets all marking criteria.

By focusing on these criteria and adhering to the word count guidelines, you’ll be well on your way to writing a high-scoring IELTS essay.

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Is it even possible to write a Band 9 essay in IELTS?

Well, it is certainly possible. In fact, not only have I scored a band 9 in writing myself, I have also helped several of my students score band 9 in writing too. If you want to learn the art and science behind scoring an IELTS writing Band 9 (or if you just want to improve your score by a few bands), read on.

Every day we receive 100's of IELTS essays for correction from our students. Our experienced IELTS tutors go over every single word of the essay and mark them based on the criteria specified in the IELTS Band Score Descriptors.

Since a lot of IELTS students struggle in the writing section, we thought we would list out the IELTS Band 9 essay samples that we have seen from our IELTS Twenty20 Course students so far. An important thing to note is that the students who wrote these essays went through several feedback rounds with other essay topics where they perfected the art of writing a good IELTS Task 2 essay. So don't get intimidated if you think you cannot write such essays. Everyone struggles with it and it takes time to improve.

But, before we look at the IELTS Band 9 essay samples, let's first understand how to write the perfect IELTS essay.

How to write an IELTS Band 9 essay?

In IELTS Writing Task 2, you are given brief details of an opinion, an argument or a problem, and have to produce an extended piece of discursive writing (an essay) in response.

You need to write at least 250 words and should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Let's look at a step by step process on how to write a great writing task 2 essay every time ... no matter what the topic.

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What are the different types of IELTS essays?

Understand the IELTS writing task 2 marking criteria

When IELTS examiners mark your essays they refer to the IELTS writing band descriptors . Here's what the band descriptors mean in plain English.

Identify the main topic of the essay

  • If you incorrectly identify the main idea then you  CANNOT  score above Band 4.
  • If you present a main idea that is not sufficiently developed and supported by examples then you  CANNOT  score above Band 6.

Identify all parts of the task

  • If you address only some parts of the task and not others then you  CANNOT  score above Band 5.
  • Even if you identify all parts of the task correctly but fail to cover each of them fully you  WILL NOT   be able to score above Band 6.

Present a position/opinion

  • If you do not express a clear position then you  CANNOT  score above Band 5.
  • If you do not write a conclusion at the end you  CANNOT  score above Band 5.
  • If your conclusion is unclear or repetitive then you  CANNOT  score above Band 6.

In other words, if you want to score Band 7+, you need to consistently, accurately and appropriately demonstrate the use of all 4 points highlighted above.

Did you think that was all ... nope there's more ...

Even if you do all of the above there is still a chance that you may not be able to score above Band 7. In order to really ensure Band 7+ you need to master  the 4 C’s of Essay Writing .

The 4 C's of Essay Writing

Cohesion  - refers to words and phrases that help link ideas together.For example:

  • Because of this ....
  • It is clear that ...
  • It can be seen ... etc.

Conciseness  - Long sentences do not mean more marks. Run-on sentences will often cause you to lose marks in this area. There are three sentence structures you should be using:

  • Simple sentence  - Contains a subject and a verb and expresses a complete thought. For Example - The teacher returned the homework.
  • Complex sentences  -  Has an independent clause (simple sentence) joined by one or more dependent clauses (cannot stand alone as a sentence) For Example - The teacher returned the homework after she noticed the error.
  • Compound sentences  - Two simple sentences joined by a coordinator (ex. for, and, or, yet, so). For Example - The teacher returned the homework so everyone got to go home early.

Coherence  - How easy is your essay to understand? In order to improve your coherence, proper grammar is a must. You are not there while the essay is being marked, so your ideas need to be clear and easy to understand. Using the cohesive phrases mentioned earlier, can improve the coherence of your essay.

Composition  - The structure of your essay (introduction paragraph, 2-3 body paragraphs, and a conclusion paragraph). A good introduction includes a little background on the topic, a thesis statement, and a preview of the 2-3 main points of your essay. Each body paragraph should include a topic sentence illustrating your point, an example of your point and how it ties into your topic sentence, as well as a concluding sentence that ties this point into your thesis.

Conclusions should reiterate your two or three main ideas from your body paragraphs an restate your thesis again using different words than before. To end your conclusion, you should give a prediction or recommendation on the essay topic.

Note: Remember a proper paragraph has at least 3-4 sentences. Each paragraph should revolve around a main idea, and when you start a new idea, you should start a new paragraph.

How to identify the main topic and all parts of the IELTS essay?

This tutorial will teach you the key steps to identify the main topic and all parts of the IELTS Writing Task 2 question.

Follow the 3 steps mentioned in the video and you will never go wrong.

How to brainstorm and organise your ideas for IELTS writing task 2?

Once you have identified the topic and question parts for your writing task, the next step is to brainstorm ideas that should become part of your essay. In order to get a good band score it is not enough to just create a list of ideas - you need to extend and explain each of those ideas in detail. Lets look at our example from before:

This tutorial will teach you how to brainstorm and extend your ideas for IELTS Writing Task 2 question.

Tips for writing an IELTS band 9 essay

Here's a check list for Writing Task 2. Follow this check list and you are guaranteed to score Band 7+ in IELTS Writing.

  • First off, read & understand the topic of the essay for Writing Task 2.
  • Identify all the key parts of the question.
  • Brainstorm and organise your ideas to ensure that each of your ideas is fully explained and well supported with examples.
  • If the question asks for your opinion, make sure you state it clearly and you don’t contradict that view throughout the rest of the essay.
  • Learn the structure of an essay: Introduction , body paragraphs, conclusion
  • Do not copy the question word for word for your introduction or else those words will be deducted from your total word count. Instead always paraphrase the question in your own words.
  • You MUST write a conclusion/overview at the end. Don’t add new information in your conclusion. Instead, rephrase your key points, and give a strong ending sentence that ties everything together.
  • Always write in a formal tone and use it consistently throughout the essay.
  • Do not use bullet points or short notes.
  • Use a wide range of grammatical structures and vocabulary.
  • Remember to follow the 4 C's of essay writing.
  • Practice and learn synonyms so your writing has a range of vocabulary and does not become repetitive.
  • Write at least 250 words. Anything less, you will lose marks.Ideally the essay should be about 250-280 words.
  • Write neatly, as the person who is marking your essay should be able to easily read and understand what you have written.
  • Do Task 2 first, as it is worth twice as much as Task 1, so priority should be placed here.

Practice makes perfect. Write as many practice essays as you can, and have them marked by an English teacher for mistakes.

  • Practice timing yourself at home, and stick to the allotted time for each section. During the real test, bring a watch and manage your time carefully.
  • Check your writing. If you finish with extra time, look over your essay for any spelling, grammar, or other mistakes you might find.

Popular Topics for Writing Task 2

Topics for IELTS writing task 2 are usually related to some issue or problem that is currently affecting society and you need to discuss it. In recent IELTS exams, topics have mostly dealt with:

  • Environment
  • Animal rights
  • The Internet

Frequently asked questions about IELTS Writing Task 2

Q: Will I lose marks if I write too many words (400-500) in my essay? 

A: There is no penalty for writing more than 250 words for writing task 2. However, there are also no extra marks for writing more. In fact, the more you write, the more you may end up making spelling or grammar mistakes. It is much better to write around 280 words within 35 minutes and spend the last 5 minutes reviewing your work for mistakes.

Q: Will I lose marks if my handwriting is very poor? 

A: In IELTS, handwriting does not affect your scores directly. The scoring rubric does not have any points for handwriting. However, it affects your score indirectly. i.e if your handwriting is illegible, the examiner will think that you have misspelled a word and will mark you lower on lexical resources. The examiner will not give you the benefit of doubt if she is not sure about the words you have written.

Moreover, handwriting also affects the overall impression on the examiner. Remember that IELTS examiners are humans and like all humans they form their first impressions looking at your handwriting. The clearer your work, the better first impression you will make on the examiner.

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Finally, here are the 7 examples of band 9 essays.

IELTS Writing Sample Essay 1 -Fresh water demand causes and measures

IELTS Writing Sample Essay 2 - Forests are the lungs of the earth

IELTS Writing Sample Essay 3 - Job and money

IELTS Writing Sample Essay 4 - Aim of University Education

IELTS Writing Sample Essay 5 - International Tourism

IELTS Writing Sample Essay 6 - Image is a more powerful way of Communicating

IELTS Writing Sample Essay 7 - Work or travel between finishing high school and starting university

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100 Band 7, 8 + 9 IELTS Writing Task 2 Essay Samples

Are you preparing for the IELTS Writing Task 2 exam and looking for some inspiration and guidance? Look no further! In this blog post, we have compiled a list of 100 Band 7, 8, and 9 IELTS Writing Task 2 essay samples to help you improve your writing skills and boost your chances of achieving a high score on the exam. These sample essays cover a wide range of topics, from education and technology to health and environment, and are a valuable resource for students at all levels of proficiency. Whether you’re just starting to prepare for the IELTS or are looking to fine-tune your writing skills, this blog post is an essential guide to acing your next Writing Task 2 test. So, please check out our IELTS sample essays and start preparing for the test today! Please note that these are real student samples. They contain mistakes because mistakes are totally normal for Band 7, 8, and even 9 students. All of the essays below have been checked by more than one former examiner, and all of the students achieved a Band 7, 8, or 9 in their real IELTS test.

Task 2 Samples

Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that children should be taught by their parents about how to function as useful members of society, while others believe that sending children to educational institutions is the best way for them to study this. Although the latter opinion can be beneficial in some cases, I believe that family upbringing plays a more important role in educating children to be good parts of the community.

Schools can be considered suitable places for children to learn to be good citizens. With standardized educational methods, schools can foster children’s cognitive development so that they are able to contribute to society in the future. For example, Trung Vuong school and Vinschool are well known for having nurtured successful alumni such as Professor Ngo Bao, Professor Nguyen Hung who have devoted their talents to the development of the country. However, these people only represent a small fraction of the total number of students attending schools, and thus sending children to schools cannot be the best method of educating them to be good members of society. 

I believe that parents play a more important role in teaching them how to be good citizens. In Vietnam, the average class size is 20 students, which makes it difficult for educators to provide proper schooling for each student. One to one lessons at home, on the other hand, allow children to progress faster. Furthermore, parents form stronger bonds with their offspring and thus, it is easier for them to shape children’s personalities at an early age. For example, by telling stories such as Robin Hood, Cinderella before bedtime, parents can instil a sense of compassion and integrity into them. These children are likely to become good members of society when they grow up.

In conclusion, although sending children to schools can be seen as a way of teaching them how to be good citizens, I believe that domestic upbringing has a bigger impact on determining who they are in the future.

There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couples who decide to do this.

An increasing number of married couples around the world choosing to remain childless. The main benefits of not having a child for couples are that they can focus on their careers and have more time for themselves. The main drawbacks are that they could not fit into their peers’ group and have no one to look after them when they get old. 

One primary advantage of remaining childless for married couples is that they can focus on their work. This is because they have less responsibility and distractions in their lives compared to the couples that have a child. Another advantage of this is that they have more spare time. Looking after a child is a full-time job for parents and taking most of their time, while child-free couples have lots of free time after work. For example, many couples stop going out late with their friends after having a child as they have to stay at home for looking after their children. 

One disadvantage of couples deciding not to have children is that they can struggle to hang with their peers after most of them have children. Most parents prefer to spend more time with other couples that have children as well. Moreover, do not have anyone to look after them in their elderliness is another disadvantage. Children are the ones who take care of their parents when they get old because their parents did the same for them when they were young. For instance, the vast majority of the people who live in care homes have no child. 

In conclusion, the main benefits of staying child-free for couples are that they can be more career-oriented and have more free time for themselves, and the main drawbacks are that they could have problems about fitting into their friends’ group and having no one to take care of them when they become older.

Some would say that parents should teach their offspring how to be good members of society, while others are of the opinion that school is the best in this regard. This essay agrees with the latter point and will show that, despite the practical experiences that parents give their children, school lessons can give deep insights into what it takes to be good citizens.

Some believe that parents can educate their children about being good members of society based on their life experiences. This is because the life experiences that parents can give their children are straightforward, down-to-earth, and so they can easily apply what their parents teach them in reality. For example, many children in Thailand become more polite, honest, and caring to everyone as a direct result of the practical lessons that their parents give them at home. However, I believe that parents now are so busy and do not spend much time with their children teaching them.

Lessons at school can provide children with valuable insights into being good members of society. In class, students can receive lessons about different traits of a truly good person that society needs, and then they put what they learn into practice by creating real-life problems and solving them together. For instance, after receiving lessons in civic education at school, many Vietnamese students are more willing to help their neighbors and even strangers, and they feel extremely happy after doing something good for others. For this reason, I believe that school lessons are more influential to young children. 

In conclusion, despite the practical experiences that parents can give their children at home, this essay believes that school lessons can help students deepen their understanding of being good members of society.

In many professional sports, there is an increase in the number of athletes using banned substances to improve their performance.

What are the causes of the phenomenon and what are some of the possible solutions?

In many professional sports, it is becoming commonplace for athletes to abuse prohibited substances to boost their overall performance. This essay will discuss how stiff competition and lax testing systems are the main cause of this problem, and the most suitable solutions are imposing heavier punishments on violators and revamping testing facilities.

The main cause of this problem is the fierce competition that exists in any sports. In other words, most many professional athletes feel that they have to take substances like steroids to give themselves an advantage over other strong opponents. Another reason is the lack of strictness in testing procedures. Many athletes who take advantage of banned substances can still get off scot-free due to the holes in testing systems. For example, a high-profile mix martial artist named Jon John who is notorious for using PED described how easy it was to get away with cheating in an interview in 2015.

A viable solution is to heavily punish lawbreakers. If sports clubs and establishments raise the fine for using banned substances, many athletes will think twice before making attempt to cheat. Another the way to deal with this issue is to upgrade testing amenities. This will eradicate any holes existing in the system and ensure that the test result is highly accurate. For instance, after the UFC had made major investments to provide their staff with the latest testing equipment, many fighters in their organization got caught.

In conclusion, strong competition and ineffective testing systems are the main cause of this problem, and the most suitable solutions are enforcing harsher punishments on violators and reforming testing facilities.

Details of politicians’ private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is thought that the information regarding politicians’ personal lives should not be shared in print media. This essay strongly agrees with this suggestion because publishing these details could be harmful to their families, and obtaining this type of information might require breaking the law.

First and foremost, what makes that the details related to private aspects of politicians’ lives should not be shared in newspapers is that it could be harmful not only to these individuals but also to their families. This is because revealing some details from their personal lives could expose them to unwanted comments or allegations, which might lead to a great deal of distress. In Poland, for instance, in 2015, the vice-prime minister committed suicide due to not handling the pressure caused by the paparazzi invading his and his family’s private life.

Furthermore, obtaining this type of information, in most cases, means breaking the law. This is because the right to privacy is one of the most fundamental policies in society, and anyone who wants to access the lives of politicians must obtain their consent. However, not only are paparazzi hired to invade properties belonging to politicians to take photos without their permission, but also politicians’ colleagues and relatives are bribed to share confidential facts from their lives. For instance, an accident in which Princess Diana was killed was partly caused by the paparazzi who followed her car, trying to take photos of her and her boyfriend against their will.

In conclusion, I strongly support the suggestion that politicians’ lives should not be subject to the interest of newspapers because revealing personal facts from politicians lives could destroy their family life and the process of obtaining these details often required wrongdoing.

Some say that music, art and drama are as important as other school subjects, especially at the primary level. Do you agree or disagree? Some people believe that arts-related subjects are as important as other school subjects, especially for primary school children. I totally agree with this statement because this can help children to discover their talents from an early age and can increase their confidence. 

One of the reasons I agree that creative subjects have the same importance as other school courses in primary school is that it allows students to find out their potential talents early on. That is to say, school-age is the most convenient time for students to learn more about their interests by trying different activities as they are young enough to pursue their hobbies. They will probably not have any other chance later in their lives to discover that because they will be busy with difficult exams when they get older. For example, most famous singers were discovered by their music teachers at school from a young age, and they claimed that they could not be that successful if their teachers did not find out their talents when they were young.

Moreover, music, art and drama subjects help students to boost their confidence. That is because creative lessons teach students how to perform in front of lots of people and give them a chance to socialise with other students. As a result, students can realise their real potential and act more confidently. For instance, many psychologists suggest to students who are struggling with social anxiety to take drama lessons as it helps to enhance confidence. 

In conclusion, this essay completely agrees that music, art and drama have the same value as other subjects in primary school because it allows children to discover their hidden talents early on and increases their self-confidence.

Some individuals believe that the right place to teach children how to become good citizens is the school, while others argue that parents should be the ones responsible for that. Although parents might influence their children more than anyone else, I believe that educational institutions are more trained and equipped to teach children how to become successful members of the community. 

Parents influence their children more than anyone else. This is due to the fact that mothers and fathers are the ones who raise and spend most of the time with their children which dramatically influences the way children act and think. If parents act in a good manner, their children will indirectly imitate them. This fortifies the fact that no one might exert such a strong influence on their children. For example, a study in Britain showed that children are two times more influenced by their parents than their teachers. However, I believe that this is not enough and that school should be the place teaching children to become good people in society.

Schools are trained to build good citizens. Teachers spent their undergraduate years studying how to deal with children and train them to become better individuals in their communities. For this reason, educational institutions should be the place where children can safely acquire the needed behaviors to become better individuals in the future. For example, a recent study in the USA showed that 90% of schools train teachers how to help students to become better citizens. For this reason, I believe that the best place to do this is the school.

In conclusion, although parents have a strong influence on their children, I believe that the best place to create better citizens is the school because tutors are trained to do that.

It is argued that newspapers ought not to publish the details of private lives of politicians. This essay strongly disagrees with this view because politicians build a public image through such news and they could be held accountable for any wrongdoings.

On the one hand, politicians can gain public trust by building a positive image through newspapers. Being the focus of media, sometimes details of their personal interests end up on the front pages of newspapers, which allows them to gain popularity among masses, especially when their interests match with the general public. Recently, the pictures of a famous politician of Milan, while playing football with local school children were published in many newspapers, and he instantly became famous among school and college students. Hence, it helps them gain popularity by depicting themselves in a positive way. 

On the other hand, publishing details of private affairs disclose the corruption of politicians and make them accountable. Many politicians usually hold a public office and are entrusted with managing public funds. If they do not spend the money on the wellbeing of people and are involved in corruption, newspapers expose their private life and put them under accountability. For example, when details of the lavish spending of the Mayor of London, while on a vacation, were revealed in the SUN, it prompted questions from many sections of the society, eventually exposing his corruption with the public money. Therefore, it is important that newspapers publish these details.

In conclusion, private matters of politicians should be published in newspaper because it allows them to gain popularity and expose their corrupt affairs.

Some say that music, art and drama are as important as other school subjects, especially at the primary level. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that arts education is as significant as the study of other subjects, especially for primary students. I completely agree with this viewpoint because some educational content could be better illustrated in the forms of arts, and the study of arts is one key consideration which fosters all-rounded growth of young students.

The arts could deliver information to students, especially to those attending primary schools, in a way that words in textbooks sometimes cannot. Children may become bored and tired if they have to read or listen to too much educational content in textbooks. A colorful painting or a catchy song, on the other hand, can be much more appealing and thus more effective in conveying information to these children. For example, the Ghen Covy song has been taught at most schools in Vietnam and has become one of children’s favorite songs. This song has effectively highlighted the importance of hand washing as a means of disease prevention, and has made it easier for many children to remember every step of hand sanitization for its catchy melody and appealing dancing moves.

Furthermore, the study of arts is one factor that contributes to a comprehensive development of young students. While academic subjects focus on children’s cognitive development, arts education help children to develop their social-emotional skills. By singing a song or drawing a picture, these children are likely to express their feelings and nurture their sense of community. For example, thousands of Vietnamese children, who were encouraged by their teaching staff, drew pictures of sunflowers to deliver messages of love and support for pediatric cancer patients.

In conclusion, the arts can sometimes be better at transmitting knowledge than textbooks, and the provision of both academic and arts education is necessary for an all-rounded growth of young students. I firmly believe that the study of arts should never be underestimated in any child educational institution.

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some would argue that all students in universities have to study the subject they like, while others think that they have to only study something useful for their future, for example, those related to science and technology sectors. Although learning about the latter subjects is crucial to secure a good job and salary, I believe that enrollment in whatever subject they favor leads to students being successful in their fields.

Studying science and technology during third-level education makes students able to easily find a job that pays high wages. That is to say, working in the majority of modern workplaces requires up-to-date technological information aiming to improve the quality of work and to compete with others, and, in turn, those employees will earn good remuneration. For instance, many IT graduates from the University of Toronto were able to have high positions and good wages in many renowned business companies. However, I think that the passion for what students study is more important than how much their earnings are in the future.

It is very important for university students to study the subjects they like because this is the reason behind a successful career. That is because the love for this particular subject allows them to go beyond their limits, be creative, and be eager to improve, and, thus, they might be promoted. For instance, many well-known musicians decided to study music because they were passionate about it and this positive spirit helps them climb their professional ladder. Therefore, I support this school of thought because studying a favorite subject is more important.

To conclude, despite the fact that a course in science and technology can provide postgraduates with a good future career and enough income, in my view, studying whatever they prefer is better because this leads to success in their field.

In some countries, younger people are neglecting their right to vote.

What problems does this cause and what are some of the possible solutions?

It is argued that in certain nations youth are not using their right to vote. This would hinder the political change, and it would also result in policies made that are not beneficial for these young people. The most viable solutions would be to create awareness among the younger generation and promote them to participate in politics. 

Not participating in elections would mean that it would be difficult to change the government which is necessary for some countries across the globe. This is because, in any functional democracy, the only way to change the ruling party is by casting votes in the electoral process. Furthermore, if young individuals forge their right to vote, it would result in policies made that do not benefit them. As a result, they would feel that the state is not addressing their concerns and end up leaving the country. For instance, every year thousands of young adults from developing countries immigrate to Europe and North America because they are unhappy with their government’s performance.

One way to tackle these issues is to inform these people about the power of vote. Campaigns should be held in universities, and colleges to educate youth about their political rights. Another solution is to promote these young people to come into politics. Doing this it would ensure their representation and their voices being heard. For example, Nelson Mandela was a young political activist who successfully fought against racism and became the first black President of South Africa.

In conclusion, neglecting to vote by the young generation would delay the necessary government change, and laws made that are not in their favor. However, encouraging youth participation in politics and awareness campaigns can be possible solutions to tackle these problems.

In certain parts of the world, the younger generation is not using their right to vote.

This phenomenon may result in younger people being apathetic toward politics and election results that do not reflect public opinion, and the most viable solutions are to educate younger people about the importance of voting and incentivize them to vote.

One major problem of this is that younger people may adopt an uncaring attitude toward politics. If younger people do not take part in the election, which is the most significant political event, they are unlikely to pay heed to anything related to politics later on. Another issue is that the result of the election might be undermined. Since only older people give their votes, the winner may not be the one that the majority want to put in charge. For example, it is commonly seen in my country that politicians with older supporters tend to win again candidates that appeal to the young since most of them do not give their votes.

One suitable solution for this is to run a public awareness campaign to emphasize to younger people the significance of voting. Once they realize that if they abandon their right to vote, the consequences will be immense, they will change their minds and begin to vote. Another way to overcome this is to provide them with certain incentives to start voting. Many younger people find voting a waste of time and, therefore, if they are given incentives, they are more likely to take the time to vote. For instance, younger people in my country are often given a small amount of money as a way of motivating them to vote.

In conclusion, the problems that may stem from this are younger people’s indifferent attitude toward political matters and an ineffective election, and some ways to deal with them are educating and incentivizing younger people to vote.

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is argued that the sports facilities should be increased in number to improve citizens’ health, while others claim that other initiatives are more essential to be conducted. While I support the idea that installing more sports facilities would help ordinary people to enhance their general health, I am more convinced that other effective measures should be taken. 

On the one hand, people’s general health status could have been improved greatly via exercising. It is proven that working out fastens the amount of oxygen to the brain, helping people be more concentrative and optimistic. Therefore, lack of physical exercise or insufficient physical movements one’s working performance may be impacted and less productive. For example, Hanoi citizens are reported to be healthier than they were because of the availability of exercise equipment right at the local parts. However, I believe that this measure just improves partially not whole the public’s health. 

On the other hand, there is a wide range of conducts to prevents poor health conditions. Improving diet quality is one of the effective measures that should not be neglected. A good physical health is indeed contributed by many elements, and a full nutrient meal makes consumers stronger and strongly resistant to some diseases. In Vietnam, there used to be a program of introducing milk into daily meals to deter malnutrition for children. After 2 years of conducting this campaign, the number of underweight children was minimised noticeably. Therefore, I completely advocate other solutions to implement to warrant the public’s general health. 

In conclusion, although launching more sports facilities would benefit the overall health of citizens, I think that this matter could be addressed better by other methods.

Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

A number of people argue that it is better for boys and girls to get an education from different schools, while others believe that it is more beneficial for children if they attend combined schools. Although studying in separate schools will help boys and girls to focus more on their studies, I believe learning from co-educational institutions will help them to become more social in society. 

On the one hand, when boys and girls attend separate schools, they will spend more time focusing on their studies. This is because there will not be any opposite gender to be attracted to and to get involved in any affairs. The schooling hours will be fully utilised to learn something rather than being diverted from studies and spending time with the ones they might have affair with in the school. For example, in Nepal, students from St. Mary’s Girls School showed a better academic performance than the girls who completed their school years from a co-educational institution. However, I believe that children attending mixed school will learn to be more social in the future.

On the other hand, co-education is more beneficial for children because they will learn some social skills during their school years. This is to say that children of both genders will be allowed to have combined studies and will learn how to deal politely with a person of the opposite sex, an important skill which is highly accepted by society. For example, boys who finished their studies at co-educational schools showed more courtesy towards ladies by offering some help when required. For this reason, it is better for children to attend mixed schools as it helps them to learn essential social skills.

In conclusion, although educating children in separate schools will help them to focus on their studies, I believe that co-education is much better for girls and boys as they will learn essential social skills in school.

Being a celebrity, such as a famous film star or sports personality, brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

Lives of celebrities, like famous movie stars or sports people, bring benefits as well as problems. Although earning huge amounts of money is an advantage for celebrities, I believe the lack of privacy in their lives is a major problem that outweighs the benefit. 

The main advantage for celebrities is that they receive a huge remuneration. That is to say, such people are paid large amounts of money for their efforts or performance. Celebrities usually decide how much they should be paid, and the people who pay them do not negotiate as they are confident in their star value. For example, Avengers star casts were paid in high amounts even before they read the script of the film series because of their previous performances in the older series. However, I think celebrities are also human beings and money cannot replace the happiness or freedom they need in their lives.

One of the downsides of being a celebrity is that it is not possible for them to lead a private life. This means that because of their fame and popularity, they are continuously followed by the media, and by their fans who eagerly wait to know what is happening in their favorite stars’ lives. As such, celebrities lose their freedom and cannot enjoy their personal time with their families or friends. For instance, when Sachin Tendulkar became famous after his remarkable performance in cricket, he claimed that he could not walk down the streets of Mumbai as he used to do in the past. Thus, I believe celebrities cannot be carefree, and they always have to face the media in one or the other way.

To conclude, I think the problem of being a celebrity is that their privacy is interrupted, and this overshadows the benefit of making large amounts of money as a celebrity.

Being a famous person, such as a movie star or sports athlete, has many disadvantages and advantages. Although famous people will earn more money, I believe that there are more drawbacks because famous people will not be safe in public places. 

The biggest advantage is that well-known individuals will earn loads of money. This is because they will get colossal amounts of money from their sponsors for promoting their products, such as mobile phones, laptops or cars. As a result, notable individuals will become affluent around the nation. Floyd Mayweather, for instance, is a famous boxer as well as a wealthy person in the United States of America. Each year he gets around millions of dollars from Burger Kings and Rolls Royal sponsors for promoting their products during boxing matches. However, I believe that famous celebrities face huge problems whenever they go out because their frenzied fans will annoy them.

The major drawback is that famous individuals’ lives will be in danger in common places. This is because their foes will try to harm them whenever they go out either alone or with their family members, such as in parks or malls. As a result, they will have to hire some security guards to protect themselves against vicious-minded individuals. Jennifer Lopez, for instance, always goes out with five bodyguards. The reason is that in the past, some deranged fans attacked her in New York park and broke her left arm. Therefore, I believe that celebrities always face difficulties in common places because someone will assault them. 

In conclusion, although well-known individuals earn big amounts of money from sponsors, notable people’s lives will be in danger because evil-minded people will harm them. For these reasons, I believe that drawbacks are more than benefits.

It is being argued that media houses should not disclose the personal lives of statesmen. I completely agree with this statement because it will not only violate their right to privacy, but also they should focus their resources on more pressing issues that need immediate attention such as poverty.

It is the fundamental right of every human being to have their privacy. Even though they are public figures, their private lives should be away from the eyes of the media. They should only be judged against the service towards their countries and not for what is happening in their day-to-day affairs. The prime example of this can be seen in the Constitution of the USA, which gives its citizens the right to privacy.

In addition to this, it is the responsibility of newspapers to address important matters including poverty. Media can be a very powerful medium, so rather than talking about other people’s life, resources should be diverted towards putting pressure on public officials to engage them in solving real-life problems. Using their influence to the benefit of the general public should be the main focus of newspapers. For example, during the Great Depression, The Guardian was the main voice of people in protesting against the poor living conditions. 

In conclusion, I do not support the argument of newspapers publishing the personal information of government officials. This is because it will result in the violation of their privacy and also the primary focus of news agencies should be to highlight key issues concerning the nation.

Some people say that television is useful for education, while others say it is useful only for entertainment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Television is considered useful for education by some, while others claim that it only serves entertainment purposes. While certain people believe television is only for entertainment as it steals time, this essay claims that it is valuable as educational programs on television can help a child’s intellect.

Some believe television is only useful for entertainment since it takes away time. This is because they feel that children who spend too much time in front of the television may miss out on life’s opportunities and that it is much more productive to spend time with friends, to work on homework, to go outside, or to relax instead of watching television. For example, kids who watch too much television tend to work less on their homework, which results in poor performance in school. However, I would argue that television is important as education programs can aid in boosting children’s intellect.

Educational programs on television can help children become more intelligent. Kids who watch informative and educational shows learn to solve problems and develop strong mental maths skills. For instance, several studies have shown that kids are more likely to outperform their peers on tests when they watch educational shows. Additionally, studies have shown that children who watch cartoons most of the time score less than those who watch educational shows. Therefore, I strongly believe educational shows on television encourage intellectual development in children.

In conclusion, while television is seen as only useful for entertainment because it eats up time, watching informative educational shows on television can develop a child’s intellectual skills.

Being a famous person, for example a popular actor or a sports star, is problematic as well as beneficial. This essay believes that fame has more negative effects because it comes with the cost of being a burden to the star’s family, and it can threaten the star’s mental health.

The first negative effect fame has on the star’s life is the burden it puts on his family. That is not only because of the paparazzi that keep chasing them everywhere they go and eventually putting them at physical risk, but also because of the pink media which posts news about them that completely breach privacy and are often related to intimate relationships. For example, it is very well known how much detrimental the role of paparazzi and pink media was on Princess Diana’s sons and they report that those publications and breaking news scarred them for a lifetime just because they come from a famous family.

The second reason behind the negativity of being a star is that it creates an unsafe environment that may endanger the star’s mental health. Being constantly under the spotlights and lacking the minimum amount of privacy in the person’s life is documented to be detrimental to this latter’s mental health. For instance, the famous movie star Marilyn Monroe is known to have committed suicide because she could not cope with a life with no privacy at all, and the same applies to the famous Egyptian star Souad Husni and many others.

In conclusion, in my opinion, the negative aspects of fame outweigh the positive ones especially because it puts a burden on the star’s family and puts their mental health in danger.

Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

It is becoming more popular in developing nations to see multinational corporations. There are some benefits for this trend such as the progress in the economy they create in these countries and the availability of jobs, however, the shut down of some small local businesses and the lower selling rate of local products can be its drawbacks.

The main advantage of the increasing number of these types of companies is the economic progress. That is to say, if multinational organizations operate in less-developed nations, this can bring wealth which boosts industries, trade, and other aspects of the economy. Moreover, more jobs will be available for the local people. That is because more workers and managers are needed to work for these companies which can be a good opportunity for locals to find a job. For instance, after opening a branch of Apple company in Dubai, many local graduates were thrilled by the good news of being accepted to work under this renowned company. 

However, one of the main disadvantages of this trend is the drop in the selling rate of the local products. That is because of the good reputations and qualities of international items, and, thus, citizens might refrain from buying their local products. Another disadvantage is that some small local shops could be closed. That is due to the unfair competition with these huge strong establishments, and as a result, some might be shut down or go bankrupt. For example, many amateur Syrian entrepreneurs, and after the harsh competition they had with international textile corporation, were forced to close their fabric factories. 

In conclusion, although the advantages of the popularity of multinational organizations in developing countries are the economic progress and the improvement in the job market, nonetheless, its downsides are the drop in the average selling of local products and the closure of some small businesses.

A number of individuals believe that television can help with education, while others feel it is only used for entertaining people. Although entertainment television programs are the most popular programs on TV, this essay argues that television is helpful in education if people utilize it properly.

On the one hand, nowadays, entertainment television programs have become the most well-liked TV programs. That is because those programs give people an escape from their home lives or occupations, and it is also a great way to spend time with. For example, in the United States of America the Ellen Show is one of the most popular shows which has lasted almost twenty years. However, I believe that entertainment television programs are people’s favorite television programs does not mean television cannot be useful for education.

On the other hand, television can be a helpful tool in education if people use it in a proper way. Television can help people to study through informative videos, TV shows, or documents, and those videos can help people form a visual representation of their thoughts. For instance, it can be commonly seen in many schools that teachers introduce TVs in their lectures to help students understand complicated and difficult subjects. For this reason, this essay believes that television is a useful tool for education.

In conclusion, although programs for entertaining people are the most well-liked television programs, I maintain that television is useful for education because it is a helpful tool for education if it is utilized properly.

In many countries, the government prioritises economic growth above all other concerns. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

Economic growth is a sphere that receives more attention than any other national domain in many states all over the world. The principal benefits of this phenomenon are lower unemployment and wealthier citizens, and the main downsides are higher costs of living for most and insufficient support for the poorest. 

On the one hand, what makes that prioritizing economic expansion is beneficial for the public is the fact that fever residents remain unemployed. This is because governments boost establishing various businesses, which will require many workers to operate. In addition, not only does a country become more powerful economically, but also many residents have an opportunity to become affluent. When companies generate more profit, it reflects how much money employees can make. In Poland, for example, 30 years after communism collapsed, average salaries offered for a middle-management position have tripled.

On the other hand, as a country’s economy thrives, costs of living increase. The most compelling reason for that could be the fact that since workers are paid more , their services become more expensive, which results in higher prices of many products. Moreover, in many cases, a state whose main priority is its economy offers little support for those who need it. If authorities believe that a strong economy is of the greatest importance, they are rather reluctant to offer help to those who do not contribute to the nation’s prosperity. To illustrate, when Donald Trump, who was a big advocate of a strong economy, became the president of the USA, the funds for jobless migrants were caught. 

In conclusion, as with anything in life, prioritizing economic growth by authorities has its pros and cons. While more have jobs that allow them to become wealthy, costs of living are going up, and those who need to rely on the social care system are marginalized.

It is argued that parents should be the ones to familiarise their children with basic teachings of morals and ethics and how to implement them to become better individuals in the society, while many believe educational institutes are the best places to learn them from. While parents can pay individual attention to their kids, I believe that schools provide an ideal environment in learning and grooming.

On the one hand, parents serve as role models and they are perfectly capable of paying undivided attention to their kids. That is to say that they can tell their kids stories containing lessons about differentiating right from wrong and good from bad. Furthermore, by demonstrating responsible behaviour, elders are instilling good habits in their young. As a result, children follow their elders and grow up to be better human beings. For example, on the dining table parents should tell their kids to eat quietly and not make unnecessary noises which can develop into a good habit. However , I believe that parents cannot consistently teach and monitor their kids’ behaviour patterns due to lack of time.

On the other hand, educational centres provide a specialised environment for minors in both academic and moral fields. That is to say that a child is more keen to learn and grow when one steps outside the comfort zone. By interacting with fellow students and actively participating in multiple social activities youngsters are able to perform to the best of their abilities. For instance, primary schools around the world include social activities and role plays in their curriculum to teach students how to become model citizens. Therefore, this option is preferable because it benefits the child in the long run as well as the society..

In conclusion, although parents can demonstrate moral teachings to their children in an effective manner, learning them at schools would make them rather more confident and productive members for the community.

In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

Although grievous offences are reducing, some people feel more insecure than they used to. The main reason behind this is the increase of cyber bullying and hate-crimes, and the solution would be to raise the general awareness among the masses and by promulgating new laws.

The primary cause of people not feeling safe than they used to is because the arena of crime has changed. More people are interacting virtually over the internet, which is mostly unregulated. Therefore, people are easily subject to harassment and bullying on social medias. Moreover, people are also subject to hate-crimes which is a consequence of constant portrayal of a certain group of people as evil by the media. For example, labeling the activities of criminals, who professes the Islamic faith, as terrorists has resulted in an increase in hate-crimes against Muslims across America. 

The solution to such problems would be in educating the general people so that they are more aware. This will allow them to act more responsibly. Also, the government can play their part by enacting new laws that addresses the needs of time. This will make their citizens feel more secure because they can have their problems redressed. For instance, the government of Bangladesh recently enacted Digital Security Act, 2018 and Digital Security Rules, 2020 in order to penalize offences that take place in the cyberspace, as crimes like online harassment and cyber bullying was not previously defined as an offence. 

In conclusion, insecurity among some section of the population is still prevailing due to the change in the nature of crimes that are being committed nowadays. However, this can easily be addressed by making people aware and also by making new laws.

Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree?

Although women account for more than 50 per cent of the workforce in developed nations, a number of managerial positions are still occupied by men. Some believe that a certain proportion of these vacancies should be allocated to females. This essay, however, strongly disagrees with this statement because this can discourage qualified men to work hard, and such a policy can encourage organisations to find some wrong ways to outsmart the system.

Reserving a certain proportion of high-level positions for women because of their gender may prevent educated males from making a contribution to the progress of a company. This is because any employee naturally wants to have equal opportunities for promotion irrespective of gender. If males at workplace are deprived of it, they are not motivated to work hard. For example, psychologists claim that the motivation and hard work of subordinates directly hinge on the promotional system of a company. 

Furthermore, imposing a quota will make companies seek for some illegal ways to outwit this regulation since the priority of most companies is to reward employees with high-level positions according to their knowledge and experience, not their genders. Hence, if any law contradicts the policy of a company based on gender, the owners of that company are more likely to make modifications to outsmart the system, which benefits neither of them. For example, not to compulsively hire female employees to the top management of a company, owners can change the tittle of a position to just to fill a vacancy. 

In conclusion, I strongly disagree with the idea of allocation of certain high-level posts to females because of their gender since this can discourage qualified males to work hard and make companies find alternative ways to outwit the law.

Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is argued that adolescence years are the happiest years in one’s life, while others believe that adulthood is the most joyful phase to live despite having bigger responsibilities. This essay believes that, although adolescents are free of responsibilities, adults enjoy their life more because they are free to make their own choices.

On the one hand, adolescents are thought to live the happiest moments of their life because they are not asked to be responsible. Basically, a teenager lives with his parents, who not only provide him shelter, food, and education, but also, in some cases, would try to meet his fantasies. For instance, in my country, teenagers make a great example of spoiled people who spend their money carelessly and always ask for more, though they do not seem to be happy.However, I believe that not being obliged to worry about any responsibility is not what happiness is all about, and consequently adolescents do not live their happiest days.

On the other hand, others see that adulthood is a happier phase because adults are free to make the choices that fit their aspirations. Having the freedom of choice will eventually be followed by achievements and a sense of self-accomplishment, which is a primary source of joy. For example, many adults in my country are happy because of the choice of career or commitment they took on their own, and they see themselves happier than when they were teenagers. Therefore, I believe adulthood is the most enjoyable time because one can not be happy if they have to follow others’ plans even it comes with no responsibilities.

In conclusion, despite having no responsibilities on their shoulders, adolescents do not live the happiest moments of their life. This essay believes that it is adulthood which is the most enjoyable in light of the fact that adults are free to make their own choices.

In some countries, it is becoming increasingly common for people to follow a vegetarian diet. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

In a number of countries, following a vegetarian diet has become very popular. Although being a vegetarian can limit the options when eating, I believe the advantages outweigh the disadvantages because it allows the body to work properly. 

For vegetarian people it is difficult to find varied options to eat. Since the majority of the worldwide population have a diet that includes animal products, these type of food is the one that is normally available at food businesses. Therefore, people with a vegetarian diet have to choose between a limited number of plates or products when buying food or eating out. For example, in many popular restaurants in Colombia, the menu has only a short vegetarian section which includes only two or three plates that are completely vegetarian. However, I believe that those options that are offered are healthier than plates that are sold in large quantities.

Following a vegetarian diet allows the body to work better. This is because science has shown that when our human system digests animal products, such as meat, it has to work harder to process the food that it is not designed to receive. Thus, people that have a diet based on plants and seeds are more prone to have a healthier life because they allow their bodies to focus their energy in its normal processes. For instance, people who become vegetarian are less prone to get sick because their immune system has all the energy focused on fighting bacteria and not causing chronic inflammation because of the food. That is why I consider that following a vegetarian diet can have more benefits in the long term. 

In conclusion, although vegetarian people have fewer options when buying products without animal ingredients, it is my belief that following a vegetarian diet has a positive impact in the body functions.

Some claim that families should educate their offspring on being good members of community, while others say that school is the most suitable place to do that. Although school has professional ways to teach children about being good in society, I believe that teaching them by parents is more appropriate because parents have more influence on children. 

On the one hand, school should tech children how to interact in good way in society because it has academic methods to better educate children on that. Any school curriculum is examined by experts before being used, so it contains no mistakes or unsuitable context. For example, to design a school national curriculum, governments hire the most experienced and knowledgeable teachers nationwide. However, I believe that children follow parent’s instructions better than school’s instructions. 

On the other hand, parents are more influent in teaching children about being good in society. That is because parents are close to children, so children are more likely to believe in them. As a result, children are effectively learn how is it important to behave well in society. For instance, the vast majority of children gain their good habits from their parents as they eager to transmit the good attitude to their children. Therefore, I believe that families are the most suitable teacher for children when it comes to be good in society. 

In conclusion, despite the fact that school has professional methods to educate children on being good in society, I believe that parents are more successful doing that because they have better influence on children.

It is thought by some that their happiest years were during their teenage years. Others, however, believe that happiness comes during adult life later on, despite the great deal of responsibilities. Although being an adult means having enough money to enjoy many life activities, teenagers have an enormous amount of time to spend on leisure activities, and for this reason, I stand with the latter view.

Undoubtedly, adults usually have the money to spend on entertaining activities and create joyful moments. Due to the fact that adults usually have the financial means to travel somewhere far, attend a concert, or even rent an expensive car, many express their happiest moments to be during their thirties and the years after while their health is still perfect and they enough money to spend. For example, a 35-year-old man can always travel to Spain during summer time and be able to create an unforgettable moments. However, in my opinion, most adults are so engaged mentally with work and family responsibilities that they do not have the time to spend or travel but rarely.

On the other hand, during adolescence, teenagers have all the time they need to have fun. Having no serious tasks or long working hours, teenagers often spend their time partying with their cool friends throughout the week while having absolutely no responsibility on their shoulders. As a result, people usually remember these days as their happiest. For example, teenagers usually have their own party places that open during week days, especially when they become university students, they become happier as their social network also expands. Personally, I believe that having no responsibilties is the key to create happy moments to remember. 

To conclude, while being an adult means having more money to spend on entertaining events, teenagers have all the time in the world to be with their firends and party, and that, in my view, is the reason why people remember these days as their happiest.

Global companies are gaining more popularity among third-world countries. The main advantages of this are that they generate more employment in a country and provide good benefits to employees. However, the major drawbacks are long working hours and unsecured jobs.

One benefit of multinational companies is that they employ a large workforce. This is because these big companies have more than two or three branches around the country, thereby, increasing the employment rate within the country. Moreover, these companies have good benefits for their staff, as compared to local companies, such as yearly travel compensation and full coverage family insurance. For instance, Amazon provides a yearly international trip to the employee and their family, covering accommodation and return tickets.

On the other hand, having to work extremely long hours is the major disadvantage of being in such companies. This is because these companies handle clients who work in different time zone. Hence, the employees have to work in their local time zone as well as per client time zone, which can be several hours apart. Furthermore, losing a job at any time is the biggest fear of employees working for such organizations, unlike government sector, where an employee cannot be fired from the job easily. For example, in Apple Inc., it is reported several times that the employees are fired due to their grudges with their boss.

In conclusion, multinational organizations have benefitted developing countries by increasing the employment rate and making the lives of employees better by providing good benefits. However, it does not have strict policies for their staff as they have to work long hours and fear of losing their job at any time.

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In modern times, children are spending less time with their families and more time with their friends. Why has this change occurred? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home?

Nowadays, children spend more time with their friends than with their families. This change has occurred because children do not want to feel left out amongst their peers and parents should not force children to stay home because they will resent their parents for it.

Young ones do not want to miss out on social activities with their friends. Since the invention of technology, many activities that people carry out, especially teenagers, are now being posted online. As a result, children want to engage more in activities with their peers so they would also have fun stories to post on their social media pages and not be the odd one among their peers. For example, many young people in South Korea are known to shop and visit fun places with their friends rather than their parents, so as to show off the fun activities they engage in on Wechat, a popular social media platform.

Children whose parents mandate spending more time at home might hold a grudge towards their parents. This is because if children are forced by their parents to spend more time at home, they may interpret this as a form of punishment and develop a negative attitude towards their parents, which defeats the goal of family time. However, if they are encouraged to play with their siblings and bond with the family, children will be more willing to stay at home. For example, most children in Nigeria, even though they spend time with their friends, look forward to family time because parents in Nigeria emphasize the benefits of spending more time with family. 

In conclusion, children want to engage in activities with their friends and not be left out, and parents should encourage their children to stay at home more, rather than force them so that their children will not resent them.

It is believed by some that adolescent years are the happiest period of most people’s lives, while others believe that adulthood brings more content, despite having more responsibilities. Although teenagers obtain new experiences in their teenage years, I believe that adults can enjoy in the things they have accomplished.

On the one hand, experiences that adolescents gain before their reach adulthood make them happy. This is because many teenagers get more freedom to do the things that they like without being controlled by their parents. A sense of freedom gives them opportunity to socialise with their contemporaries and many of them fall in love for the first time. These are unprecedented experiences that makes them feel very happy. For example, many dwellers of Sarajevo have said that teenage years were the happiest years of their lives. However, I think that adolescents do not know what a real happiness is at such a young age. 

On the other hand, adults can appreciate the things they have achieved. This is to say that many adults set goals when they were younger, such as having prosperous careers, because they knew achieving their goals would make them content. They worked hard to get closer to their goals, and when they finally achieved their targets, they felt contentment. For instance, many Bosnians dreamed about owning a property, and after purchasing housing they were ecstatic. Therefore, I believe that adults can value happiness at a greater level.

In conclusion, although pre-adulthood brings new experiences, I believe that adults enjoy the perks of their hard work.

In many professional sports, there is an increase in the number of athletes using banned substances to improve their performance. What are the causes of the phenomenon and what are some of the possible solutions?

The number of sportspeople using illegal substances to improve their performance has increased in many sporting events. This essay believes that many athletes are taking banned substances to win the competition and exceed capabilities beyond their limits. This can be prevented by requiring athletes to take drug tests before the competition and punish them if they have violated the rules.

Some sportsmen are taking banned substances because they want to be the best athlete in the competition. It is in their nature to be on top among other competitors, and winning is their main goal. In addition, using illegal substances help exceed their abilities by boosting their physical strength. They are tempted to do this because it helps them to handle such excruciating trainings needed to achieve their goals. For instance, Michael Phelps, a professional swimmer, confessed that the use of an illegal substance has helped him become an Olympic Gold medallist.

One solution to eradicate this problem is to test all athletes before the competition so that they will be discouraged from using banned substances, allowing fair competition among athletes. Moreover, sports organizations should also punish athletes who are taking performance-enhancing drugs, such as banning them from playing any sports event. This will give them lessons and take away the temptations of using illegal substances. For example, the Tour de France organization has banned Edward Armstrong from entering the bike racing competition and stripped down all his trophies because of his drug violations. 

In conclusion, many athletes nowadays use illegal substances to win the competition and exceed their physical capabilities. However, it is vital to have fair competition, and this can be eradicated by requiring the athletes to do drug tests and ban them if found guilty.

Some people argue that television helps in learning while others believe that its only purpose is to entertain us. Although television is widely used for enjoyment and leisure, in my opinion, it also helps in other ways like getting news and information from all over the world.

For decades, people have been watching television for fun and leisure because it is the most common entertainment product in every household. Furthermore, it offers a variety of channels and programs with just clicks of some buttons which help children and adults to relax and enjoy when they feel tired after studies or work. Entertainment programs such as The Kapil Sharma Show have always been the most popular programs because they spread laughter and joy among the people and help them unwind the day. However, I think that other than entertainment, people have many reasons to watch television such as getting educated about major events around the world.

On the other side, many people argue that beyond the entertainment, there are various news and educational programs aired on television that are watched by a large number of people. Many shows on television play a vital role in educating citizens about various issues and current affairs and help them increase their knowledge. Many news programs, for example, Prime-Time with Ravish Kumar on NDTV pick one of the events happened during the day and discuss different perspectives about it in details and educate people on how it affects their lives. Moreover, these types of shows have become more interesting and entertaining due to the use of advanced technology and presentation methods.

In conclusion, while the most people watch television for pleasure and relax, I believe that it is not fair to tag it as an entertainment tool because it is still a main source of news and information for the majority people around the world.

Some argue that newspaper journalists should not report on the personal lives of the people in politics. This essay emphatically disagrees with this view because citizens are entitled to be informed about their politicians’ lives before they elect them, and because politicians need to be kept in check to stop them from misusing their powers.

Politicians are public servants who have taken an oath to serve the citizens of a nation. In a democracy, politicians are elected on the basis of two important factors – their vision and their values. While the vision is communicated by politicians during their campaign, the values can only be depicted through the way the way they have lived their personal lives. Journalists are trained to investigate all kinds of information. Hence, for a well-rounded evaluation, it is essential that newspapers give a complete account of the values of a politician through a coverage of their personal lives. For instance, in 2016, many supporters of Donald Trump lost their trust in him after newspapers uncovered the story of the sexual harassment allegations against him.

Furthermore, politicians hold great power because of their ranks. It would be very easy for politicians to misuse this power to benefit their own personal lives. On behalf of the public, journalists own the authority to keep politicians’ personal lives in check. For example, President Bill Clinton wrongly took advantage his position by having an affair with an intern. The American citizens were informed of this through newspapers and other media platforms.

In conclusion, it is extremely important that newspaper publishers cover the private lives of politicians so that they can be fairly evaluated before elections, and to ensure that their power is kept in check while they’re serving the public.

During the course of history, crime term is viewed as a negative blow on both society and each individual. Although a reducing crime statistic in some particular countries has been publicly recognized in recent decades, other kinds of crime might cause local residents a sense of less safety than previous times, especially juvenile crime, so some policies need to be implemented to ensure tackle this phenomenon.

There is several compelling evidence that crime under the age of 18 has been a contributor to unsafe feelings. With the aid of technological advancement, teenagers nowadays are frequently exposed to violence in the media and mimic violent acts whose brains are not fully developed and can not tell the difference between right and wrong. Violent scenes on Youtube, for example, are usually starred by adults who are likely to become negative role models, leading to the growth of juvenile crime after watching those videos, especially turning to bullies in school. Thus, parents will have a fear of their offspring not only befriending these bullies but also becoming a potential crime if they can not control the information absorbed by their children due to hectic working schedules.

With regard to the responsibility of the government to assure residents do not feel unsafe, banning violence-related contents on the Internet should be adopted. This policy required producer companies to minimize scenes containing violence before publicizing final products. In addition, adults also are in charge by teaching their infants to identify wrongdoings to avoid. By spending time with those, parents could either diminish unsafe feelings or intervene at the right time whether friends of their youngsters are good or not.

In conclusion, juvenile crime is a major indicator of increasing fearness of society despite a drop in serious crime rate. Government must take immediate action by passing violence- content restriction on stakeholders on a national scale and parents should dedicate more time to their children to help authorities to address these issues.

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

While some think that people can not succeed in sports or music unless they have some natural talents that a few people have, others reckon that any child can be educated to become successful in those areas. This essay agrees with the former view because, although children are able to get access to many professional training programs, natural gifts enable owners to excel at their subjects such as music or sports.

Some argue that all children can become good at music and sports as soon as they receive the appropriate learning programs. This is because now children are taught by many professional teachers, and the programs that they are involved in are far more modern and systematic. Therefore, they do not need talents to become successful. For instance, many renowned musicians and sports athletes in Vietnam admit that they are not talented, but they can thrive in their areas mainly because of their hard work in many years and the intensive training programs that their tutors gave them. However, I think that some subjects like music or sports have some unique features that require learners some talents to master them.

Gifted people can thrive because their natural gifts help them quickly master knowledge. The immense level of their innate skills enables them to completely grasp anything they learn in a short amount of time, and they can creatively and successfully put them into practice. Let’s take Mozart as a musical genius of all ages, with an extraordinary memory, he could remember any details of music like melodies and lyrics and composed thousands of famous songs of all time. For this reason, I believe that some inborn qualities play a crucial part for people to thrive in some areas like music or sports. 

In conclusion, despite any professional programs that schools now offer, this essay thinks that children need to have some talents to become professional athletes or skilled musicians.

Some say that educating boys and girls in a single-gender school is more beneficial, while others feel that mixing both genders is a better idea. I believe that while separation can reduce the amount of classroom disruption, mixed schools have a better impact on both genders because it prepares them for their future in the real world.

On the one hand, a single gender educational environment can reduce distraction between peers during the class. Children try to impress or get the attention of the opposite gender by talking or showing off, which leads to lack of focus in the class and causes interruptions to other students. For instance, girls and boys tend to find their first crushes at school. It distracts them because instead of paying attention to studying, they are focused on getting into relationships. Despite this, I would argue that both boys and girls can benefit more from being mixed because it helps them to be prepared for the future life.

On the other hand, mixed-sex schools where boys and girls are not separated, can prepare children for their future life. When young males and females attend co-educational school, they can develop relationships with other people. In their future they will work with opposite sex so educating students in single-sex schools limits their opportunity to work cooperatively with the opposite gender. For example, if children are used to have contact with many peers from their childhood, they will not have a problem to adjust to a mixed-sex environment in their future such as work area or daily life. I therefore believe that this method is better as it helps to interact with the opposite sex.

In conclusion, while separating boys and girls at school can help them to be more focused during their classes, I think that mixing both genders gives them the ability to learn how to build relationships with different genders, which is valuable later in life.

Following a vegetarian diet is becoming very popular in some nations. Although without meat it is hard to get the required amount of protein, I believe that the benefits of consuming high fibre and low saturated fat while on this diet far outweigh any drawbacks.

The main disadvantage of the vegetarian diet is that without meat people may have a protein deficiency. That is to say, people by nature are omnivorous more than herbivorous, and by avoiding consuming animal products, protein levels will decrease, and this deficiency can have consequences on muscles, bones and immunity system. By following this type of strict diet in certain religious groups in India, for instance, people might suffer not only from fatigue and bone fractures, but also from disturbance in their immune system. However, I think that a well-planned diet provides people with all nutrients including enough protein.

The positive feature of this diet is that it contains high fibre and low saturated fat, which can help decrease heart problems. In other words, high amounts of fats are found in animal products, this can accumulate on blood vessels causing clots and predisposing to certain heart diseases, and by controlling fat levels and consuming more fibre as in vegetarian diet, the risk of heart disease can be reduced. That is why many physicians, for instance, advise their patients to go on this healthy diet which plays a major role in decreasing their risk of suffering from heart problems. Therefore, in my view, protecting people from this type of illness by recommending such a regimen is very beneficial.

To conclude, while it is difficult to have enough protein from a vegetarian diet, in my opinion, the advantages of protecting people from heart disease with its high level of fibre and low saturated fat far outweigh any disadvantages.

Nowadays more and more people have to compete with young people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are some possible solutions?

These days the competition for the same job has increased, as more young people apply for it. The main problems this causes are high competition for one job and an increased unemployment rate. The most viable solutions are creating special programs for young people and expanding the job market by introducing special positions for others. 

Having a high number of people applying for the same job creates high competition for one position, among younger and older people. As a result, for one position apply hundreds of people, and only one, mainly young people, is hired. Additionally, this leads to unemployment, as there are not many positions available to people and not everyone finds a job. In Ukraine, for example, every year many people in their forties or fifties file for unemployment insurance, as they were not able to find a job due to the companies prefer hiring younger candidates rather them. 

One way for governments to overcome this difficulty is to create special positions for the elder and senior people, like to be trainers. In such a way, they will not lose their jobs and will be able to pass their knowledge to the younger generations. Another solution is for organizations to introduce more internships or traineeships. Creating such opportunities will assist people in having at least temporary jobs. For example, every year a well-known Ukrainian mobile company Life hires the younger for one year program with a future potential full-time employment, as they want to retain their current employees and provide future job opportunities for younger generations. 

In conclusion, having more young people applying for the same job creates high competition and unemployment. In order to overcome this, the government should introduce more positions, like trainers for elderly and current employees, and offer more internships for the younger generation.

Some companies have uniforms for their staff which must be worn at all times. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

Employees of some companies must wear their uniforms all the time. The main advantages of this are that wearing uniforms can be a source for advertising their products and helps to bring a sense of belonging, while the disadvantages are that wearing inappropriate clothing for work and hampering employee’s performance.

Employees who wear uniforms can be a source of marketing for their own products. This is because when employees step out from their company, then people will notice their logos and make a good impression of them, as a result, they might end up buying their items. Moreover, staff wearing uniforms can also help to grow a sense of belonging. That is to say that if staff wear the same clothes every time, this would lead to a feeling of team spirit and better production in the company. To illustrate this, the workers of Lux company always dress up in the same uniforms; thus, they become an inevitable part of the marketing team of Lux in Bangladesh.

On the other hand, employees who always wear uniforms might end up wearing inappropriate clothes for their work. This is because they do not have any idea of the specific material or right sizes of the clothes that they should wear at the workplace. Wearing uniforms by employees can also hamper their better performance. This is mainly because of making poorly designed work clothes and, this might cause difficulties in work since they find the uniforms constricting their work output. For instance, flight stewardesses wearing pencil skirts and high heels may look good, but at the same time, it also causes discomfort to them and the passengers.

To conclude, the main advantages of wearing uniforms are that it can be a key element of marketing and helps to grow a sense of belonging; however, the disadvantages are the inappropriacy of wearing uniforms and restricted performance.

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Is this a positive or negative development?

Because of developments in technology, the way we communicate with each other has changed. As a result of this, people are making friends and even started to find themselves a partner through the internet. I believe that it is a negative trend because people try to take advantage of us after they know about our personal life.

Many have started making friends and dating online. Social media users follow individuals whom they do not know and interact with them by commenting on their posts or texting to each other from these platforms. Some teenagers and even adults use dating websites to find themselves a date. In such platforms internet normally pair them up with a random person and they make conversation with each other. For example, the dating website called Omegle is getting popular among individuals.

People often get threatened by their online friends. After they earn their friend’s trust, and get familiar with their personal life, they start demanding money, and if a person refuses to give them what they want they begin threatening them telling them that they will hurt their loved ones. For instance, more than thousands of social media users in Uzbekistan are becoming the victims of such crimes every year.

In conclusion, as a result of improvements in technology the way we interact with each other has changed. Because of this people are dating and making friends online. I am of the opinion that it is a negative development because people often get threatened by their online friends.

Today people are travelling more than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?

People are travelling more than ever before in recent times. Achieving quality education from abroad is the main reason for this, and the major benefits of travelling for the traveller are they will be entertained by watching exciting things around them and personality development.

The main reason of people travelling more today is to achieve quality education from abroad. This is because, degrees from their own countries may not have more value. Instead, if they have degrees from abroad, people can compete with other individuals for amazing jobs, and by having such jobs, people’s standard of living improves. For example, many engineers in India are travelling abroad in order to complete their higher education and by achieving quality education from abroad, they can get a phenomenal job anywhere across the world.

One benefit of travelling for the traveller is that they are ammused by watching exciting things while travelling.This is because, usually people at home have a hectic life style and they do their normal routine work. While travelling, travellers observe mesmerizing lights and new things on their way and get entertained. Moreover, travelling helps in personality development of a traveller. This is because, in an airbus they have to wait for a long time for their destination to come, which develops the quality of patience in travellers. For example, while travelling from Melbourne to Hyderabad, travellers have to wait for 16 hours in an aircraft which develops patience and overall personality development in them.

In conclusion, today people are travelling more than ever before, to achieve quality education from abroad is the main reason of travelling, and the main benefits of travelling for the traveller are getting entertained by watching exciting things while travelling and personality development.

It is the view of some people that individuals who have talents in certain areas such as sports or music are born with it, while others believe that a child can learn to be good at these skills. Although, it is true that people are talented in these fields because they can achieve great feats with no training or with minimal effort, I believe that any child can learn to become good at certain skills if they work hard.

People who are naturally talented at sports or music can perform excellently well in these areas without training. Some people who perform very well in sports or music do not need to learn or practice to become proficient at these skills because it comes naturally to them, unlike others who have to train for a long time to reach the same level. For example, Michael Jackson, a musical legend, is widely known to be talented in singing and dancing because he displayed these skills from childhood without training. However, I believe that even those who are talented in certain fields need to learn and practice in other to perform at maximum capacity.

Children can be taught to become good sportsmen and women and outstanding musicians if they work hard at it. It is possible to teach someone different skills, especially a young child, because they learn faster and with practice they too can become very good in music and sports. For example, Dwayne Johnson, popularly known as the rock, was taught how to wrestle from an early age and now holds many wrestling titles. For this reason, I believe that children can be learn to be good at these skills by working hard even if they were not born with such talents.

In conclusion, even though some people can perform well in sports or music because they are talented, I believe that young people who are not talented can learn to be skilled at sports or music if they work hard.

Many people are now opting to provide technology companies with their personal data in exchange for access to software. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

These days many individuals are choosing to give tech companies their personal information to gain access to software. Although using this software makes people’s life easier, I believe that the benefits do not outweigh the drawbacks because companies are able to constantly influence consumers’ choices.

The main advantage of sharing your private data with tech companies is that the software they provide you makes your life simpler. This is because this software offers users personalized help in their daily matters so that they can avoid wasting time and energy doing things that they can easily do with the aid of technology. For example, Google Drive offers you a free cloud-based storage where all your documents and pictures are automatically saved and you can access them from any device at any time, without worrying about saving them on a pen drive that you might lose. However, I believe that this argument is weaker because people should prioritize their privacy.

One of the disadvantages is that once they have access to your data, tech corporations can use them to control your choices at all times. This is to say that tech companies harvest the data you agreed to share with them, and through an in-depth analysis performed by artificial intelligence and through complex algorithms, they create profiles based on your interests, likes and dislikes. These profiles are then sold to third-party companies for advertising purposes. For example, Google records all your google searches and all the videos you watch on YouTube and then decides what type of advertisement you would be more susceptible to. This targeted marketing has proven extremely successful. I believe this argument is stronger because people are deceived from these companies to generate revenues. 

In conclusion, although providing confidential information to tech firms in order to use software simplifies your life, I believe that being continuously influenced in your decisions is a major drawback. For these reasons, I think that the negatives far outweigh the positives.

While some argue that building more sports facilities is the best possible method of improving public health, others believe that this approach is not very effective, and other actions are needed. I agree with the latter opinion as although doing sports plays a key role in leading a healthy way of life, mass educational activities about different ways of health improvement are a better option because they can target more people. 

On the one hand, doing sports influences people’s health and well-being enormously. Not only does it make us stronger and more resilient, but it also trains our cardiovascular systems and, thus, reduces the chances to die earlier than we could have. In contrast, those who lead a sedentary lifestyle deprive themselves of these benefits. Hence, the more sports facilities will be available to the public, the more people could do sports and, thus, stay healthy. However, I do not agree that this is the best way to improve public health as the majority of people either just do not want to or can not go in for sports because of different reasons. 

On the other hand, informing and educating people about different ways of improving their health is a foundation of health and well-being. If people knew the consequences of drinking too much alcohol and why they need to eat healthy food and avoid ultra-processed food, for example, then they would take a more sensible approach to their health and would have more motivation. Hence, I am convinced that this approach is much better than just opening more sports facilities as it targets all people and not just a small part of them. 

To conclude, although opening more sports facilities will make some people healthier, I believe that educating people is more important as it will target more people overall.

In few countries, the population of vegetarians is increasing rapidly. Although this trend might be a cause of unemployment among a particular group whose livelihood is dependent on the meat business; this essay thinks that the advantages like the positive effect on the environment outweigh the disadvantages.

The drawback of a large population of a country turning vegetarian is that some people lose their business. That is to say that there are thousands of farmers whose livelihood depends on the livestock business, they farm animals like cows and pigs, and sell the meat in local meat markets. These markets might close if a large population turns vegetarian resulting in these people losing their livelihood. For example, in India, there are thousands of individuals, especially in coastal cities like Mumbai or Chennai, who earn their living through huge meet markets established in these cities, these people will get unemployed if the markets close. However, this essay believes that individuals would find an alternative source of income if these markets close.

The major advantage of people choosing a vegetarian lifestyle is that it is eco-friendly. In other words, livestock requires vast areas of land to live in; they eat a huge quantity of food which would be enough for multiple people to survive; they produce double the carbon dioxide in a day than an average human. Due to these reasons farming livestock is takes a heavy toll on the environment. For example, according to research at the University of California, farm animals are the number one cause of global warming, greater than emissions from cars and gasses released from industries. This essay believes that the environmental impact of the vegetarian lifestyle outweighs the drawbacks.

In conclusion, if a large population of a country turns vegetarian, a certain group might lose their income, but this essay believes that the advantages of positive environmental impact outweigh the drawbacks.

Most high-ranking positions in companies are being filled by men, despite that more than 50 per cent of the employees are women in a lot of high-income countries. Companies should be forced to dispense a certain proportion of these posts to women. This essay totally agrees with this statement because, by doing this, the relative level of competence in the company as well as the ability to cooperate would increase. 

By allocating a certain per cent of high-level positions to women, companies would reach a higher competence level. This is because a lot of women with the right competence are overlooked, since the tradition of male executives are very strong. Allocated recruitment would result in women with high competence rather than mediocre men in those high-level positions. For example, an audit of the relative competence level in one of the biggest investment banks in Sweden showed a significant increase after they decided to allocate at least 40 per cent of their leading positions to women. 

Companies with gender equality show better cooperation. In other words, both male and female leaders are needed in a company because men and women contribute with different aspects to the group dynamics. For example, in space shuttles the crew is always formed with a certain per cent of both female and male crewmembers, since cooperation is so vital. 

In conclusion, this essay totally agrees with the statement that companies should be obliged to recruit women for a certain percentage of the leading positions because this is a way of increasing both the level of competence and the cooperation in the company.

There is an increasing trend for people in some nations to have vegetarian foods for their meals. This essay thinks that the benefits do not outweigh the drawbacks because although vegetarian diets can reduce carbon footprints, consuming vegetables only may lead to nutritional deficiencies.

The main advantage of having a vegetarian diet is that carbon emissions can be reduced. Animal agriculture accounts for a significant portion of carbon footprints because animal feed has to be transported a long way to farmers, and animals release a large amount of carbon dioxide after they eat the feed. For example, a research by the University of Australia found that around 35% of carbon emissions around the world is from animal agriculture, and if everyone eats vegetables, carbon footprint in animal agriculture can be reduced by one third. However, this essay argues that people may not be able to get nutrients which is available only in meats if they solely consume vegetables.

One disadvantage is that vegetarian diets may cause nutritional deficiencies. That is because vegetables do not contain nutrients or minerals that are available in meats, and in the long run vegetarian may suffer from diseases caused by nutritional deficiencies. For instance, meats provide minerals such as iron to strengthen the red blood cells. If people do not gain enough iron, their immune systems will be weakened, and in most serious case, brain functions will be impaired. Therefore, this essay believes that a balanced diet with meats and vegetables should be followed.

In conclusion, although eating vegetables solely can reduce carbon emissions, unbalanced diets with only vegetables may lead to nutritional deficiency.

Nowadays, people are travelling more than at any time in the past. The main reason for this is that it is cheaper to travel now, and the main benefits of travelling for the traveller are that they can expose to different cultures and expand their social network. 

One of the main reasons people are travelling more now is that it is not as expensive as before. That is to say that there are many new travel transportation companies exist now, such as flight and bus companies, while there were only a few of them in the past. As a result, there is a big competition between these companies to attract more customers, which results in massive price reduction. For example, Ryanair, a famous flight company in Europe, sells tickets starting from $15 during the sale, from London to European countries. 

One of the main benefits of travelling for the traveller is that they can understand different cultures better. This is because when people travel to a new country, they have a chance to spend time with locals and experience their traditions. Also, museums and monuments are mainly visited by tourists to learn more about the country’s culture. Furthermore, being able to enlarge their social circle is another benefit of travelling. Visitors can meet a plethora of people from different nations while travelling. For instance, people who are using Couchsurfing app, which allows people to stay at locals’ houses when travelling, are making friends from all around the globe. 

In conclusion, the principal reason why people are travelling more than ever before is that it is less costly now, and the main advantages of this are that travellers can learn about different cultures and can meet with people from all around the world.

Some would argue that certain fields, such as sport or music are meant only for naturally talented children, while others believe that it is something which can be learned by anyone. While kids with the aptitude for certain skills are given a head start in life, this essay argues that such skill sets can be mastered by working hard.

On the one hand, children who are gifted with a particular inborn talent often achieve their goal early in their lives. This is because when someone is very good at what they are doing, it usually does not take much effort for them to strive for excellence in that specific area. For instance, there are many talented singers who have already established a successful singing career before they even become teenagers. However, I believe that talent alone does not guarantee success in the long-run, and that a person can only reach the highest level in their profession if they combine their innate ability with hard work.

On the other hand, many people think that anything is achievable in this life through practice and training. That is to say that it may take extra time and energy for an individual with average potential to harness a skill, but success is possible as long as one has the will, determination and the passion to work for it. For example, the world is filled with many star athletes who start off as a mediocre in the beginning, but they challenge and push themselves to their limit, which ultimately help them to attain the greatest version of themselves. I believe this view point is more practical because majority of the people are born average, and hard work beats talent in many cases. 

In conclusion, although it is easier for children with extraordinary ability to accomplish their dreams at the beginning of their lives, this essay finds that hard skills, even though time taking to master, can be earned by coaching and experience.

The multinational type of companies is increasing in the developed nations. While the advantages of such phenomenon are economical as these companies create large number of jobs and invest significant capitals for their operations, the effects on the environment and the over exploitation of natural resources are the disadvantages.

The advantages of these companies are economical, and one of the benefits is creating job vacancies. Owing to the nature of these companies and their high standard, their operations are carried out under certain standards that require significant number of employees. As a result, they tend to employ many people from local communities. In addition, those Firms usually invest huge capital in order to establish their local presence and facilities such as headquarters and accommodation for their staff. For example, IBM, a computer manufacturer, invested hugely in China as part of their plan to establish their manufacturing plants there.

On the other hand, one of the disadvantages of these companies are their bad effects on the environment. For those multinational firms, in most cases, making profit precedence over any other consideration including the nature and the environment. Their activities usually produce enormous amount of toxic chemicals and gases that cause global warming. In addition, in order to meet their large production capacity, they consume the natural resources in a sustainable way, cause irreversible damage to the nature. For instance, mutlinational mining companies seeking marble in the mountains of Italy have severely devastated the area and these highlands.

To conclude, the benefits of multinational companies are economical as they create job vacancies and invest significant liquidity, whereas the effects on the environment and the exhaustion of natural resources are the disadvantages resulting from such companies.

Music, art, and drama are deemed by some to be of the same importance as other subjects, particularly in primary school. This essay agrees with the statement because these subjects have a tremendous impact on students’ creativity at this age, and they might help some to choose a career path.

The inclusion of fine art in the primary school curriculum positively affects pupils creative thinking. During these classes, not only do students have an opportunity to paint, sing or act, but also their creativity is challenged. This is because one correct outcome does not exist when painting or playing an instrument; thus, students discover that engagement in music, art, and drama offers them a plethora of ways of expressing themselves. In Scandinavia, for example, where primary schools offer a sound number of these types of classes, young people demonstrate outstanding ability to be creative, which reflects in a number of designers and architects coming from this region. 

Having an opportunity to participate in music, art, and drama classes could potentially help some youngsters figure out what they are really passionate about. As a result, this passion could turn into a career path. Should primary school offer frequent exposure to fine art, then it could create empowering atmosphere, where pupils feel encouraged to believe that they can become artists. To illustrate, most of the famous artists decided to pursue this type of career due to a primary school teacher who awoke this interest in them. 

In conclusion, I personally agree with a belief that the importance of fine art in the primary level of education is equal to other subjects because it stimulates creativity, and in some cases, empowers youth to become painters, sculptresses, or actors.

While some people argue that watching TV is beneficial for learning new things, others are convinced that it is only a source of entertainment. This essay believes that television can do both as it helps people to unwind, but it also presents complicated information in an easily digestible form. 

For many people watching TV programmes is the easiest way to distract from the everyday routine and relax after a hard-working day. This is because one just needs to switch on the TV, and he or she will have immediate access to the programmes that could easily spark the brightest emotions, forcing them to laugh out loud or have a good cry. Besides, entertainment programmes account for the largest portion of the content on television. For these reasons, some people use it only for relaxation. However, I disagree that this is the only way that people use it as, in the modern world, television is much more than that. 

Television provides not only plain information but also audio and video content that helps to remember information in an easier way. For instance, if one watches a documentary about the history of London, sound and picture will help to engross a viewer into the atmosphere of the city and the way people behaved themselves. This might contribute to remembering the information for a longer time than if one just reads an article about it. For this reason, I believe that television can foster the learning process.

To conclude, even though for some people television is just a source of amusement, I believe that it is not the only useful way to use it. This is because through television people can also learn new things about the world in a way that is easy to comprehend.

Details of politicians’ private lives should not be publicized in the media. This essay completely agrees with this statement because keeping the private lives of politicians away from the media helps them to maintain a sound mental health and also helps to protect them from danger.

Keeping the private lives of politicians away from the public helps their mental health. Politicians are usually stressed mentally as a result of the pressure that comes with their jobs. Making their private lives open to the public adds to the level of pressure they experience because it is during their private times that they engage in activities that help to relieve them of stress. Therefore, making this important time of their life open to the public is dangerous to their mental health. For instance, in Nigeria, in order to maintain a sound mind, politicians keep their occasions private so that they can be themselves without being pressured to behave in a certain way.

Protection from danger is another reason why private lives of politicians should not be made public. Due to the high rate of insecurity in some countries, activities of politicians which are not for the service of the people should not be disclosed. This is because these individuals have opponents who are ready to harm them when given an opportunity therefore giving out information about their private lives is an easy way to expose them to danger. For instance, in Nigeria a governor’s house was burnt and it was discovered that the criminals who did this got his home address from social media.

In conclusion, the details of politicians’ private life should be kept away from the media because it benefits their mental health and helps to secure them from danger.

Because of technology, many men and women today interact with each other in new ways. This essay will suggest that people have more regular contact, and that the interaction has changed from physical to digital due to technology. I believe this is a negative development because humans need physical contact as part of their interaction to stay healthy.

Technology has made it possible for people to have more regular contact with each other through social media. This is because smartphones have applications, like Facebook and WhatsApp, which are designed to make it easy to talk, write messages and send pictures to other people. As a result of this, the interaction between humans has also changed from mainly physical to mostly digital. For example, an average Swedish person interacts with 15 friends every day through social media but only have physical contact with two. 

This development must be seen as negative, because physical meetings are needed for human health. It is important to meet other humans in person, because it creates an environment where people can interact in a more complex way. This is because all senses can be used, making it is possible to touch, smell and hear things that would be impossible through an application. For example, during the Corona-pandemic, many people work from home and Swedish doctors have noticed an increase in the number of patients with mental illness due to the lack of physical contact with friends and colleagues.

In conclusion, people´s interactions have changed because of technology and the relationships nowadays are more regular but less physical. I believe this is a negative development because humans need physical meetings to feel good.

Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

Some people feel that it is better to live in a house, while it is the view of others that living in an apartment is more advantageous. Although it is more expensive to live in a house, I believe that there are more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house because houses are bigger in size.

Living in a house is less cost-effective in comparison to living in an apartment. This is because houses are usually bigger in size and offer more privacy to its inhabitants, as a result, the cost of owing or renting and maintaining a house is usually higher than for an apartment. For example, in Nigeria, people who live in houses spend on average three times more money than those who live in apartments because of the higher cost of mortgages and maintenance, such as utility bills, involved in living in houses. However, I believe that with appropriate planning and financial discipline, this extra expense can easily be paid off. 

An advantage of living in a house is that houses are more spacious. Houses are usually built to be more accommodating than apartments, and this is an important factor to consider, especially for large families who require playgrounds and gardens for their children. To illustrate, in Nairobi, the average size of a house measures around 700 square meters, which is large enough to accommodate a private car park, a garden and children’s playground, as compared to an apartment, which does not have enough space for these amenities. Therefore, I believe that there are more advantages than there are disadvantages of residing in a house than in an apartment.

In conclusion, even though it costs more to live in houses than in apartments, I believe that there are more benefits than drawbacks to living in a house because houses are more accommodating.

At present, travelling is more popular than it was in the past. This essay will discuss that this is because nowadays flying is cheaper and that the benefits of travelling are learning about new cultures and experiencing new adventures. 

People are travelling more than ever because flying has become more economic. This is because now there are many low-cost airline companies that offer cheap flight tickets to visit several countries, and this did not exist two decades ago. As a result, more people have the opportunity to travel to new places without spending a huge amount of money, while in the past flying was only affordable for rich people. For example, Ryanair is a low-cost company that provides extremely cheap flight tickets to visit countries around Europe, sometimes for the cost of 10 euros. 

One benefit of travelling is that people can learn about other countries’ culture. That is to say, when people visit a new nation, they go to local shops, eat typical food and visit museums where they can learn about the history of that country. Another advantage that travelling has is that travellers can live new adventures. This is because people who travel often choose to do activities that they cannot do in their own country. For example, is very common for travellers that visit South Africa to do a safari in Kruger, one of the biggest national parks to visit wild animals in the world, since this is an activity that most countries do not offer. 

In conclusion, travelling has become more popular because flying is cheaper than it was in the past and the advantages that this gives to travellers is the possibility to learn about new cultures and experience new adventures.

Some companies require their employees to wear uniforms at all times. The advantages of this are, it helps promote the company and helps customers distinguish the roles of staffs. However, employees may find it difficult to wear uniforms at all times and most company do not provide enough sets of uniforms.

Having staff wear uniforms at all times helps distinguish a company. It promotes a company’s identity to help customers differentiate it from other entities. Another benefit is that companies can better classify their services by the type or color of uniforms they wear which helps improve the customer experience. For example, in my hospital workplace, all patients are able to better distinguish which is a nurse or a doctor, because all nurses are only required to wear a blue scrub suit, meanwhile all doctors wear maroon scrub suits.

On the other hand, employees may find it uncomfortable to wear a uniform. Some uniforms are uncomfortable and poorly fitted that it adds to an employee’s unhappiness. Another disadvantage is that most companies do not provide enough uniforms for their employees. It becomes a financial burden for the employee because he may need to purchase a new set of uniform. For example, my brother who works twelve hours a day and six days a week, paid two thousand pesos to a local tailor just to make him three sets of custom fit uniforms because his employer only gave him two sets.

In conclusion, having a staff to wear uniforms at all times is a great way to promote a company and helps their customers distinguish their employees. On the other hand, employees may find it distracting to wear a uniform and companies may pass the burden of expense to their staff to buy extra uniforms.

Newspapers should not issue stories of politicians’ private lives. I totally disagree with the statement because it is in the public interests to publish, and some readers get interested in politics after reading the stories.

Printing the details of politicians’ private lives in newspapers is in the public interests. Readers can understand more on politicians’ values through the stories, and it gives voters information who have the same values with them. For example, some lawmakers put their families in first priority and they often do volunteer work with their children. If voters see these stories in newspapers and if they have the same values with them, they are likely to vote them in the next election because the politicians may propose laws that protect the values of family. Therefore, I completely disagree that stories of politicians’ private lives should not be published.

After reading stories of politicians’ private lives in newspapers, some readers become more interested in politics. Readers who get interested in stories of politicians will read further on things that are related to the politicians, and this leads them to become more interests in politics. For example, the former US President Donald Trump appeared in newspapers several time during his presidency, and the stories covered his relationship with the First Lady. Some readers found these stories interesting and they started following policy that Trump proposed to make, and later on demonstrations of support were held by them. Therefore, I totally disagree with the statement that newspapers should not issue the stories of politicians’ private lives.

In conclusion, I completely disagree that stories of politicians’ private lives should not be printed because it is in the public interests, and some readers become more interested in politics after reading the stories.

Economic growth is prioritized above all other concerns by the state, in many nations. The advantages of this are, improved quality of life of people and good infrastructure. The disadvantages of prioritizing economic growth above all other concerns are unaffordable cost of living and more environmental damage.

The main advantage of giving importance to economic growth is, it improves the quality if life of people. This is because with economic progress, states generate lots of revenue which can be used to provide high quality services such as free education, good public transportation and sophisticated health care system. Another advantage is developing good infrastructure. When a government prioritizes economic growth, they would build a good infrastructure to attract both domestic and foreign investments. So infrastructure in a nation is usually developed when economic growth is prioritized. For example, in India many highways and an international airport is built in the National Capital Region which attracted thousands of companies to establish a branch in that region.

One of the main disadvantages of prioritizing economic growth is unaffordable cost of living. That is to say, with economic growth, prices of consumer products and real estate increases rapidly making it difficult for low-income families to afford the cost of living. Another disadvantage is more environmental damage. This is because, to develop the industries and to get maximum profits, nations tend to use the most accessible and locally available sources of energy. This leads to more and more use of fossil fuels and thus causing more environmental damage. For example, coal is widely used in China to supply energy to its industries because it is cheap and can be mined within the country. 

In conclusion, the advantages of the prioritizing economic growth above all other concerns are improved quality of life of people and good infrastructure. The disadvantages are unaffordable cost of living and more environmental damage.

In many places around the world, people are choosing to follow a vegetarian diet. The disadvantages are that meat related businesses are being badly impacted and it causes protein deficiency in people. The advantages are that fewer animals are being butchered and it protects people from meat related deceases. This essay argues that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

On the one hand, meat related businesses are badly impacted. When people follow a vegetarian diet, it decreases the demand of meat, which forces the businesses to lower the meat prices. Another disadvantage is that vegetarian people develop protein deficiency. That is to say that meat has significantly more protein than vegetables, and it is difficult to consume a sufficient amount of protein just from vegetables. For example, in Mumbai, people eat only vegetarian food and consume less protein, and this is the primary reason for their lethargy. However, this essay believes that people can fulfil their daily protein needs from vegetables if they consume more nutritious vegetables everyday. 

On the other hand, lesser number of animals are being killed. When people decide not to consume meat, it plummets the demand, which results in lesser number of animals killed. Another advantage is that vegetarian people are less prone to the meat related deceases. A vegetarian diet prevents people from any meat related virus going inside the body and develop any sickness. For example, in Sudan, people don’t consume meat and the country has the lowest number of people with medical conditions. In my opinion, a vegetarian diet should be preferred because it prevents a person from many deceases in the long run. 

In conclusion, while vegetarian diet is not good for meat related businesses and people tend to develop protein deficiency, lesser number of animals are being killed and prevents people from meat related deceases. This essay believes that advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

The majority of the chief positions in business organizations are occupied by males, despite the fact that more than half of the workforce in numerous developed nations is made up of women. It is believed that corporations should be asked to designate a certain portion of high-level roles for females. This essay completely disagrees with this statement because selecting employees should be based on merit, and companies need to focus on profit. 

The main reason is that candidates should be selected according to meritocracy. This is to say that employees should be recruited for their work experience, their qualifications and their soft skills, rather than their gender. In other words, the high-profile positions should be given to the candidates who deserve them the most. For example, if a man and a woman apply for the same position, a woman should not have a priority over a man, but a fair selection on merit should be conducted to find out who is the most suitable person for the advertised role, considering skills, abilities and knowledge.

Another reason why I disagree is that the main goal for companies is profit. This is to say that if a company wants to thrive, it needs to have the best possible employees which are not necessarily one gender or the other. If companies were to select staff members on gender, they could end up putting at risk the smooth running of the business and causing financial losses. Therefore, choices should be made by the human resources team only by bearing in mind which candidate would be an asset for the business. For example, in Italy soccer teams are almost exclusively run by men because they usually know more about this business.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that companies should not be asked to allocate a certain number of executive positions to women because candidates should be selected considering merit, and profit is the top priority for a business.

In recent years, there has been a rise in the popularity of second-hand clothing amongst the younger generation. Why is this happening? Do you think it’s a positive or negative development?

In recent years, buying used clothes has become popular among youngsters. This is because many adolescents try to be like famous people, and I think it is a positive development because teenagers can save money for other useful things. 

Many adolescents buy used clothes because they want to be like famous people. That is to say that they need different outfits for any occasion and that is expensive. That is because they cannot cope with the financial burden of buying new clothes from stores, such as Prada or Gucci. As a result, many youngsters buy second-hand clothes. For example, in the United States, many teenagers buy used Gucci products in order to wear them and be like their idols. 

I think it is a positive development because teenagers who buy used shirts or pants can save money for other useful things, such as a computer or a car. That is to say that, if these adolescents have a computer, they could use it for the school or even to work in computer related jobs. For example, many teenagers can work as a freelancer in many jobs that do not require high skills to do it, such as making presentations or translating works from other language and as a result earn money and save it. 

In conclusion, many adolescents are buying used clothes because they want to be like their idols, and I think it is a positive development because they can use the money they do not spend in useful things.

In many countries today, more and more people are following a vegetarian diet. Although it causes a deficiency of important nutrients in the body, I believe that the advantage of a reduction in the number of obese people due to this outweighs any disadvantage it may have.

Following a vegetarian diet leads to a lack of vital nutrients. Many vitamins, especially vitamins B12 and B6, are sourced majorly from meat, which is not part of the vegetarian diet. As a result of this, vegetarians will be deficient in these nutrients, thereby predisposing themselves to illnesses associated with the deficiency of these nutrients. For example, according to a report by the health ministry of Brazil, vegetarians in the country account for the highest percentage of pernicious anemia and sensory nervous disorders due to a deficiency of vitamin B12 in their diet. However, I believe that these vitamins and many other nutrients which are absent in vegetarian diets can be gotten from supplements in vitamin tablets.

Vegetarian diet causes a decrease in the prevalence of obesity. As obesity is a risk factor for many cardiovascular and respiratory diseases, following a vegetarian diet, which is low in calories and fat, will mean that there will be a decline in the weight of people, which therefore reduces the risk of these diseases in people. To illustrate, in Japan, where a large number of people abstain from meat and eat mostly vegetables, the rate of obesity related illnesses is one of the lowest globally. Therefore, I believe that it is of greater advantage for more people to follow a vegetarian diet.

To conclude, even though adhering to a vegetarian diet leads to a lack of vital nutrients in the body, I believe that the advantage of reducing the problem of obesity outweighs any advantage this may have.

In some corporations, it is mandatory for employees to wear a uniform. The main benefits of wearing a uniform are that it brings uniformity to the workplace and helps to increase the output of companies; however, the increase in the expenditure of organizations and monotony among employees are the main drawbacks of compulsory uniforms.

The first main positive of a mandatory uniform is that it creates equality among workers. When employees wear uniforms, they do not know each other’s socio-economic background because they all look the same, and as a result, they treat each other equally. Furthermore, uniforms help companies to enhance their overall sales. This is because uniforms help people to develop good relationships with others, and when people have a good bonding with others, they usually help each other, and it increases the output of corporations. For example, In India, the sales of those automobile companies are higher where uniforms are mandatory because, in these corporations, people have good relationships with others.

The main disadvantage of the compulsory uniform is that it creates monotony among workers. When employees have to wear the same clothes regularly, they feel bored and sometimes, it has a negative impact on their productivity. Furthermore, the obligation to wear a uniform also increases the expenses of organizations. This is to say that in those corporations, where uniforms are mandatory, companies have to allocate some money for new and worn-out uniforms. For instance, the spending of the famous footwear company, Bata, is around 5% more than its rival companies because in this company a uniform is mandatory, and the company allocates some money for uniforms. 

In conclusion, the main advantages of the compulsory uniform are that it brings uniformity among employees and increases companies’ overall sales, and the main disadvantages are boredom among workers and an increase in the expenditure of corporations.

Some think that in most people’s lives the happiest moment are the time when they were teenagers while other people think that, despite taking up more responsibilities, adult life is happier. I agree with the latter statement that, although teenagers generally do not need to worry about their finances, adults can do everything they want legitimately.

Most people in the teenage years do not need to take care of their finances. That is because teenagers are usually supported by their families financially, and their parents pay all kinds of expenses for them. For example, most parents in Hong Kong give their teenage children US$20 a week pocket money. Their parents also buy new video games they want or they pay for tuition fees of interest classes. Despite the fact that most people do not need to worry about their finances when they were teenagers, I consider that, in spite of more responsibilities, adult life is happier because adults can do legally whatever they want.

Adults can do anything they like as allowed by law. They can get married and have their own families, and they can create their own childhood joys. Of course, the adults have greater responsibility as they need to support themselves and their families, and they need to take care of their spouses and children. For instance, people work so hard to make a living and they are usually exhausted when they leave the office. But when they come home, their cheerful spouse and children are there to support them and they feel loved and cared for. Therefore, I think that there is more happiness in adult life.

In conclusion, although teenagers generally do not need to worry about their finances, being adults are happier even though they have greater responsibility, because they can do anything they want legally.

Some would argue that people are happiest during adolescence, while others believe that adulthood offers more happiness, irrespective of the numerous responsibilities. Although some people think that teenagers are because of the care and support from their family members, I feel that adult life avails people the most happiness, regardless of having multiple roles due to an immense sense of accomplishment.

On the one hand, some believe that people are happiest during the teenage years because adolescents enjoy family support. Parents and relatives are so concerned about teenagers’ welfare, and they do not have to think about how to eat or wear clothing because their parents provide for their needs, which makes them happy with little or no responsibilities. For example, a group of teenagers in my community responded that they were full of happiness because of the family support. However, I believe that one can still be happy during adulthood because of a sense of accomplishment.

On the other hand, some feel that adult life enables people to be full of happiness because of achievement, despite responsibility. That is to say that when people realize what they achieve in life, like higher qualifications, good partners, and children, and as a result, they are pleased. For example, many married couples in my school club confirmed that they are happier because of their fulfillment, even though they have many roles. For this reason, I believe that individuals are more contented during adulthood than in adolescence.

In conclusion, although adolescents tend to be happier because they enjoy support from their families, I believe that adult life brings more joy because of life fulfillment, irrespective of more responsibilities.

Nowadays, many people are commuting more than past. This is because people now can afford travel expenses. There are two main benefits of traveling such as people can gain knowledge and embrace other cultures.

One of the main reasons why the number of tourism has increased is that travel is much more affordable than it used to be. This is partly because of salary rises and partly because the price for essential goods such as food and clothing has fallen. Many families now have two income earners rather than one, they have fewer kids and often have a car. All of these factors increase the likelihood of people becoming tourists. For example, in the past, it might have cost the average person a year’s salary to travel from India to Singapore, but these days it is possible for Indian tourists to enjoy their holidays in another country for the cost of half a month’s pay. 

This growth in travel means that many people can now enjoy the benefits of traveling, Firstly, traveling can help to broaden people’s horizons and adds upon knowledge. People can travel to different places and can gain knowledge of other religions, cultures, and western lifestyles. Meeting different people from vast cultures and societies provides an education that is impossible to get in a traditional school, college, or a university. Secondly, one can explore and embrace the good qualities of other cultures through traveling. For example, foreigners visiting India are often fascinated by Indian customs and traditions and always try to imitate these valuable traditions.

In conclusion, greater affordability is the main reason for increased travel, and the benefits for travelers include enhanced knowledge and increased appreciation of other cultures.

While some think that adding more and and more sport centers is the most beneficial way to improve people’s health, others think that there are better ways to do this. Although increasing the the number of gyms would motivate people to exercise more and become healthier, educating them about health is far more effective. 

On the one hand, building more sport centers would encourage people to start doing physical activities. People will have no excuse if there is a gym next to their work place or house. That is why increasing the number of sports facilities will ensure that the vast majority of people have easy access to sport centers and this would eventually improve their health. For example, in 2016, fifty new gyms were opened in Baghdad and a large number of people started exercising for the first time in their lives and they became healthier. However, I think that this is a temporary fix and better steps should be taken. 

On the other hand, educating people about the importance of health is a better, long-lasting solution. The media should focus more on encouraging people to take good care about their health and warn them about the possible health diseases such as heart failure and diabetes. Even in schools, young children should be educated about health from a young age in order to grow as healthy adults. For example, people in Japan are one of the healthiest people in the world because they teach their students about the importance of health. I therefore believe that this is the best way to maintain and improve health. 

In conclusion, while increasing the number of sports facilities can encourage people to exercise more and improve their health, educating them about health is better because it lasts longer.

In some nations, despite declining rates of dangerous crimes, people tend to feel less secure compared to the past. The most obvious causes are previously committed crimes and detailed description of such scenes on news can make people feel less safe, and the most viable solutions are more safety measures in place and detailed description of any serious crimes should be banned on news channels.

Sometimes, previously committed crimes can make people feel less protected. This is because they still have memories of horrible crimes in their minds and make them feel frightened. As a result, they find it difficult to trust anyone and feel less secure in strengers’ presence. In addition, watching detailed descriptions of any dangerous crimes on television can have a destructive effect on people’s mental health. In other words, a negative visualization of such crimes can result in crime happening in people’s heads and making them feel less safe. For example, 1 in every 30 adults in the UK feel frightened after watching detailed news of serious crimes on television, and not wanting to go out.

A possible solution to this issue is to put more safety measures in place in order for people to feel safe. This gives them a sense of security and a way to seek help if in any danger. Another possible solution is a ban on a detailed description of any serious crimes on television. This will help people keep away from a negative visualisation and their damaging effects on their mental health to make them feel unsafe. For example, recently in India a show called ‘crime patrol’ was prohibited on news channels because it had a negative psychological impact on people after watching it.

In conclusion, previously committed crimes and detailed news on any serious crimes can lead to people feeling less safe. However, this can simply be prevented by putting extra safety measures in place and compelling news channels to stop showing comprehensive details of dangerous crimes.

Some companies make their workers always wearing uniforms. The main benefits of this is that companies are shown as reliable for their clients and their workers feel safe wearing them. However, the key drawbacks are that their staff can feel uncomfortable on hot days and demotivated by wearing the same every day.

Companies in which uniforms are always worn show their clients that they can trust them. When employees look neat wearing their uniforms, clients trust in the services that are provided by a company because it shows professionalism and order. Another advantage is that workers feel protected. In some types of jobs, employees who work with dangerous products can feel safe wearing their uniforms all day because they prevent them from getting hurt. For example, builders demand their uniforms as a basic element for their protection before starting a construction. 

However, employees can feel uncomfortable in days with high temperatures. On hot days, wearing uniforms can reduce worker’s comfort because they cannot change their clothes to avoid the heat. Another key drawback is that repeating the same clothing can demotivate workers. Employees can feel tired of always looking the same because they cannot choose what they want to wear. For instance, a recent survey showed that 60.3% of people who wear uniforms do not like to wear them, and they would like to make decisions about their outfit at work. 

In conclusion, although having uniforms for staff makes a company looks reliable for its clients and provides safety for its workers, they can feel uncomfortable on hot days and unmotivated due to the fact that they constantly have to wear the same clothing.

In some nations, following a vegetarian diet is becoming more popular. Although having a vegetarian diet can help to protect animals, I believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages because they do not incorporate all the nutrients they need. 

One benefit of not eating meat is that animals are being protected. That is to say, if more people start opting to eat meals that do not include meat, fewer animals will be tortured and killed. This is because animals are reproduced, kept in small and uncomfortable places, and then killed and sold to supermarkets and butchers for human consumption. For example, cow’s meat in Argentina is the basis of people’s nutrition, so thousands of cows are reproduced and killed every year just for human consumption. However, I believe that avoiding eating meat will not make a significant difference on animals’ protection. 

One drawback of having a vegetarian diet is that the nutrients incorporated through this diet are insufficient. This is because meat has several vitamins and other important components, such as iron, that are very difficult to replace with fruits and vegetables. If people are not aware of this and do not visit a specialist, it can be dangerous and lead to several diseases. For example, many vegetarian people are anemic because of the lack of iron in their diet, so they need to be supplemented with iron tablets. Therefore, I believe that having a healthy and complete diet is more important than any other thing. 

In conclusion, although animals can be protected if more people start following a vegetarian diet, I believe that having a balanced diet with all the nutrients and vitamins that a person needs is far more important. Therefore, I consider that the drawbacks of a vegetarian diet outweigh the benefits.

In many nations, governments give precedence to economic growth over other issues. The advantages of this are that numbers of employed residents will increase and residents’ standards of living will be improved. However, this can cause serious environmental problems and health problems.

One major benefit of prioritising economic development is that numbers of employed citizens will significantly increase. In other words, countries, where their economies are growing, require substantial workforces to produce sufficient supplies of goods in order to meet markets’ demand. As a result, more and more citizens are in employment. Moreover, this will also offer citizens a better quality of life. This is because, when economies are growing, governments will gain more taxes from trading and can spend them on people’s welfare. For example, Singapore has been improved its economy for the last 40 years. As a result, Singaporeans have excellent public transports and the well-organised health care system. 

On the other hand, focusing only on economic development results in serious environmental damage. This is because, manufacturing processes generate CO2 and other fumes, sewage, and industrial waste which are released to environments and cause air, water and soil pollution. Furthermore, industrial pollution will negatively affect people’s health by precipitating respiratory diseases as well as some types of cancer. For example, Beijing, a big city in China, is facing smog which comes from manufacturing and incomplete combustion of logistic vehicles. This leads to an increase in the number of asthma-exacerbated patients.

To conclude, while prioritisng economic development will result in an increase in employment and a better quality of life, the serious downsides that come with this are environmental pollution and residents’ health issues.

Some organizations force their employees to wear uniforms whenever they are at work. The advantages of this approach are creating a sense of discipline and displaying their professionalism. The disadvantages are that it may hurt employees’ confidence and cause them to feel stressed.

One benefit of this measure is that it would result in them being more disciplined. Every time they put on that suit or dress, they would be reminded that they are working as part of the company and that they have a job to take care of, making them more responsible. Moreover, these employees will come across as more professional when they meet clients. This is because uniforms are often designed to be more suitable for business than casual clothes. For example, how appropriate staff members’ outfits are is often cited by clients as one of the reasons they choose to do or not do business with a company.

One drawback of this policy is that it tends to make each individual feel less confident. This is because they all have their own styles of fashion, so they may feel uncomfortable putting on something that had been chosen for them. This is compounded by the fact that they must wear these outfits daily, which can be highly stressful. In other words, it is terribly frustrating having to wear the same thing in a long period of time. For instance, many major companies in Vietnam have a scheme to change the design of their uniforms every six months to slightly reduce the frustration caused by wearing the same outfit repeatedly.

In conclusion, while having a dress code can instill a sense of discipline in the workforce and make them appear more professional in the eyes of customers, this may also come with a drop in employees’ self-esteem and an increase in their levels of frustration.

In many nations, governments put more focus on improving their economies than improving other sectors. Although, residents’ earnings will increase, I personally believe that the main drawback outweighs the main benefit as this will cause environmental pollution.

The main benefit of prioritising economic growth rather than other issues by governments is that people will earn higher income. This is because governments will support companies to run their businesses more effectively. As a result, companies will gain more profits and consequentially pay their employees bigger bonuses or higher wages. For instance, In China, businesses make huge revenue due to its strong economy. Therefore, Chinese citizens are paid higher and can spend money on luxuary products and travelling abroad. However, I personally believe that earning more money cannot offset pollution problems that happen after economic growth prioritisation.

The primary downside of putting more focus on economic development than other concerns by governments is that environments will be polluted. This is because there will be far more new-built factories for supporting the economic expansion. Without ecological concerns, the air will be polluted from carbon dioxide and fumes which are emitted from these factories, and rivers will be polluted by industrial sewage from manufacturing and chemical processes. For example, Beijing, China, is facing a hazardous level of the air pollution caused by fuel burning and chemical reactions from industrial areas. As a clean environment is extremely vital for a human life, I therefore think that the main drawback outweighs its key benefit.

To conclude, although people will earn higher income if the government prioritises the economic sector rather than other sectors, the serious drawback as pollution problems far outweighs the advantage.

In recent years, advancements in technology have changed how people connect with each other. This has turned people into making much more friends but has also reduced the depth of those relationships. In my opinion, this is a harmful change due to the fact that it makes human less able to communicate their personal feelings.

Technology’s influence has enabled people to make much more friends than they possibly could in the past. This is largely owing to social media, which revolutionizes communication and helps people to keep touch with each other regardless of their geographical locations. Another change in human relationships caused by modern technology is that the number of intimate relationships made has been substantially less significant. With so many people to care about, social media deters users from strengthening bonds. For instance, a stark difference can be observed in Vietnam, where most young adults 20 years ago – when the internet was underdeveloped, had much deeper connections than their modern counterparts.

The changes made to the types of relationships people make nowadays is largely a disadvantageous one, for it deters people from having deep connections. Lacking valuable bonds means that they have almost no one to confide during depressive episodes that are inevitable for most humans, and thereby increase the possibility of making unwise decisions. Examples of this can be found all over the world, where the cases of depression that cause suicidal behaviors are becoming more and more common, and one of the primary contributing factors is victims having no one to share their burdens with. 

In conclusion, despite having much more ability to connect, people are making less meaningful relationships; thus, the quality of relationships diminishes and harms their wellbeing.

Nowadays, passion for a journey from one place to another has been increasing among people. This essay will first discuss that an increasing number of tour packages is the prominent reason behind this, and it will then explain that cultural awareness and being healthy are the two prime advantages of this.

Many tour companies around the world are enticing people to travel more than ever before. That is to say, people are being offered appealing and discounted tour packages, especially during the holiday season, to explore other places. Whereas in the past travelling was very expensive and people could not afford it; however, these companies have made it possible to visit one place to another by spending a small chunk of money. For example, Travel Magazine estimated that more than 40% of Australian people travelled nationally and internationally, in the year 2019, because of cheap tour deals they grabbed from the Flight centre.

The first major benefit of travelling is that it allows a traveller to know about different cultures. By visiting other parts of the world, people get an opportunity to experience the various culture, cuisines and languages. The other significant advantage is stress relaxation through holidays. This is especially true for a significant number of people who are working many hours a week to earn their livings. During holidays, they choose to travel to different destinations around the world, and this greatly helps them to relieve their stress and keep their health in a sound condition. For example, a recent study by the Indian Medical Institute concluded that frequent travellers are happier and more satisfied with their life than those who do not.

In conclusion, people travel more often than in the past because of the tour deals they are being offered, and travelling does not only provide a traveller with knowledge about a different culture, but it also helps them to stay away from a hectic schedule

In recent years, the operation of big corporations is ubiquitous in developing nations. The essay will first suggest that economic growth is the prime benefit, while the excessive use of emergent nations’ natural resources is the main drawback.

One evident benefit of the operation of transitional companies in less developed countries is the prosperity of the local economy. That is to say, multination companies provide an inflow of capital into developing countries. This investment not only creates job opportunities for the people in developing nations, but it also helps to build better infrastructure, such as bridges, roads, and transportation facilities, for them. For example, the role of Foreign Direct Investment in the year 2010 was undeniable because it uplifted the Indian economy so fast and increased GDP and created so many jobs for locals. 

The prime disadvantage is that these companies use the natural resources of developing nations recklessly, which affects the environment. In other words, Smaller, less developed governments often trade an increase in revenue for access to natural resources. This extraction of raw materials, such as oil, diamond, rubber and fuel, can cause environmental externalities- polluted rivers and loss of natural landscape. For instance, many Chinese private enterprises have been heavily criticised for using the resources of countries like Vietnam, Thailand and the Philippine and for polluting the environment.

In conclusion, huge global companies benefit less developed nation economically is the prime advantage of this, and the extraction of raw materials for the sake of profit is the main disadvantage.

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Here you can find IELTS Essay samples of Band 9, written by a native English speaker and a former IELTS examiner. Robert Nicholson is the co-author of ‘High Scorer’s Choice’ IELTS Practice Tests book series, created in collaboration with Simone Braverman, the founder of this website. New essays are being added weekly.

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IELTS Model Essays on the Topic of Crime and Punishment

Former prisoners commit crimes after release (reasons and solutions) – Sample essay 1

IELTS Model Essays on the Topic of Education

Schools should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today (agree/disagree) – Sample essay 1 Some people believe that teaching music in schools is vital, while others think it is unnecessary (opinion) – Sample essay 2 Teachers should be required to conform to a dress code (agree/disagree) – Sample essay 3 Many people nowadays travel abroad for their university education (discuss) – Sample essay 4 Some schools insist that students have laptops in class (advantages/disadvantages) – Sample essay 5 Should governments or teachers be responsible for what is to be taught in schools (opinion)? – Sample essay 6 Do schools still need to teach handwriting and mental mathematics skills (opinion)? – Sample essay 7 Should boys and girls be educated separately (opinion)? – Sample essay 8 Should school children be given homework (opinion)? – Sample essay 9 Schoolchildren today take part in short work experience sessions instead of school (advantages/disadvantages) – Sample essay 10 Artificial Intelligence will take over the role of teachers (agree/disagree) – Sample essay 11

IELTS Model Essays on the Topic of Environment

Wildlife population around the world has decreased by around 50 per cent, what can we do to protect wildlife? – Sample essay 1 Increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel (agree/disagree) – Sample essay 2 Ending the world’s reliance on fossil fuels will be a positive development (agree/disagree) – Sample essay 3

IELTS Model Essays on the Topic of Family and Children

Some parents think that children must do house chores (opinion) – Sample essay 1 Is using physical force to discipline children acceptable (opinion)? – Sample essay 2 Women, not men, should stay at home to care for children (agree/disagree) – Sample essay 3

IELTS Model Essays on the Topic of Global Issues

Some people believe that the world’s increase in population is unsustainable, while others think it is necessary and beneficial (opinion) – Sample essay 1 The world today is a safer place and governments should stop spending large amounts of money on their armed forces (agree/disagree) – Sample essay 2 With the scale of globalisation today, it would be best to have a single world currency (agree/disagree) – Sample essay 3 There is a moral necessity today for the richer countries of the world to help the poorer countries develop (agree/disagree) Sample essay 4

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Should the government put a tax on fast food to reduce obesity (opinion)? – Sample essay 1 Some people believe that the problem of illegal drugs can be solved by legalising all drugs (agree/disagree) – Sample essay 2 Unemployment payments encourage people not to seek work (opinion) – Sample essay 3 Individuals should be responsible for funding their own retirement (agree/disagree) – Sample essay 4 Households should have a government-imposed limit on the amount of rubbish they produce (agree/disagree) – Sample essay 5

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Today’s governments struggle to create enough housing for increasing populations while protecting the environment (opinion) – Sample essay 2 In some countries private cars are now banned from city centres (advantages/disadvantages) – Sample essay 3 Is banning cars from city centres a positive or negative development? – Sample essay 4 The advantages and disadvantages of high-rise apartment living – Sample essay 5 Some people like to own their home while others prefer to rent it (discuss) – Sample essay 6

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Is learning a foreign language essential or a waste of time (opinion)? – Sample essay 1

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The number of advertisements for charities is increasing, what is causing this? – Sample essay 1

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Breakthroughs in medical science are the most significant advances over the last two centuries (opinion) – Sample essay 1

IELTS Model Essays on the Topic of Society and Social Matters

Some people believe that everyone has a right to access to the Internet and governments should provide it free (agree/disagree) – Sample essay 1 Should copyright materials such as music, films and books be freely available on the Internet (opinion)? – Sample essay 2 Can the society cope with the larger number of elderly people and how? – Sample essay 3 Athletes and entertainers’ enormous salaries reflect our dependence on entertainment (agree/disagree) – Sample essay 4 Is it acceptable that enormous sums are paid for pieces of art when many people around the world live in poverty? – Sample essay 5 Everybody should pay a small amount from their income to help people in poverty (agree/disagree) – Sample essay 6 Only people over 18 years old should be allowed to use social media (agree/disagree) – Sample essay 7 Libraries are not a necessity anymore because of the digital resources available today (agree/disagree) – Sample essay 8 Is fashion a significant part of society, or a waste of time and money (opinion) – Sample essay 9 Traffic on roads has become a problem in nearly every country in the world (solutions) – Sample essay 10

IELTS Model Essays on the Topic of Sport and Exercise

Some people think that sport in schools is a waste of time and resources, while others believe it is a vital part of education (opinion) – Sample essay 1

IELTS Model Essays on the Topic of Tourism

Should governments impose extra taxes to restrict tourism in order to reduce pollution? – Sample essay 1 In some cities the numbers of tourists seem overwhelming, why is this happening? – Sample essay 2

IELTS Model Essays on the Topic of Work

What is the best motivation for workers – salary, job satisfaction or helping others? – Sample essay 1 Having a salaried job is better than being self-employed (agree/disagree) – Sample essay 2 Is studying at university better than getting a job straight after school (opinion)? – Sample essay 3 People today find their lives more and more dominated by their jobs (agree/disagree) – Sample essay 4

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IELTS Model Essay Sample Band 9 May 2023

This is a model response to a Writing Task 2 topic from High Scorer’s Choice IELTS Practice Tests book series (reprinted with permission). This answer is close to IELTS Band 9.

Set 3 General Training book, Practice Test 13

Writing Task 2

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Traffic on roads has become a problem in nearly every country in the world. What can be done to reduce the amount of traffic at a society level? What could individuals do to help?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

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Sample Band 9 Essay

In nearly every city around the world, the volume of traffic on roads has become a significant problem. Society’s dependence on the car has led to nearly all families owning at least one car and often two. Changing this situation will not be easy, but a series of social reforms and education could allow the numbers of cars on today’s roads to be reduced.

To decrease traffic, multiple social reforms could be imposed. First of all, fuel prices could be raised, while simultaneously public transportation improved. The aim would be to make more people rely on public transportation. Another method to decrease traffic in cities would be to decrease the number of parking slots in the city and increase the cost for these. This method also aims at encouraging the usage of public transportation, as it would make public transport more appealing than parking. Yet another social reform could be to give tax breaks, if proven, that the person is using public transport on a regular basis.

In addition to social reforms, each individual would need to be educated to increase awareness of the environment. This could be achieved through addressing the matter using multiple media. Within this campaign, the environmental as well as the individual benefits of decreasing the usage of cars would have to be highlighted. As a result, the likelihood of voluntary cooperation would increase, because people would become motivated to reduce their reliance on cars.

In conclusion, only when individuals become aware can social reforms function properly. Success would mean more people using public transport and fewer people using cars. When this goal is achieved, stress on the environment will be decreased.

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IELTS Writing Task 2: Mastering Essays on Technology’s Role in Social Inclusion (Band 7-9 Samples)

The topic of technology’s role in promoting social inclusion has become increasingly prevalent in IELTS Writing Task 2 exams. Based on recent trends and the growing importance of digital inclusion in our society, it’s highly likely that this theme will continue to appear in future tests. Let’s explore a sample question and provide detailed essay responses for different band scores.

IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Question

Analyzing the Question

Let’s examine a typical IELTS Writing Task 2 question on this topic:

Some people believe that technological advancements have widened the gap between different social groups, while others argue that technology has actually promoted social inclusion. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

This question requires us to:

  • Discuss how technology might widen social gaps
  • Explain how technology can promote social inclusion
  • Provide our personal opinion on the matter

Now, let’s look at sample essays for different band scores.

Band 9 Sample Essay

Here’s an exemplary essay that would likely score a Band 9:

Technology’s impact on society is a double-edged sword, capable of both widening social divides and bridging them. While some argue that technological advancements exacerbate inequality, I firmly believe that, on balance, technology has been a powerful force for social inclusion.

Those who contend that technology widens social gaps often point to the digital divide – the disparity in access to digital tools and the internet between different socioeconomic groups. This inequality can indeed reinforce existing social disparities. For instance, students without access to computers or high-speed internet may fall behind their peers academically, potentially limiting their future opportunities. Similarly, job seekers without digital skills or online access may struggle to compete in an increasingly digital job market.

However, the argument for technology as a promoter of social inclusion is compelling and multifaceted. Firstly , the internet has democratized access to information and education. Massive Open Online Courses (MOOCs) and educational YouTube channels have made high-quality learning resources available to anyone with an internet connection, regardless of their location or economic status. Secondly , social media platforms have given voice to marginalized groups, allowing them to share their experiences, organize movements, and influence public discourse. The #BlackLivesMatter and #MeToo movements are prime examples of how technology can amplify voices that might otherwise go unheard.

Moreover , assistive technologies have dramatically improved the lives of people with disabilities. Screen readers, voice recognition software, and other adaptive tools have made it possible for individuals with visual, auditory, or motor impairments to participate more fully in education, employment, and social interactions. Additionally , telehealth services have expanded access to healthcare for rural and underserved communities, while mobile banking has provided financial services to previously unbanked populations in developing countries.

In my opinion, while the challenges posed by the digital divide are real and require attention, the overall impact of technology on social inclusion has been overwhelmingly positive. The key lies in proactive efforts to bridge the digital divide through initiatives such as providing free internet access in public spaces, digital literacy programs for older adults and disadvantaged communities, and ensuring that essential services remain accessible through non-digital means during the transition to a more digital society.

In conclusion, while technology can potentially exacerbate social divisions, its power to promote inclusion far outweighs these drawbacks. By harnessing technology thoughtfully and ensuring equitable access, we can create a more inclusive society where everyone has the opportunity to participate and thrive in the digital age.

(Word count: 398)

Analysis of Band 9 Essay

This essay would likely receive a Band 9 score for several reasons:

Task Response : The essay fully addresses all parts of the task, discussing both views and clearly stating the writer’s own opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion : The essay is well-organized with clear progression throughout. It uses a variety of cohesive devices effectively (e.g., “Firstly”, “Secondly”, “Moreover”, “Additionally”).

Lexical Resource : The vocabulary is sophisticated and precise (e.g., “democratized”, “marginalized”, “amplify”, “proactive efforts”).

Grammatical Range and Accuracy : The essay demonstrates a wide range of grammatical structures used accurately and appropriately.

Development of Ideas : Each point is well-developed with relevant examples and explanations.

Band 7 Sample Essay

Now, let’s look at an essay that would likely score a Band 7:

In today’s digital age, the impact of technology on social inclusion is a topic of much debate. While some believe that technological advancements have widened the gap between different social groups, others argue that technology has actually promoted social inclusion. In my opinion, technology has done more to promote inclusion than to widen social gaps.

Those who argue that technology widens social gaps often point to the digital divide . This refers to the gap between those who have easy access to computers and the internet, and those who do not. For example, in many developing countries, only people in cities might have good internet access, while those in rural areas are left behind. This can lead to differences in education and job opportunities.

However, there are strong arguments for how technology promotes social inclusion. Firstly , the internet has made information and education more accessible to everyone. People can now learn almost anything online, often for free. This gives opportunities to those who might not be able to afford traditional education. Secondly , social media has given a voice to groups that were often ignored in the past. For instance, people with disabilities can now easily share their experiences and connect with others online.

Moreover , technology has made many services more accessible. For example, online banking allows people in remote areas to access financial services. Telehealth services mean that people can consult with doctors without having to travel long distances. These improvements have made life easier for many disadvantaged groups.

In my view, while the digital divide is a real problem, the benefits of technology for social inclusion outweigh the drawbacks. The key is to work on making technology more accessible to everyone. Governments and companies should focus on providing internet access to more areas and teaching digital skills to older people and disadvantaged groups.

To conclude, although technology can sometimes create new inequalities, its overall effect has been to promote social inclusion. By continuing to improve access to technology, we can create a more inclusive society for everyone.

(Word count: 340)

Analysis of Band 7 Essay

This essay would likely receive a Band 7 score for the following reasons:

Task Response : The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear position.

Coherence and Cohesion : The essay is generally well-organized, using some cohesive devices (e.g., “Firstly”, “Secondly”, “Moreover”).

Lexical Resource : The vocabulary is appropriate and accurate, though less sophisticated than the Band 9 essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy : The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures with generally good control.

Development of Ideas : Ideas are relevant and supported, though not as fully developed as in the Band 9 essay.

Key Vocabulary to Remember

Digital divide (noun) – the gap between those who have easy access to computers and the Internet, and those who do not Pronunciation: /ˈdɪdʒɪtl dɪˈvaɪd/

Social inclusion (noun) – the provision of certain rights to all individuals and groups in society Pronunciation: /ˈsəʊʃl ɪnˈkluːʒn/

Marginalized (adjective) – treated as insignificant or peripheral Pronunciation: /ˈmɑːdʒɪnəlaɪzd/

Democratize (verb) – to make (something) accessible to everyone Pronunciation: /dɪˈmɒkrətaɪz/

Assistive technology (noun) – devices designed to help people who have difficulties with speaking, typing, writing, remembering, pointing, seeing, hearing, learning, walking, etc. Pronunciation: /əˈsɪstɪv tekˈnɒlədʒi/

Telehealth (noun) – the provision of healthcare remotely by means of telecommunications technology Pronunciation: /ˈtelɪhelθ/

Digital literacy (noun) – the ability to use information and communication technologies to find, evaluate, create, and communicate information Pronunciation: /ˈdɪdʒɪtl ˈlɪtərəsi/

The Role Of Technology In Promoting Social Inclusion is a complex and nuanced topic that is likely to appear in future IELTS Writing Task 2 exams. To prepare, consider practicing with similar questions such as:

  • “How has technology changed the way we communicate and interact socially?”
  • “Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of increasing reliance on technology in education.”
  • “Some people believe that technology is creating a more isolated society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?”

Remember, the key to success in IELTS Writing Task 2 is to fully address the question, organize your ideas clearly, use a range of vocabulary and grammatical structures, and support your points with relevant examples. Practice writing essays on these topics and share them in the comments section below for feedback and discussion. This active practice will help you improve your writing skills and prepare you for success in your IELTS exam.

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IELTS Model Bar Chart Band Score 9

The model answer below is for an IELTS bar chart in writing task 1 of the academic paper. This model answer comes from the video tutorial I made, see the following link: Free Video Tutorial :   How to Describe an IELTS bar chart

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IELTS Bar Chart Sample Answer

The chart illustrates the amount of money spent on five consumer goods (cars, computers, books, perfume and cameras) in France and the UK in 2010. Units are measured in pounds sterling.

Overall, the UK spent more money on consumer goods than France in the period given. Both the British and the French spent most of their money on cars whereas the least amount of money was spent on perfume in the UK compared to cameras in France. Furthermore, the most significant difference in expenditure between the two countries was on cameras.

In terms of cars, people in the UK spent about £450,000 on this as opposed to the French at £400,000. Similarly, the British expenditure was higher on books than the French (around £400,000 and £300,000 respectively). In the UK, expenditure on cameras (just over £350,000) was over double that of France, which was only £150,000.

On the other hand, the amount of money paid out on the remaining goods was higher in France. Above £350,000 was spent by the French on computers which was slightly more than the British who spent exactly £350,000. Neither of the countries spent much on perfume which accounted for £200,000 of expenditure in France but under £150,000 in the UK.

EXAMINER COMMENTS: The report has been organised into logical paragraphs with flexible use of linking. The overview is very clear with key features well highlighted. Accurate data is used to support sentences in the body paragraphs. There is a range of complex structures and vocabulary which are all flexibly used. This is an estimated band score 9 writing task 1 report for the academic paper. As you can see, the structure and information are presented in a way that is easy to understand, while the language offers complexity. 

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hello Liz, this is how I wrote my introductory paragraph: “the bar graph illustrates the amount of money spent on consumer good in the United Kingdom and France in the year 2010”

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Well done, but don’t forget to check your plurals – “consumer goods”.

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Dear Liz, I am planning to give a computer-based IELTS exam. The keyboard only has a “$” on it, and there’s no way in which I can type the pounds sterling symbol. So, should I go and write “pounds-sterling”, everywhere in my body paragraph, while reporting the numbers? Will this cause a word count issue?

There are no rules about the upper limit of words in any writing task. Certainly, you don’t want a long writing task 1 because reports are designed to be short. However, this is because you don’t want your report to get lost in detail, so if you write over 200 words, usually that’s because you’ve given too much detail and haven’t focused on key features. If your writing goes up to 200 words simply because of the issue of repeating the word of the currency, then the word count doesn’t matter and isn’t an issue. So, you see, it isn’t about word count, but about the content of information and what you focus on in your report.

Also, it is possible to mention the currency in the introduction and use it once at the start of each paragraph and then just used simple numbers after that. The introduction does serve to introduce the key factors that relate to the whole report. So, try not to worry. It isn’t a big concern and wouldn’t be an issue if you did or didn’t not repeat the words.

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Hello Liz For my introduction I wrote this : The bar chart illustrates the amount of goods consumed in two countries ( France and UK) in the year 2010. Units are measured in pounds sterling.

This is an example of how you need to be careful changing a noun to a verb. We talk about “consumer goods” which are goods that people buy, such as cameras and perfume. The words “consumer goods” are a compound noun. However, if you alter the word to a verb “to consume” the meaning changes and the verb “consume” relates to eating food or it can be used for a car “consuming petrol”. It cannot be used in this case – people are not consuming goods. So, your techniques for IELTS are strong, but be very careful with paraphrasing to avoid errors, which lower your score.

oh! okay , thank you for your input.

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Hi Liz, i asked chatgpt to rate your band 9 essay according to IELTS scoring criteria, and to my surprise it give it an overall band 7 score. I wanted to ask you regarding the validity of a language based model in rating my assessment, whether it can be trustworthy or not. Or is it an effective tool to assess my writing tasks? Also i love your work, a thanks from a randomn netizen!

IELTS does not use mechanical or computer-based marking for speaking or writing because only trained examiners are capable of assessing not only language, but all aspects of the marking criteria. The marking criteria are specific to IELTS alone and only IELTS trained examiners can assess all aspects of them. I completed my IELTS examiner training which is why I can give band scores with any degree of accuracy. Never use bots and never use random websites unless you know precisely who wrote the website and which qualifications they have in relation to IELTS.

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Hi, Lizz. I usually have difficulties with my Writing, and I cannot use strategies that make my essay smooth. How can I solve it.

This is the reason, I created advanced lessons to teach how to write an IELTS essay step by step, paragraph by paragraph. You can find them in my store: https://elizabethferguson.podia.com/ . I only have a few available at present, but I will be making more in the future.

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Hi Liz,Is it okay to give same information separately in overview such as “Overall,the first chart gives information about x,while the second chart illustrates y. Both charts show information for England and Wales from 1200 to 1300.” Is it okay to write like this?

Your example looks very much like an introduction and overview together. You will already have explained what the information is about and what one of the charts illustrates in the introduction. See my model answers for multiple tasks: https://ieltsliz.com/ielts-writing-task-1-lessons-and-tips/

Hi Liz,Im having problem while writing overview or grouping information.How can i improve this?Should i learn the ways to group information such as grouping for decrease, the highest,location and so on for each type or just focus to be more creative and think myself?

When you present information, you are aiming to be logical and simplistic. If your organisation is clear, logical and simple to understand, this is a good report. The grammar structures should be complex, the information and organisation should be simple. Creativity does not play a part in report writing. If the examiner has any problems at all to understand your organisation, you’ll get a lower score.

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Hi Liz! I’m new to your website and I’ve just spent some hours reading your posts and writing samples. They help me a lot. I just want to say Thank you for your enthusiasm and kindness. I hope to see your new posts <3 Love

I’m so glad they were helpful to you.

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Hi Liz! I’m new to ielts so my writing skills are very poor. Luckily I knew you and your lectures are really engaging. I am studying at an ielts training center in my country and my teacher commented that I cannot use ‘on the other hand’ in writing task 1. Is that correct? Thank you very much!

No, that is not correct. You can definitely use it. It is often the case that your second body paragraph in a bar chart or line graph report will contain an opposite trend so using “On the other hand” is perfect. You can also use “By contrast”. If your teacher is saying that some linking words are suitable for task 2 but not task 1, this is wrong. And if your teacher is saying that “On the other hand” is not suitable for IELTS writing, your teacher is also wrong. This is an idiomatic phrase that is 100% acceptable for a formal essay in IELTS. Most idioms are too informal to use, but some are suitable for formal writing in IELTS and can be used, such as “On the other hand” or “the key to success”. All my model essays are safely written with language and techniques up to band 9. By the way, it is really common in Vietnam to be given strange advice from some IELTS teachers. I used to teach in the British Council in Hanoi and have met students from other schools who were given advice that was not at all accurate.

If in the second body paragraph in a diagram, is that correct to write? For example: “In 2001, while hotel, swimming pool ,tennis courts were expanded, in the green space like: dunes, cafe and golf course remained unmodified.On the other hand, the marina , pier, fish market were constructed , replaced public and private beaches.Nearby, Hotel is top right-hand corner car park.There used to be farmland on the East,but it was then altered by a new hotel with a swimming pool and tennis courts inside.Finally, High Street Road, the shops turned into flats”. Thank you so much <3

I don’t offer feedback on writing as a function of my website, but I do have some free time today so here is a review:

1) “In 2001, while hotel, swimming pool ,tennis courts were expanded…” Problem: – articles – the hotel, the swimming pool.

2) “In 2001, while hotel, swimming pool ,tennis courts were expanded…” Problem: expanded – this verb means to grow larger. We don’t expand tennis courts because the size of one court is fixed. So, expand is the wrong verb. We can add more tennis courts but that requires a different verb = more tennis courts were added / were built / were constructed

3) “…in the green spaces… like a cafe” Problem: – this is confusing language because a cafe is not an example of a green space. You should write: – In terms of the green spaces, the dunes, the cafe and the golf course remained unmodified. (note lack of articles = the)

4) “On the other hand, the marina , pier, fish market were constructed , replaced public and private beaches.” This has no clear meaning which would mean this is a band 5 sentence. You say “the marina was constructed” – this means it is newly made. But then you say it was replaced by beaches. Here are some suggestions: a) – The marina, the pier and the fish market were demolished and replaced by public and private beaches. (note the use of “and” between two clauses). The verb demolish means to remove a building – to pull it down. Or did you mean the opposite? b) The public and private beaches were replaced by a marina, a pier and a fish market. OR.. c) The marina, the pier and the fish market, which were newly constructed, replaced the public and private beaches. (this requires a clause)

5) “Nearby, Hotel is top right-hand corner car park” – this sentence doesn’t have a meaning so I can’t help you with this. It doesn’t make sense.

6) “There used to be farmland on the East,but it was then altered by a new hotel with a swimming pool and tennis courts inside” should be: – There used to be farmland in the east, but in its place, a new hotel with a swimming pool and tennis courts was built.

7) “Finally, High Street Road, the shops turned into flats”.” should be: Finally, on the High Street, the shops were converted into flats.

As you can see, each sentence has a large number of errors with articles, verbs and sentence structure. Go through each small error and make a list so that you research that grammar point or word. A band score 5 = frequent errors (and meaning is sometimes lost), band score 6 = some errors, band score 7 = few errors. At present, your writing is around 5.5 because of the errors. But you can easily improve this if you focus on all the points above. I hope this helps you and other people. See this page which contains tips, language and a model answer for a writing task 1 map: https://ieltsliz.com/ielts-map-model-answer/

So, am I correct in using on the other hand in the above paragraph? Because of this article, my ielts center teacher said not to use it. The word on “the other hand” is perfect to use in which type of writing task 1? Thank you very much for your enthusiasm. Love you forever <3

You mentioned your writing in your previous comment. I can’t comment on the use in that because the sentence starting “On the other hand, ” had no clear meaning in English due to a lot of grammar and vocabulary errors. And the previous sentence also contained so many errors that it also was confusing. If the first sentence was about what did not change on the map and the second sentence was about what changed (meaning they are contrasting sentences), you can use “On the other hand”. But your writing contained too many errors for me to understand the meaning and of course, I can’t see the map you are describing, so I can’t check the information myself.

Here is a dictionary link for you: https://www.collinsdictionary.com/dictionary/english/on-the-other-hand

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Hello Liz. Appreciate your hard work.

How much I will get band if i will write like this:

The bar chart compares the amount of money spent on five consumers goods in France and UK over a period of one year.

Overall, the people of UK spent most money on consumed goods as compared to France. Both the countries spent most money on cars and least money on perfume.

marks for these 2 paragraph, introduction and overview

The aim of my website isn’t to provide marking or feedback, but just free materials to learn from. However, I will note a couple of points for your development and so others can learn from this comment. 1) Introductions are there to introduce essential information. If there are five consumer goods introduce them clearly so the reader knows what they are. See this free video lesson: https://ieltsliz.com/introduction-paragraph-for-ielts-writing-task-1-reports/ 2) “over a period of one year” indicates that it showed information month by month for a period of one year. We use “for a period of a year” when it is shown step by step through that period – change over a period of time. If the chart shows only one year with no change over time, but just one static year, then you say what year – in 2010. 3) the overview is the most important paragraph which contain all key features – this needs extending for a higher score. 4) information must be accurate or you get a lower score – France did not spend the least on perfume, it spent the least on cameras. Use these points to raise your awareness of how IELTS is marked and what to look for in other model answers so you can learn form them.

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Hi Liz, thank you for your excellent content. I have been working on each writing task independently before reviewing your feedback. However, I am struggling to improve my writing skills without simply imitating your style. Could you please offer some advice on how I might develop my own voice? The bar chart illustrates the total amount of money spent on five different consumer goods in France and the UK in 2010. All units are measured in pounds sterling. Overall, it can be seen that British people spent more money on consumer goods than the French in 2010. The highest amount of money was spent on cars in both France and the UK. While the lowest expenditure in the UK was on perfume, the lowest in France was on cameras. Additionally, the greatest difference between the expenditures of the two countries was for cameras. People in the UK spent more money on cars than the French (around £450,000 and exactly £400,000 respectively). Moreover, the expenditure on books in the UK was just above £400,000 compared to France, which was exactly £300,000. Another consumer good on which the British spent more money than the French was cameras, which had a significant difference in expenditure between the two countries (around £350,000 and exactly £150,000 respectively). In terms of other consumer goods, the French spent more money than the British. The expenditure on computers in France was above £350,000, which was higher than the expenditure on computers in the UK, which was exactly £350,000. For perfume, the French spent exactly £200,000, while the British spent less, slightly under £150,000.

The aim of my website isn’t to offer a marking service but just to provide access to model answers etc. However, I do have time today to give you a little feedback.

It is a very strong piece of writing. All information is accurate and organised. Your language is excellent. You should be proud of this. However, it is longer than it needs to be. This is a bar chart with minimal information and you’ve written over 216 words. That takes time and isn’t necessary.

Here are two easy tweaks for shortening it to the recommended length: 1) In the first body paragraph, you wrote “Another consumer good on which the British spent more money than the French was cameras” – this can be written more precisely as “Likewise, spending on cameras…”. The linking word “Likewise” means it follows the same pattern as the previous sentence which has the same meaning as your words but is more appropriate for report writing which should be concise. 2) In the second (final) body paragraph, you wrote “In terms of other consumer goods, the French spent more money than the British. ” – this is too much like an overall statement. It is better to write “On the other hand, the expenditure …” or “By contrast, …”. When you use that signpost, the examiner knows the paragraph contains the opposite trend to the previous paragraph. If you total those words, you’ve written almost an extra 25 unnecessary words in a report that is only around 180 words on average. It’s not a huge problem, but you can see how easy it is to be more concise with language and save yourself time.

I deeply appreciate your prompt and thoughtful response. I’ll certainly keep it in mind and put it to good use.

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Liz, thank you so so much I finally got my desired band score after purchasing your grammar book, it really helped me a lot in my writing part 2😊. I am forever grateful, and I wish you a complete recovery in your health.

I’m so pleased for you. Well done 🙂 I’m glad you enjoyed my Grammar E-book 🙂

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how can i get your grammar e book? Actually i am very depressed about my writing task 2. May i get some sample answer from you with (key word, linkers).

You can find free model essays and a page of linking words for writing task 2 in the main writing task 2 section of this website. Use the RED MENU BAR to open that section. You can find my Grammar E-book in my store: https://elizabethferguson.podia.com/

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Hi Liz! I’m very thankful to you for your to the point guidance on writing tasks and it is very helpful for me .These things and helpful material improve my score instantly.But the one thing which is I could not found any sample on multiple charts why?

You can find that on the main writing task 1 page in the practice lessons section: https://ieltsliz.com/ielts-writing-task-1-lessons-and-tips/ . Some of the practice lessons also contain model answers.

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Dear Liz, Thank you from the bottom of my heart. My friend sent me the link to your blog when I was desperate. As soon as I realized I had figured it out, I turned into a huge “I GOT IT!”. Thank you so much. Your explanation is clear, simple, and to the point.

I’m so pleased for you. Those moments of “I got it!” are so important. I want everyone to realise that you can tackle IELTS, but you need to avoid over-thinking. IELTS is, in some ways, quite a logical test. But in the beginning it seems confusing and then there is bad advice online. Anyway, I’m pleased for you. I hope you continue to use all pages on my free website and eventually achieve the score you want. I’ll keep my fingers crossed for you 🙂

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The bar chart illustrates the amount of money that is spent on different consumer goods (cars, computers, books, perfume, cameras) in France and the UK in the year 2010. Units measured for the money is pound sterling.

Overall, the most money that is spent by France and the UK are on cars and least is on cameras and perfumes respectively. We can say that that UK has spent more money in consumer goods than France. The expenditure on the cameras has significant difference in France and in the UK.

The cars, computers and the cameras were most spent on, in the UK around 450000-pound sterling, similarly France also spent most of their money on cars and computers but unlike UK it didn’t spend on cameras but on books, which is around 300,000-to-400,000-pound sterling.

Coming to the least amount of expenditure on the goods, France spent it’s least amount of money on cameras and UK spent it’s least on perfumes. Cameras were one of the highest expenditures of UK in the year 2010 but were the least for France. Their difference significantly amounts to approximately 150,000 pounds sterling.

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The bar chart illustrates the amount of pounds sterling which were spent by Fance and U.K for goods such as cars, computers, books ,perfume and cameras in 2010.

Overall, France spend more money on computers and perfume, meanwhile U.K were much interested in cars, books, and cameras.

The expenditure rate of France for cars and computers was close about 400,000 pound sterling, with 25,000 difference. Meanwhile, for perfume and cameras France spent half as much as that for cars around 200,000 and 50,000 less for cameras.

The U.K hold a record for highest expenditure in the chart for cars which is around 450,000, also they spent for books as much as France for cars. In addition, computers and cameras rate of expenditure was the same 350,000 pound sterling. While the least amount was spent on perfume about 140,000 pound sterling.

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Hi Liz, I was most scared of writing task and i scored 7.5 and 8 overall. You articles and topics helped me a lot in achieving this score.

Great results! Very well done to you! Thanks for coming back to share your results 🙂

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I have no idea how to check my writings. Are there any problems with my writing: The bar chart illustrates the spending of France and UK on five different goods in 2010.

Overall, in both countries the highest expenditure was on cars, while perfumes accounted for the lowest in the UK and the cameras had the lowest figure for France. Moreover, while the UK expenditure on cars, books and cameras was more than France, French spent more on computers and perfumes.

Expenditure on cars stands at 450,000 for the UK, and this figure, standing at 400,000, is slightly smaller for France. Likewise, while the British spent 400,000 pounds on books, French spent only 300,000 on this category. In terms of cameras, the figures show that spending of UK with just over 350,000 was more than double the rate for France with 150,000 pounds.

In contrast, French spent more on computers and perfumes. Expenditure of computers stands at approximately 380,000 for French, which is slightly more than the amount spent by British standing at 350.000. Likewise, expenses of perfume for France was 200,000 pounds, while it was less than 150,000 for the UK.

I don’t usually give feedback, but I will say it’s a strong piece of writing with the right structure and techniques. However, do make sure to list the categories in the introduction – it’s important to introduce them before you refer to them. Of course, if the list if very long, you might not. But this list is short, so it is a good idea to introduce them. Also check your linking words – you have a tendency to repeat them which will lower your score. Linking words are very easy to learn and it isn’t difficult to be flexible with them if you pay attention while you are writing. For example, you can use “similarly”, “although”, “whereas”, “as opposed to”, “in comparison to” etc. Lastly, pay attention to your tenses “expenditure on cars stands at” = “stood at” – this is in 2010 so you need past tense. You also need to review the accuracy of your grammar as a whole.

Thanks a million, it was very helpful and I never thought I would get a feedback from you. I’m sending you all my best wishes for a swift recovery. I truly hope your illness fades away so you can be back to your healthy self soon.

Thanks a million. Well noted.

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The bar chart illustrates the spending on 5 consumer goods, namely cars, computers, books, perfumes and cameras, of France and the U.K. in the year 2010.

Overall, the expenditure of the British was higher than that of the French. Both Britain and France spent the most money on cards. The British spent the least money on perfume compared to the French whose expenditure on cameras was the least.

Regarding the expenditure on cards, the British spent slightly more than £450,000 while the French spent exactly £400,000 on this. The U.K. spent over £400,000 on books as opposed to £300,000 spent by France. The amount of money spend on cameras by the U.K. was more than twice as the amount spent by France, which was over £350,000 and £150,000 respectively.

On the other hand, the French spent marginally more than £350,000 on computers than the British did (£350,000). For the amount of money spent on perfumes, £200,000 was spent by the French which was more than the British who spent less than £150,000.

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The bar chart illustrates the consumer goods preferences of two countries (France and the UK) in 2010. Overall, cars and computers were the most consumed goods in both countries, with perfume being the least preferred. However, the UK had the highest expenditure on all goods when compared to France. The UK has spent more money on cars, books, and computers, respectively, when compared with France, which has fewer expenditures. Furthermore, the UK used more cars than France, and the difference is nearly 50,000 pounds sterling. In addition, the UK spent a significantly higher portion than France, and the difference was worth nearly a hundred thousand pounds sterling. On the other hand, the UK spent more on cameras, which are worth more than 350,000 pounds sterling, but France spent less on them, which cost 150,000 pounds. In contrast, expenditure on computers was the only thing France spent over the UK; it was closer to 400,000 pounds sterling.

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The bar chart illustrates the money spend on the consumer goods (cars, computers , books, perfume and cameras ) in UK and France in 2010. Units are measured in pounds sterling. Overall, it is clear that UK and France both spend most on cars while least on perfume in UK and cameras in France. The major difference was found on cameras . UK spend 450, 000 pounds on cars which is higher than France (400,000). UK spend more than France on books which is 400,000 pounds. (1000 pounds more than France). Likewise UK spend half 350,000 on cameras while France spend half less than UK on cameras (15,000). France spend more than UK on 2 items ( computer and perfume). France spend more than 350,000 on computers while UK spend exactly 350, 000 on computers. Similarly, France spend 200,000 pounds on perfume which is higher than UK’s expenditure i.e about 150,000 pounds.

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The chart illustrates the amount of money spent on five consumer goods (cars, computers, books, perfume, cameras) in France and UK in 2010. Units are measured in pounds sterling.

Overall, the UK spent more money on consumer goods than France in the year 2010. Both the British and French spent most of their money on cars where as the least amount of money was spent on perfume in UK compared to cameras in France. Furthermore, the most significant difference between both the countries in expenditure was on cameras.

In terms of cars, people in UK spent about 450,000 pounds sterlings as opposed to the French at 400000 pounds. Similarly British expenditure was more than double on cameras as compared to France (around 350,000 and 150,000 respectively). Whereas in France expenditure on perfumes (about 200000) was more than that of UK, which was under 150,000 pounds.

On the other hand, the amount of money spent on computers was more in France ( around 370,000 pounds) than that in UK, which was 350,000 pounds. There was a huge difference in expenditure on books between both the countries, which was around 400,000 pounds in UK and 300,000 in France.

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The bar chart demonstrates the average spending on five types of consumer goods in France and the UK in 2010.

Overall, except for computers and perfume, the amount of money used for buying consumer goods in the UK was higher than that of France. Among the five categories, the expenditure on cars was always the highest in both countries.

Looking at the data of France, while the French spent 400,000 pounds on cars, this figure for perfume was 50% lower, at merely 200,000 pounds. As compared to cars, the expenditures for computers and books were slightly lower, with respective figures being 380,000 and 300,000 pounds. Besides, only 150,000 pounds were spent on camera, being the lowest consumer spending among the five kinds of goods.

Turning to the UK’ statistic, it can be seen that the amount of money used for paid out on cars was over 450,000 pounds, and a third of it was the figure for perfume. Another noticeable feature is that the UK residents spent an equal amount of money on computers and cameras, which was approximately 350,000 pounds each.

I’ll leave similar feedback to a previous comment. Bar charts present categories as two bars so that those two bars can be compared together side by side. The two bars are France and the UK. This means you don’t separate the countries, you compare them.

Thank you so much, I’ve noted

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greetings Liz,a question ;Is a symbol counted as a word

The symbol forms part of a number. For example, “75%” is counted as one number in the writing test.

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Wonderful explanation! Thank you liz.I love you from my heart for your amazing teaching method.

Glad you enjoy my lessons 🙂

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The chart illustrates the national spending on five consumer commodities(cars,computers,books,perfumes and cameras) in France and the UK in 2010. Unit is in pounds sterling. Overall, the UK and france spent the most on cars. In France, the least expenditure was on cameras, while in the UK it was on perfumes. In total, the outlay of the UK was more than France. The information given indicates that the national spending on conusmer goods in france declined across all the categories with more expenses on cars(450,000 pounds). This amount was more than double the payments on cameras(180,000 pounds) which had the lowest outlay for France. In contrast, the national expenditure of the UK fluctuated during this period,with most of it(400,000 pounds) alloted to cars this was similar to France allotment on books for the period.The least payment for the UK was on perfumes(), with a slight difference in pay outs on computer by both countries respectively(350,000, 370,000) pounds.

please liz kindly rate my writing thanks for the efforts you have put into this blog, am from Nigeria and am using your blog to study for my IELTS exam coming up in 2weeks.

The sentences “Units are measured in …” is always plural. The information about consumer spending in France declining over all categories, is an overview and belongs in the overview. When you describe a trend over the whole period without specific amounts put that information in the overview. A bar chart is about comparing the countries within the category – exactly as shown in the chart. You describe, for example, cars and compare the spending of France and the UK in that category. You must respect the function of the bar chart and how the information is present in the chart. Finally, don’t use brackets all the time for the numbers. Your aim is to show how flexible you are with your sentence structures.

I have noted all the corrections you have said.

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The bar chart compares the amount of money spent on the five various goods ( cars, computers, books, cameras) in 2010 in two Europeian countries (France and UK) Overall, it can be easily seen that UK has spent more money on cars, books and cameras. Also, The considerable difference between 2 countries was on cameras. To begin with chorus, UK has spent about 50000£ more than France showing 450000£. Above 350000£ was spent on computers in France. Similarly with cars, aproximately 400000£ has been spent on computer by UK in 2010 On the other hand British expenditure was higher than France ( about 400000£ and 300000£ respectively). In both countries the amount of money spent on perfume was low which accounted 200000£ in France and just under 150000£ in UK. Camerad was one of the most popular item in Britian reaching just above 350000£ while France has the lowest point 150000£ in 2010

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The chart below depicts the information about the spending on household items in United Kingdom and France in 2010. After analyzing the graph, it can be seen clearly that France spent 400,000 pound on cars in 2011 being greater than UK in same year. Total expenditure on computers in France was 375000 in given year. The money spent by France on remaining three goods (books, perfumes and cameras) was less than the first two items, which were 300,000,200,000 and 150,000 respectively. The graph further collate that the expenditure of UK on cars was around 460,000 pounds in 2011. However, UK spending on computers was less than France by about 350,000. After cars, books were the most consumed items in UK with around 410,000 pounds. Perfume was least consumed item by people of UK by approximately 140,000 pounds. UK spent almost double on cameras than France by about 360,000 pounds. Overall, France showed a downward trend and UK had some fluctuations in his expenditure on consumers goods.

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Hello Liz, Isn’t this answer a little above 200 words? Is it fine to write so much? Thank you.

There is no word limit for any writing task in IELTS. However, longer answers might be less focused, contain more irrelevant information and could contain a greater density of language errors. I recommend all candidates to aim for between 170 and 190 words. However, I also like to show flexibility of options for people with higher level English and excellent IELTS exam skills

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In many nations only a small group of individuals receive very high salaries. Few people debate that this is beneficial for the country and other’s think that government should put limits on salary.

Firstly, huge salaries are received by people with exceptional talent and the person who is doing that job may play a crucial role in the company’s or nations development, for instance in my country highest salaries are received by company ceo’s, and other government individuals like scientist, Ias officers etc. In my opinion it is justified giving them huge salaries because to get that position they must have worked very hard.By giving higer salaries one nation can potrait it’s economical strength and preserve its own talent, for example most of the students from russia with huge talent mostly tend to work in there country.

However, others believe that government should implement certain rules to limit the salaries received by a individual person. Mostly people believe that giving such a huge amount pf salaries to a single person can effect overall companies or government expenditure, also they think that poor and middle class families remain same. This also effects in pandemic time, for example in the USA due to inflation most of the common people became homeless, and the one who received higher salaries were able sustain that. There is always a difference between high salary employe and low salaried, due this per capita income is varied.

In conclusion, every individual has their own opinion, but according to me putting restrictions on salaries can effect the overall development and If government implements certain rules then most of them will migrate to other countries for better life, instead government should bring more employment opportunities to improve overall employment rate and GDP.

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Thank you for your lessons and materials. I noticed on the website that you advise sticking to the official British Council information for the test. I have a question related to this. In the official ‘Road to IELTS’ advice and tutorials for Writing Task 1 (IELTS Academic), the instructors suggest structuring the text as follows:

– Introduction – Body paragraphs – Overview (as a sort of concluding paragraph)

From your videos, you seem to suggest placing the ‘Overview’ paragraph right after the ‘Introduction,’ which makes sense, and I agree with you on that. What is your opinion on this matter? Is the placement of the ‘Overview’ paragraph interchangeable (meaning we won’t lose marks if it is positioned at the beginning of the text)?

Yes, it’s interchangeable. I have a video about this. Some people choose to put it at the end as a kind of conclusion. But the function of a conclusion is to restate main points. An overview doesn’t have this function. The overview actually states the main features for the first and only time, which is why putting it after the introduction is best. Secondly, when you put it at the end, people have a tendency to not pay much attention to its contents. What a mistake! It’s the most important paragraph in the whole of task 1. However, it’s position can be put in either place without impacting your marks. But always be aware of not prioritising it or repeating information if you choose to put it at the end.

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Liz, in terms of numbers, is it a big deal to write 40.000 (forty thousand, as an example) with the point rather than with a comma? (Eg: 40,000)

What is the norm in English here? (Or otherwise, Maths…)

Thank you in advance.

In English, the dot is used as a decimal point which would make 40.000 an actual number of just 40. We use commas to divide zeros for big numbers.

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Hello Liz, Units are measured in pounds sterling. Units were measured in pounds sterling. Would it be wrong if I use past tense in this sentence?? Thank You

We use the present tense for this statement because it refers to the graph currently in front of you.

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The bar charts compare the amount of money spent on different groups of goods (cars, computers, books, perfume and cameras) in 2010 in France and the UK. Units are measured in pounds sterling.

Overall, it can be clearly seen that the British in general spent more money than the French. The biggest expenditure for both countries was on cars, whereas the lowest for the UK was perfume and for France cameras.

In terms of the outlay of the UK, most of the money was paid for cars and books (just over 45,000 and 400,00 respectively). The expenditure on cameras and computers was almost equal at nearly 350,000, whereas the lowest amount of money was spent on perfume (under 150,000), which was at least 2 times less than on other goods.

Moving on to the situation in France, they spent the majority of money on cars as in the UK, however their expenditure was by 50,000 less. In contrast, the French paid slightly more than the British for computers, which was followed by the outlay for books (nearly 380,000 and 300,000 respectively). Finally, perfume was ranked fourth at 200,000, followed by the least group in terms of expenditure, cameras, at 150,000, which was twice as less as the British paid for them.

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The bar chart illustrates the amount spent on five consumer goods (Cars, Computers, Books, Perfume, Cameras) in France and UK in the year 2010. Units are given in pound sterling.

Overall, UK and France both spent most of their money in Cars. However, the least amount of money spent by UK was on Perfume whereas in case of France was Cameras. Furthermore, the most significant difference in expenditure between France and UK was Cameras.

Looking specifically at France, the figure shows it spent 400,000 pounds in Cars. Similarly, the expenditure of France on Perfume and Computers were 200,000 pound and about 375,000 pounds respectively which exceeded the expenditure spent by UK on both the goods. Moreover, The amount spent by France on Books was 300,000 which was double the expenditure on Cameras.

Regarding UK, Cars were the goods which UK spent most, with 450,000 pounds. The amount of 350,000 was paid out on Computers which was slightly less than the amount France invested. UK spent slightly little more than 400000 pounds on Books. Similarly, the expenditure of Cameras was slightly more than 350,000 pounds. However, the least expenditure spent was on the Perfume which was almost 150,000.

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The bar chart provides data about money spent by the UK and France on consumption goods in the year of 2010. Unit of money is pounds sterling.

Overall, both France and the UK spent most on cars.The UK’s expenditure on cameras was roughly twice as large as France’s.

Looking specifically at France, the amount of money spent on cars accounted for 400000, which was the highest in France.After cars, comes computers to a close second at around 380000.On the contrary, the least amount of funds was disbursed on cameras at exactly 150000, which is twice as little as the UK’s expenditure on cameras.

With respect to the UK, it, like Fance, also had cars as the consumption goods on which the highest amount of funds was expended, which accounted for about 460000.Books was the second consumer item after cars on which the largest expenditure was made at around 410000.In contrast, the UK expended less than 150000 on perfume, which was the item on which the least expenditure made. Is the essay good enough?What band would it score?

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The provided chart portrays the comparison between the amount of money spent by France and the UK, in 2010, on five consumer goods i.e. Cars, Computers, Books, Perfumes, and Cameras. The unit of measurement used to present the values is pound sterling. Most significantly, the total expenditure of the UK surpasses that of a France. The maximum amount of money spent by both the countries was on cars which amount to just above 450,000 and 400,000, respectively. Whereas, the minimum spending by the UK was on perfumes (Slightly less than 150,000) and by France it was on cameras (150,000). Getting into further depth, the items on which the spending by the UK was more than France were Cars, Books, and Cameras. On Cars, the UK spent 450,000 while France spent 400,000. Apart from that, the spending by the UK on Books and Cameras was just above then 400,000 and slightly above than 350,000, respectively, whereas, the spending by France on same items was 300,000 and 150,000, respectively. Collectively, the total spending by the UK on these three items was over 120,000 which was greater than France’s total 800,000. On the contrary, France (total over 550,000) exceeded the UK (total under 500,000) in terms of the spending on Computers and Perfumes. The amount of money spent by France on computers was above 350,000 as compared to 350,000 by the UK. Likewise, on Perfumes, France spent 200,000 while the UK spent less than 150,000.

P.s. I was unable to find pound sign on my keyboard so please consider it.

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I find your blog super useful, thank you for taking the time to put all the elements needed to succeed on this exam. I’ve been studied IELTS for almost two years now and have taken 3 exams so far; however, my writing score don’t seem to improve. After watching your video I had a bit of idea as of why this keep happening…

The “techniques” I’ve been taught are very different from yours. I was told not to include any details on the introduction if I do I will lose points for that, as that must be part of the body. Also, the number of bodies will depend on the number of graph, meaning if I there is only one Bar chart I have to write only one body, if I write more I will lose marks. Of course summarising all details in one body will look messy. Basically, my writings look pretty much like this:

Introduction: The expenditure in France and the UK during 2010 is being depicted by the bar chart.

Body 1: As clearly seen, the x-axis contains the goods namely computers, perfumes, books among others, while the y-axis the amount spent in pounds. Then, I name the highest, lowest and order.

Conclusion…..

I honestly don’t know if this is one of the reasons I haven’t been able to get the score I need. I would appreciate your feedback, of course if you can give one.

Anyways, I have my test again in two weeks really hoping to get the score I need by following your recommendations.

Thank you so much again. 🙂

Your introduction should help the reader know what the bar chart is about. If it is about the expenditure on goods, then introduce how many goods or name them. This information helps the reader understand the body paragraphs better. The name of each category is not a key feature, it is a factual element of the chart which the reader needs to know. So, always introduce names, categories, dates and another fact given about the chart. Body paragraphs can be used to divide categories into logical groups to help the reader understand the content and key features better. The overview is the most important paragraph. It does not repeat main points like a conclusion in task 2, it presents key features in a summary for the first and only time.

See this page: https://ieltsliz.com/ielts-writing-task-1-lessons-and-tips/ this page will help you with task 2: https://ieltsliz.com/ielts-writing-task-2/ And my store contains advanced lessons and e-books for writing task 2: https://elizabethferguson.podia.com/

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Is it a good or bad idea to write something derived from what’s given on the chart? For example when mentioning the French expenditure on perfumes if I write “France’s 200,000 pounds expense on perfume was also higher than the UK which stood at around 100,000 pounds in the same category. Well, The French do have more admiration for scents.”

I love your ideas. Unfortunately, the answer is a big NO. Writing task 1 is a factual report based on what information is given, not on your perceptions, your opinion or your knowledge. No information can be added that isn’t given in the task.

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Hello mam, I’m Tinny from Bangladesh. I am interested to do my post graduation in Cybersecurity in the UK. Therefore I’ve started to take preparation for IELTS from this month. But it seems hard for me sometimes. As a beginner when I get frustrated, I use to watch your lessons. Your smiling face just boosts my confidence that I have to obtain a brilliant score so that at least I can go to England and see you in person one day! You’re a great teacher. Wish you’ll be recovered soon and come back with new videos ☺️

I wish you lots of luck in your test 🙂

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hii lizz …. love from jammu and kashmir… really appreciate ur knowledge 😘.. u r one who give 100 percent without any cost … God bless uhhh alwys 🌸 …luv uhhh 😘

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Hi Liz 👋🏻. I would be lying if I said your knowledge is useless. I’m glad to know you. I feel cloud of nine when I read your posts 😍 Thanks for your attention to your followers 😇

I’m so glad you are enjoying my website 🙂

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The chart illustrates the amount of money spent on five different consumer goods (cars, competes, books, perfume, and cameras) in France and the UK in 2010. Units are measured in pounds sterling.

In general, people in the UK spent much money than the French over the period in question. Both countries had the highest expenditure on cars, whereas the least amount of money was spent on perfume in the UK compared cameras in France. The most significant difference in expenditure between two countries was on cameras.

In terms of cars, over £450,000 was spent on this in the UK as opposed to exactly £400,000 in France. Similarly, the British expenditure was higher on books than that of the French (about £400,000 and £300,000 respectively). In France, the amount of money spent on cameras (£150,000) inferiorly halved of the expenditure in the UK, which was just above £350,000.

On the contrary, the amount of money paid out on the remaining goods was higher in France. people in France spent over £350,000 on computers which was slightly superior than exactly £350,000 spent by the British. Neither of the countries paid out much money on perfume which accounted for £200,000 of expenditure in France, but under £150,000 in the UK.

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The bar chart illustrates the number of pounds spent on consumer goods in the UK and France in 2010. Overall, the Britishers spent more on cars, books, and cameras whereas the French spent more on computers and perfumes. With regards to people in the UK, the highest amount was spent on cars, which was about 450,000 pounds, whereas the least amount was spent on perfume which was around 140,000 pounds. Similarly, Britishers also preferred to buy books resulting in spending slightly more than 400,000 pounds followed by cameras which sum up the amount slightly greater than 350,000 pounds. Also, the British spent exactly 350,000 pounds on computers falling the expenditure at second last after perfume. Considering the expenditure of the French, the largest amount 400,000 pounds was spent on cars whereas the least amount 150,000 pounds was spent on cameras. Moreover, the people in France bought computers resulting in the amount around 380,000 pounds; meanwhile, the amount spent on books and perfume were 300,000 and 200,000 pounds respectively.

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I’m muslim from Uzbekistan and about to get an IELTS certification.I can say that I really enjoy when i read this typical essays and ideas.Expecting more genuine tips and samples

Go to the home page and access all my lessons for all sections of the test.

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wow! this is very informative. Thank you for that wonderful explaination. ..

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I am writing task 1 and 2 on a daily basis, but no one give me tips and find my mistake from my class tutors may anyone here they can find me to find my mistake and give me tips to score 7 band.

There are over 300 pages of free lessons, tips etc on this website. Go to the HOME page and learn how to use this site.

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The bar graph represents the total expense between two countries that have been placed in terms of five different items (Cars, computers, books, perfume, and Cameras) in the year 2010. Overall, it is evident from the chart that Cars, books, and Cameras were the expenses that have a higher amount of consumed percentage in the UK except for perfume and computers which can be seen at a hike in France. In the first resort, starting from the Cars was thing taken by customers at a total of 450,000 numbers in the UK slightly dropped to 400,000 in France whereas the secondly bought thing was books that were taken by people at 400,000 in Britain fell to 300,000 in France. Meanwhile, Cameras were the accessory which was sold at a little above than 350,000 in the UK and decline to 150,000 in France in the same year. Perfume and computer were the products that were pointed at 360,000 and 200,000 in France and marginally decrease to 350,000 and 140,000 in the UK.

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Thank you ma’am💖 In my view, You are not only a brilliant person but also you are a good teacher.

Thanks for your kind comment 🙂

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hello mam, why you not update on youtube channels?

…because I’m sick and unable to make videos at the moment

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Wish you a speedy recovery maam. You are really a true inspiration for all of us.

Thanks for your kind comment

Get well soon madam

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Please get well ma’am you are one in a million. Am just wondering what could have happened that you don’t post new videos..❤️❤️

Thank. You’re sweet. I’m trying to make a video at the moment but my health is just so unstable. I’ve started making a video for essential tips and information for the reading test. I’ll post it once it’s ready. Hopefully this month or next month if I’m lucky! 🙂

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Hello from the highest peak of the world MT. EVEREST , Nepal. After watching your all section of ielts i just realized that you are above the Mt. EVEREST.

Such a lovely comment. Thanks 🙂

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I like your writing skills

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Hey Liz, can we use brackets like in this essay? I feel like there is a lot of usage of brackets but I don’t know . Please help

Yes, of course you can use brackets. You should be flexible with how you present information. All my model answers are safe to learn from.

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Thank you teacher you’re the best teacher ☺️

You’re welcome 🙂

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Mam your videos are very helpful . I wish you a quick recovery! Take care yourself. and thanks alote.

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The given bar demonstrates the difference between the expenditure of France an the United Kingdom on purchasing goods in 2010. Overall, the French ranked first in types of goods, while the British had a share in three. The highest figure for the UK and France were reported in expenditure of cars and computers, respectively. The was a significant differnce between the amount of money spent on cameras in the UK and France , the former standing first with over 350000 poud sterling , while the latter was 150000. Consumers in the UK had also a highest share in expenditure of cars and books , while the former was 450000 and the latter was 400000. The disparity between the expenditure of compuers was almost the same in two countries. France standing first with nearly 400000 and the share of the UK was low by a narrow margin 350000. The lowest share for France and the UK in buying perfume, while the former spent 200000 and the latter spent less than 150000.

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The given bar chart illustrate the amount of money spent on five consumer products (cars,computers,books,perfume and cameras) in The Uk and France in 2010. overall, the UK and france both nation spent more amount of money on cars.whereas, the UK and france both country spent least amount of money on perfume and cameras respectively as compared to other nation.

In terms of cars, the UK spent about more than 450000 pound in given year 2010.while france spent 400000 pound on cars.similarly,the british excpenditure was higher on books as compared to france, its around 370000 and 350000 respectively. In the UK, expenditure on camers was 350000 which was double the of france, its about 150000 pound. On the other hand, france paid more amount of money on computers then the UK. same as expenditure on perfume was also higher then the UK itas around 20000pound.

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A life saver thank you so much teacher

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Once I found you Liz the nightmare is over. Writing was the most difficult section on my test. All the time thinking about how to develop my writing in aiming to reach band 6, but now and after I watched your valuable videos and read your tips band 6 will never be satisfied, me my desire increases for band 7 and above. Any correction for my writing is appreciated.

Glad my lessons are helpful. Fingers crossed for a band 7! Remember, aim for accuracy in your writing test – don’t aim to impress.

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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of the five different types of energy production in France in 1995 and 2005.

Overall, energy was produced the highest from coal in both years. This large production was also evident to other energy sources as gas, petro and nuclear. Whereas, there was only least production came from other source.

Generally, the significant source of energy came from coal with 29.80% in 1995 and over a third after ten years. It was also worth noting that both gas and petro produced high energy over this time period. In detail, there was around 29-30% energy produced by gas in 1995 and 2005 respectively. Conversely, production from petro drastically dropped from 29.27% in 1995 to around 10% less in 2005.

Meanwhile, energy came nuclear and other source both dramatically rose in 2005. 6.40% comprised of nuclear in 1995, and 4% more ten years later. Similarly, a remarkable increase was also noted for the other source as it boomed and doubled pushing its figure from 4.90% to 9.10%.

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I must say that I was lucky to have come across Liz’s content on YouTube few minutes ago. I watched your 18 minutes Task 1 video and it changed my orientation about how to answer Bar chart questions. I rushed down to this site immediately. IT IS GOING TO BE YOUR CONTENTS ALL THE WAY.

I just want to say thanks for the free content and hopefully I will be back to share my result soon.

You’re very welcome 🙂 And good luck with your test!!

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My Test is Tomorrow please pray 🙏 for my exam. Since, this is the last chance given by my parents 😢

Good luck!!!

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Thanks so much for your essays😃 I am taking them for samples Thanks soo much🙂

You’re welcome

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Hey Liz, I must say your lessons are really helpful, you also simplify all lectures, making it very easy to understand. God bless you.

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Hi mam,when you will start classes on YouTube

I’ve been really sick and I’m still sick. However, I’ll try make an updated video of my situation soon so you all understand what’s happening.

Sorry mam I don’t know that you are sick I pray God that you will get soon may God always bless you with good health and prosperity

Hello ma’am

Hope you get better soon.

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Get well soon mam. We’re missing you so bad.

Thanks. I’m trying so had to get better. But it’s a slow process and so easy to get worse.

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Hi Liz, I just love everything about you at first sight I am feeling very sad to hear you are sick but I believe and trust God for a speedy recovery. Take care Liz

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I wish you Quick recovery Liz.

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Just coming across your blog and I found the contents very educative. About your health I pray you get well soon.

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Your videos are helpful. I wish you a quick recovery! Wish you all the best! Take care of yourself!

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Mam your videos have really helped me a lot and I don’t have words to thank you❤ You are an amazing teacher❤ And I pray that you get well soon and may God always blesses you with good health and prosperity❤

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So sorry to hear about your illness. Pls get well soon and do take care of yourself. Sending you hugs

Thanks so much

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Hi Liz I’m so sad after saw your reply to others said your not very well. I hope you get well soon. You’re a fantastic teacher and I am much more confident after watching a few videos of yours. You are such a kind lady. Please let us know when you recover. Please have more rest. XXX

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Hi.. Miss Liz, nowadays I’m doing self studies for my IELTS.Your lessons are really helpful and worth.Thank you very much..I wish you speedy recovery & god bless you..

Thanks. Good luck with your studies 🙂

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God and all students are with you, Liz . Praying from Nepal💌

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Hello Liz, how are you doing. May I ask you something? Why don’t you make video’s anymore? Are you okay?

I’m actually really sick. I’ve been sick for many years which is why I can’t make any more videos. When I get better, I’ll start making more videos.

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Dear Liz, so sorry to hear that. Hope you will get well soon. May Allah bless you. Take care of yourself ❤️

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Madam, I sincerely wish you all the best and may you recover soon and make more videos.

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Hello Ma’am, I am so sorry to hear that you have been suffering from bad health for the last few years. I give you the best wishes for your speedy recovery. Wishing to hear you with a piece of good news about your health through a video🙂

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May the almighty Allah grant you a quick recovery. You are an amazing teacher. How can I enroll in your courses? I’m struggling with wiring and reading.

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Get well soon Liz..we love you😞❣️

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I pray God heals you. I love your videos and it has been helpful to so many people. God will grant you recovery. You’ll be added in my prayers

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The chat illustrates the spending of the people of 2 countries, namely UK and France in the year 2010 on 4 items such as cars, computers, books, perfumes and cameras. The expenditures are measured in pounds sterling.

Overall, British spent much more compared to the French on consumer products in 2010. The people of UK spent more on the cars, books and cameras compared to the people of France, whereas the people of France spent more on computers and perfumes compared to the people of England. People of both the countries spent most in buying cars and spent least on buying perfumes in general.

In the UK, people spent most, about half a million pounds, for buying cars as oppose to people in France who spent 400,000 pounds for the same. Similarly, while the British bought books more often, spending about 400,000 pounds, perfumes were least popular, amounting to just about 100,000 pounds of expenditure.

On the contrary, books were less popular in France amounting to annual spending of about 300,000 pounds and perfumes more preferred, amounting to about 100,000 pounds of expense. The French overall spent most on computers after cars, with an annual expenditure of about 400,000 as oppose to British spending just about 300,000 on the same items.

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The bar charts show the expenditure of France and UK on consumer goods in 2010. Units are measured in pounds sterling. Generally speaking, while the most significant difference to purchase the Camara was between UK and France. UK spent more money to consume the goods in 2011.car,book and camera were purchased by UK where was spent money more than 1275000 pounds sterling for these three goods in the period of time. Looking specialy, least of the amount of money spent to purchase the perfume in UK. Regarding to the France enrollment France spent the highest amount of money on cars. Where, These all goods consumed above 1525000 pounds sterling in 2010.

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The chart illustrates the amount of money spent by 2 countries France and the UK on 5 different consumer items (cars, computers, books, perfume, cameras) in 2010. Units are measured in pound sterling. Overall, the expenditure of the UK is higher than France. Both of the countries expend the most amount on cars while the UK spent the least amount on perfume compared to cameras in France. In terms of cars, the British spent around £450,000, in the contrast, it was exactly £400,000 in French. Same the expenditure on books in the UK are higher than in France (about £400,000 and £300,000 respectively). On the other hand, French consumption on computers was more than £350,000 whereas on perfume was perfectly £200,000, which was higher than British £350,000 on computers and below than £150,000 on perfume. But, about the expenditure on cameras, England spent more than £350,000 which was 3 times more than France, which was just £150,000.

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Thank you mam for your guidance. I have received my IELTS result and I have scored pretty much a good band score. I have followed all your lessons, videos, and all the content you have made us available for. A few months ago I have started preparing for IELTS from your lessons and believe me mam this is the best platform to learn for IELTS. All the small and tricky tips you have taught were very very useful and helped me to score a good band score. Thank you mam for your teachings and guidance.Respect for you.

Great to hear your news! Well done 🙂

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The bar chart illustrates the annual spending of France and the United Kingdom on five types of consumer items in 2010 measured in pounds sterling. Overall, the United Kingdom spent a bigger amount of money on these commodities compared to France, whereas the expenditure on cars is the highest out of the other four consumer goods.

Initially, the UK people expend more on cars than French, about L450,000 and L400,000 respectively. Likewise, books are the other commodities where UK people spent more compared to French, with around L300,000 and L400,000 respectively. Similarly, people in the UK expend about L350,000 on cameras, significantly higher compared to French with around L200,000 difference.

In contrast, the budget of French people on computers above L350,000, which was slightly higher than the counterpart. People of France also spent their money at about L200,000 at that year on perfume, considerably higher than the UK people who only spent under L150,000.

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Hello liz, I am an English teacher in a country where English is used as a second language. I really find interest in your video classes. All classes are full of meaning lessons. Not only that, every minutes of your classes is important. Thanks a lot for your efforts to us. We are really grateful to you. Love Saiful Sarker

Thanks for your message. I love to hear from a fellow teacher. I’m glad you find my lessons useful 🙂

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Hi Liz! I prefer listening to your videos because you deliver each lesson very clearly. Your tips helped me a lot. I will be having my IELTS soon, it will be computer-delivered and I would like to know if there would be an automatic word count on where we will be doing our writing task?

Most people report having a word count option on the computer based test. However, don’t rely on it being there. There may be variations based on country or test centre. Good luck in your test 🙂

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In which tense we should write if not any dates are given in any charts. mainly in bar charts.

If there are no dates and the description doesn’t refer to the past or future, then you should use the present.

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Hi Liz, I just want to know that overview should be written in last or after introduction?

Both places are fine.

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Hi Liz The challenge in writing task 1 is the time allocated to write about the graph and figures. Within only 20 minutes, you are supposed to analyze the information, identify the key features, think of how to paraphrase the topic for the introduction and create different ways of comparing the data in the graph, not to mention being at pain to invent some cohesive devices for your writing. Do you think an English native speaker can do this with ease? Thanks a lot

Yes, if you train to do it. Each particular type of task 1 has its own approach and its own way of presenting data. All you need to do is learn the techniques for each type.

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I’m grateful for all that you share🤗

Exactly my point but I think with constant practice, it wont be an issue.May God help us all,Amen.

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Hi Liz, Can I use present tense always while writing in task 1 even though it talks about the past years in the graph?

Grammar is 25% of your marks and that includes using the right tense. If it is in the past, you should use past tense.

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The chart illustrates the amount spent by France and the UK on consumer goods for the year 2010. The units are measured in pound sterling. Overall, both France and the UK spent maximum amount on the cars, while the minimum amount was spent on perfume by the UK, whereas, France spent minimum on cameras. From the observation, the expenditure of the UK was higher for cars, books and cameras as compared to France. The UK spent around 450,000 pounds on cars, whereas, 400,000 pounds was spent by France. The difference of 100,000 pounds was seen on the expenditure of books where the British spent just above 400,000 pounds. The UK spent around 350,000 pounds on cameras which is the double the amount as the French spent. On contrary, France paid higher the amount on computers and perfume as compared to the UK. The amount spent by French was below 400,000 pounds while the UK spent 350,000 pounds on computers. Just below 150,000 pounds was paid on perfume by the British, whereas, France expenditure was 200,00 pounds.

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Thank you so much for your help

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Will I be penalized for crossing the word limit on any of the writing tasks?

Your aim is to go over the word limit. See this page: https://ieltsliz.com/how-many-words-ielts-writing/

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What if, when it goes more than 250 words for writing task 1 to explain the big charts.

You will be marked down. Your task is to present key information and trends. You must not get lost in small detail.

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Thank very much, Liz This is very useful chart for IELTS writing task 1, Liz explains a way that everyone understands. Thank for shown us the way, Liz.

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Hi liz. Good luck!

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Hi Liz, Wishing you all the best. can I use the sequence ( Introduction , Body paragraph A, Body paragraph B, Overall), instead of ( Introduction, Overall , Body paragraph A, Body Paragraph B) ? Thanks Stay blessed , stay safe.

Sure. See this page to learn about writing task 1 including paragraphing: https://ieltsliz.com/ielts-writing-task-1-lessons-and-tips/

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The bar graph compares the money expenses of the UK and France on five different goods in the year 2010. Overall, it is readily apparent that the UK spent more on consumer goods than in France. Other features that stand out most are the highest amount of money spent on cars for both countries while the least significant is perfume in the UK and cameras in France.

In regard to cars, the UK expenditure was over 450,000 pounds, being higher than France by 50,000 pounds. Also, the figures for books were almost identical, with 400,000 pounds of expenses in the UK while 300,000 pounds in France. Interestingly, the number of expenditures on cameras in the UK was over 350,000 pounds, which outraced the amount in France with only 150,000 pounds.

However, when it comes to computers, the figure for France, which was around 375,000 pounds, exceed the UK with about 25,000 pounds. Similarly, while perfume was the least important in the UK with only 140,000 pounds of expenses, France was much higher by 60,000 pounds.

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hi liz in ielts do they only ask ques on chart or is there more types can u plz tell me the types of ques they can ask

Go to the HOME page and open the link to Writing Task 1 – you will find everything you need to know.

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Hi Liz! İs it okay not to use symbols ,if we do not know exactly how to write it? for ex “pound sterling” instead of symbol thanks<3

There are certain symbols which we nearly always use instead of a word, such as £, $ and %. It is fine to use them. The only time we use “&” is when we are texting so it isn’t suitable for formal writing.

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Thank you Liz

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Hi Liz, Is it informal when we use the brackets in this task?

It is completely normal for some stats to be presented in brackets in an IELTS task 1 report.

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Hello, Liz! Is there a pounds sterling symbol provided on the keyboard during CBT? This refers to all other special symbols as well. I found the pounds sterling symbol eventually by guess, but this takes time which is precious during the exam.

This is a very good question which you can ask you test centre about. It important that you ask as many questions to them about their equipment before the test day so that you feel confident and prepared to go in and do your best. If you get an answer from them, let me know what it is. It’s always useful to see how test centres respond.

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How to use word infographic in writing task 1

It is not a word that is needed in IELTS Writing task 1. Not at all needed.

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Hello Liz I have a doubt regarding the logic behind separation of body paragraphs that do I have to follow a set of rules for the division ,or I can come up with my own logic. If I have to follow a certain logic then can you please tell me where can I find those set of rules. Thank you Yatharth Mishra

You are being marked on logical organisation which also helps group key information together. The bar chart above is a chart of comparison, so you look for categories to compare which have similar key features. This is the logical way to organise this report. The organisation is also highlighted in the overview by stressing the key features which will inevitably be used to structure the paragraphs. There are no set rules – you need to interpret the data, spot similarities and differences and organise accordingly. This is what you are being tested on as part of the marking criterion of Coherence and Cohesion which counts for 25% of your marks.

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Hi Lizz! Can we leave space between every paragraph mean when we done with introduction so can we leave one line between each parargraph? Like introduction then one line space after that “overview” then one line space after that ” body paragraphs”.. Is it right way to write an essay??

This is the recommended way for both task 1 and task 2 writing. It helps make the paragraphs easy to see.

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I have a doubt in this paragraph, as you had said that we can’t use the same vocabulary more times but you have used “expenditure” 3 times is it correct?

can you please let me know how many times a vocab can be used in writing so that we don’t lose the marks.

Thanks Love from India

Of course you can use words more than once. Some words will be repeated because they don’t have many options for paraphrasing. IELTS is not a trick test. Choose which words to paraphrasing and choosing how many paraphrases those words have. Not all words need to be changed.

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Hi Liz, In the paragraph, you have written (was over double that of France) is correct or it’s ( than of France)?

It’s correct. “that” refers to the amount.

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Thank you so much for your effort, your blog is really amazing. I have a question, you said in the listening section that either all the answers are written in capital letters or all of them are written in small letters, does that apply to the writing section as well ? I mean if I write my answers in capital letters in listening so even in writing section my answers have to be in capital ? Thanks in advance

For the writing test, you should write normally with grammatically correct use of capital letters. Your use of appropriate capital letters will be marked as part of the criterion for grammar.

Okay thank you so much

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Thank you so much Liz for sharing all this for free. What are the differences, if any, between the writing of general and academic tests? Thank you.

Please go to the RED MENU BAR and open the drop down options for Test Info. You will find a page for GT and Academic differences.

Thank you Liz.

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Thanks liz mam you are ossomm. Your ideas are extremely helpful for ielts students..

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Can i use moreover ,however,buy ,yet ,in addition to .in tast 1

Yes, you can. You can see some of them used in my model answers on this page: https://ieltsliz.com/ielts-writing-task-1-lessons-and-tips/

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Hi Liz, first of all I wanted to thank you for your amazing help! I also wanted to ask if it is okay not to write a conclusion, which I’m used to doing both in English and in my mother tongue, if I write the overview first. Do you think I’d lose points if I write both an overview and at the end a conclusion? (not with the same words/ exact content)

Thank you in advance😙

See this page: https://ieltsliz.com/ielts-writing-task-1-lessons-and-tips/ There’s a video about an overview/conclusion.

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Is it okay if I put some details in bullet points under one of the paragraph in writing task 1? For example… I request he hotel manager to provide the below mentioned details. 1. what kind of services your company offer? 2 . what kind of rooms available your hotel? 3…. 4…. 5….

Is it okay to use such structure?

You are being marked on grammar. Sentence structures are 25% of your marks – no notes, no bullet points. Just paragraphs and full sentences exactly the same as I have in my model answers.

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Hi Liz, Thanks again for your amazing website. My question is that is it okay to have an overview without any data given? For example here, it just shows the key features and the data are only included in the next body paragraphs.

Most overviews present key features rather than data. The only time I might include data in an overview is if the total is given with a table – but that isn’t a rule, it’s just my way of tackling things.

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The bar diagram manifests the information regarding spending of two countries (France and UK ) on top five accessories(cars, computers, books, perfumes and cameras) in 2010. Units are measured in pound sterling.

Overall, the trend of spending money in UK was higher than that of France. Also, cars were most popular items in both of these countries as both of them spent lots of money on it. Incontrast, prefume was the less preferred product in UK where as it was camera in case of france.Furthermore, the significant differences on expenditure between these two countries was on camera.

It can be seen that spending on cars , books and cameras were much more higher in UK comparing to France as they spend around $450000, $400000 and $350000 respectivelly on it . However it was almost $400000, $ 300000 and $ 150000 accordingly in case of France.

In contrast, computers and perfumes were less preferred products in UK by contributing about $340000 and $150000 respectivelly while people from france spent about $ 370000 and $200000 accordingly on it.

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I would like to know whether we can use merely instead of mere as shown in the above writing sample.

Is it correct to say : The energy produced by coal comprised of 29.80 % in the year 1995 and it showed a slight increase i.e. merely 1 percent in the year 2005.

Thank you Harpreet

“ie” is when you are giving examples. There are no examples in writing task 1. There is actual data – not examples of data. For this reason, your sentence is incorrect.

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“ie” refers to ‘id est’ in Latin, meaning ‘this is’ or ‘in other words’. “eg” refers to ‘exempli gratia’, meaning ‘for example’. These are highly used in scientific writing, but I would avoid using them in IELTS as the examiner may get confused between the two.

The examiner would not get confused between the two at all. The reason you don’t use them is because you want to demonstrate your range of linking words – such as, for example, to illustrate, namely etc – this is about knowing the band scores, knowing marking criteria for IELTS and understanding how to maximise your score in the right way.

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Honorable teacher,in paragraph 2 you used French and British,the name of the two nations instead of their country’s name.In the question we can see “the expenditure of two countries”.The assertion does not mean that all those expenditure were made by the citizen of those countries.For example,in France some expenditure can be made by Spanish people.So why will we say them French expenditure?

Because it is standard language accepted in report writing. When we see figures for British exports – it does not mean that all exports were by British citizens rather than the statistics come from the country.

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Hii ma’am

Your way of teaching is quite fascinating, in other word so sweet.beside its seems that your all videos on youtube is so old so is there any mkst recent videos on writing or reading ??

The test has not changed. Those videos are 100% essential today.

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Hello Liz. Can we use ” (450.000 and 300.000 respectively) ” to give details about money or numbers in real exam?

Any language used in my model answers is suitable for IELTS.

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Hi Liz, Your video are great and very useful. If possible can you give me an explanation on the usage of “as opposed” and any other similar words which can boost my writing. I was fascinating, will it be good to add a conclusion part in the writing task? I have 4 days for my exam. Can you please advise on how to plan my preparation?

Go to the writing task 1 section and writing task 2 section of this site for linking words and more. Use the RED MENU BAR.

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Hi Liz Thanks for your tips, practice questions and model answers. It is beneficial. Also, while reading the model answer, I was confused about whether to use “was or were” in the last paragraph sentence ” spent by the French on computers was slightly more.” Does it hold the subject-verb agreement?

The word “computers” is not the subject to the verb in that clause.

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hello ma’am, I would love to know if the charts are also for the general test or just academics.

See this page and read the information carefully: https://ieltsliz.com/ielts-writing-task-1-lessons-and-tips/

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Is it okay to say ” Overall , the UK” to ” Overall , UK has spent….”

“the UK” is grammatically correct. “UK” without “the” is not correct. You need to learn which country names use “the” and which do not.

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Then “the France” will be corrected or only France will be true?

“France” does not have “the” in front of it. “England” does not have “the” in front of it. “The UK” does. Please google this or check a grammar books.

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I want to know if it is ok to write everything in Capital Letters in Computerized version of IELTS in Writing, Reading and Listening exam ?

It’s fine for listening and reading, but not recommended for writing. You need to show correct use of capital letters for the marking criterion of grammar in IELTS writing.

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You are so cute mam. I think I m falling love with your assent . Thanks you for giving us such a knowledge about IELTS … I love you mam

I’m glad you like my lessons 🙂

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I got the Cambridge guide to Ielts for my self study. In the writing section they have strictly mentioned that task 1 should have a maximum of 150 words and task 2 of 250 words. But here in your model answer the words are more than 200. I guess they have updated it. Just wanted you to know that.

And I even have a question. You said they count the currency symbol as a word so what about ),( and % ?.

You need to check the instructions again. The instructions are “no less than 150 words”. 150 words for task 1 is a minimum – not the maximum.

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Hello mam, I think so word limit is exceeding Thankyou

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Good organization of work. Have learnt something. But wanted to know the difference between pie and bar chart. Do the contents in the introduction and overview the same?

See this page: https://ieltsliz.com/ielts-writing-task-1-lessons-and-tips/

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Hello Miss less hope you are good I have a doubt Can we use side topics or side headings such as introduction explanation for overview and finally for conclusion like this?

All task 1 reports and task 2 essays should be written exactly as shown in my model answers. If I don’t use headings, you don’t use headings.

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i’m not sure, if we can use the British and the French, since there are also foreigners live or travel and buy something as souvenirs there, like book and perfume. The chart only ilustrates the amount of money spent on consumer goods in two countries, without dividing the consumer. What do you think?

It’s fine to do this in IELTS.

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But UK and Britain are not the same, Britain along with Northern Ireland is a part of UK so you can not call the people of whole UK British. Does that effect the score though?

You are confusing “English” and “British”. The nationality of all people in the UK is British. They are all British citizens. However, people from England call themselves English and people from Scotland call themselves Scottish – regardless – they are still legally British citizens – that is their formal nationality. If you are unsure of nationalities, please review them carefully for task 1.

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i,m sorry maam but i think that money is countable while milk.water,oil,etc are uncountable. correct me if i,m wrong.thanks

That is not correct. We never have “a money”. The word “money” is uncountable.

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Hi dear Lis

isnt it wrong using on the other hand without mentioning on one hand?

IT is completely fine to do that. It’s fine to use “on the other hand” without “on the one hand”. But you can’t use “on the one hand” without “on the other hand”.

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Greeting, liz!

thank you for remarkable example for wrting task 1 but i have one question. If i followed this method exactly like what you did for the concept. Will i acquire a 9 score for sure?

Your score is based on Task Achievement (the key features you choose and how you group information), Coherence & Cohesion, Vocabulary and Grammar. So, just following a structure is only one part of one criterion. You must show skills in all four areas and have excellent language skills to get band 9.

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Dear Liz, quick question. The last paragraph looks a bit long without any comma or full stop. It’s that OK?

I’m not sure which paragraph you are referring to. The last paragraph is:

It has three sentences in it. Is this the paragraph you mean?

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Greetings, Liz! Is it necessary to begin the overview with the word ‘overall’? Is there no other alternative?

regards Joy

IT is the best word to use that indicates an overview. Remember this is a factual report, not creative writing. You don’t get a higher score because you used a different word. You get a higher score because you avoid errors and use language appropriately.

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hi liz, is it allowed to leave one empty line to start a new paragraph in writing tasks? thanks

IT is recommended to do that.

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Hello Liza , I have a doubt that the prepositions will be count as a word or not . Please reply me struggling with this doubt!

All words are counted – it doesn’t matter how big or how small or if they are in brackets – all words. (20 words).

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So we should leave one empty line between paragraphs?

It is the best way to make the paragraphs easy for the examiner to read.

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